A long short story that can’t be tamed – I always wanted to rescue a damsel in distress – 2

Two

Not the police.

“I think you have the wrong flat,” I said.

I went to close the door, but a size 20 shoe was blocking it.

“Where is Jake Mistrale?”

Heavily accented English, this man was a thug of the worst order.  There was nothing polite about his manner.  I needed to think quickly some way of getting rid of this man.  He was more than likely the one who tossed the flat before we arrived.

“I’ll tell you what.  We can keep talking, you could do something really stupid and break-in, and we can wait for the police to arrive.  I’m sure I’m not the only one who would like to know who you are, and who you work for.”

“You are bluffing.  There is no police.  Where is Jake?”

“I have a question, where is Cecile?”

He looked surprised.  “I do not know who this Cecile is.”

“I think she was Jake’s friend, and they are both missing, and I think you know where she is.”

We both heard the footsteps on the landing, just before reaching the floor.  The man looked sideways in the direction of the stairs, then, without waiting to see who it was, started walking in the opposite direction.  There must be another flight of stairs around the back.

Then two men appeared at the top of the stairs.  These men definitely looked like the police.

Both seemed to be surprised I was outside in the passage, perhaps to greet them before stepping into the room.  Another two, a man and a woman, dressed in protective clothing, followed them.

The first introduced himself.  “My name is Detective Inspector Chandler.”  The other man, now beside him, pulled out his warrant card, as Chandler said, “DS Williams.”

Hearing voices, or perhaps wondering what had happened to me, Emily came out into the passage.

“Ah, you must be Emily.  I spoke to your father about two hours ago, and he said you should be here.  Now, I will need you to remain outside while the forensic team does its magic.”

With that, the two forensic officers went in, and DS followed them, putting on a pair of rubber gloves.

“We didn’t touch anything, by the way.”  She then pulled a photo of Cecile out of her bag and handed it to Chandler.

I was waiting to see if she mentioned the note Cecile left.  If she did, I would hand it over, if she didn’t that would be our starting point.  If we didn’t make any progress, I would give it to Chandler and let him get on with the job.

He looked at it.  “I take it this is recent?”

Emily nodded.

“Anything else you can tell me?”

“We know she had a boyfriend named Jake who was not who she thought he was, that she was here a few days ago, and perhaps some of the others living here might know something.  We were going to start knocking on doors, but now that you’re here, we’ll get out of your hair and let you do your job.  I’ve put my phone number, and James too, just in case you can’t get me.”

Chandler turned to me.  “Where do you fit in?”

“Jake’s last name was Mistrale, by the way.  As for me, I’m an old family friend.  I received a text message a few days ago, which seemed rather odd, so we came over to see if everything was alright.  As you can see, when we saw this, things are not alright.”

“Do you have that phone with you?”

I did but I was not sure I wanted to give it up, but a glare told me I had to.  I found the text message and gave him the phone.

“Can we hang on to this until tomorrow?”  He gave me what looked like a business card with his address on it.  “You’ll be able to pick it up tomorrow morning.  I’ll get the tech guys to see if they can trace where that message came from.”

“No problems,” I said with a measure of reluctance.  Although it was unlikely, she might try to call or text again.

“Now, there’s nothing more you can do here.  I’ve got your numbers, and I expect I’ll see you tomorrow morning, by which time we should have made some progress.”

Nothing left to say, he went into the flat.

“Time to go,” Emily said.  “We have to get back to the hotel.”

It was loud enough that Chandler would hear her, but I knew what she meant.  Time to go to the hotel that featured in the note.

When we reached street level and outside of the block of flats, I had to ask, “Why didn’t you mention the note?”

“Because we would have to give it to him and lose the one clue we had.  If it doesn’t pan out then we can say we forgot about it, no harm done.  Telling him would only stop us from the investigation, and, if the police go there, anyone who might be able to help us would be less likely to help the police.”

I hadn’t thought of it like that, but it was a valid point.

“So, where is this hotel?” She asked with a touch of impatience in her tone.

“A fair distance away tucked away not far from Whitehall and past, if I’m not mistaken, Horseguards Parade.  We might get to take in a bit of British history in the process.”

©  Charles Heath  2024

365 Days of writing, 2026 – 6

Day 6 – Writing exercise

Writing exercise

You’ve got a habit of being in the wrong place, don’t you, Sam? But this time…

Everyone was busy.  

The morning meeting, where the boss sat at the head of a long table, and the writing staff sat, waiting for either a bollocking or an assignment, had travelled along the usual path.

The boss was the typical editor, loud, opinionated, and acerbic.  Very few could remember him being complimentary.

I sat at the end of the table, the opposite end, and as far away from him as I could get.  He hated me more than any other.

I looked around.

Whether or not they liked their assignments or the request for a rewrite, it was hard to tell.  No one wanted to be seen shirking.

Yes, he called it shirking if you were not pounding the keyboard, working on tomorrow’s news today.

And because he hated me, I was last, got the full-on death stare and then in those oily words dispensed with forced amiability, “Jacobs, you got the dead guy, what’s his name, Rickard, Richard…”

“Ricardo,” a mousey voice called out, his current ‘favourite’.

“That dead guy.  A thousand scintillating words.”

Then the expansive glare around the table, “Well, what are you lot waiting for?”

Al, just up from me, muttered, under his breath, “A written invitation.”  As he did in every meeting.

Another obituary.  Another nobody that needed life breathed into the corpse. 

A gopher dropped a file on my desk as he went past, not stopping.  Not worth the five minutes of hell from the boss about wasting time on idle chatter.

A single page, a name, and an address.  Several notes that highlighted a nothing life.  Too young to have a life.  Too young to die.  Too young for scintillating words.

Cause of death?  Heart failure.

His photo belied the notion that he had anything remotely wrong with his heart.  Adonis himself would be jealous.

Coroner’s report?  Heart failure, cause unknown.

Not obese, not too thin, none of the danger signs that he was heart attack material, I knew my way around a medical report and this one?

Something was not right.  Was the boss testing me, see if I could see if there was anything more?

Of course, I’d been down this path before and come a cropper.  No, the boss took anything I requested with a grain of salt.

“Just report the facts.  Don’t embellish, don’t add your suspicions, ten times out of ten you’re going to be wrong.”

And infurioratingly he was right.

Which meant I had to get creative.

The name Freddie Ricardo brought up 100,000 plus hits on the search engine, but I found one entry that pointed to an Instagram page that loaded, then disappeared.

Like completely disappeared, returning a 404 error when I tried to reload it.  Someone had deleted it just after I found it.

Why?

Who would care?

From the fleeting look I got of it, it was just a guy’s page that had photos of him and friends guzzling beer and either hunting, fishing or acting stupid.

Very unaccountant-like. 

Next step, go to the address.

A suburban street, quiet, an old house, run down and in need of repair, garden overgrown.  Two car wrecks in the front yard, and an antique car in the driveway.

I sat outside the house for an hour, not a creature stirred, not even a mouse.  The car suggested someone was inside, but they didn’t look out the windows, and they didn’t turn any lights on.

At the end of the hour, I got out of the car and walked over to the front door.  The fence was falling over, the gate off its hinges, held up by the weeds and growth around it.

The door had peeling paint, but the lock and handle were new.  The verandah boards were rotting and in places broken.  They creaked as I walked on them.

I knocked.  No answer. 

I checked the car in the driveway.  A fine film of dust covered it, telling me it hadn’t moved in days, maybe a week.

One of the neighbours came out and looked over.

“Who are you?”  It wasn’t a polite question.

“Does Freddie Ricardo live here?”

“Did.  Who wants to know?”

“I’m from the newspaper, asked to do a small piece on him.”

“No need.  He wouldn’t want it.”

“Anyone else live here?”

“His sister.  She ain’t here at the moment.  I’m keeping an eye on the place.  Now, I suggest you leave.”

A sister.  Rather a large omission in the briefing paper provided.  Research was slipping.

“Fair enough.”

A last look, I went back to the car.  I waited, but the neighbour didn’t leave his porch.  When he reached for his cell phone, I left.

Before going back to the office, I went to the city administration building and met up with an acquaintance who got me a copy of the deed for the house.

It had belonged to the parents, then was handed down to the elder daughter, Bethany.  There were only two of them, Bethany and Freddie.  He didn’t have a stake in the house.

I ran Bethany’s name in the search engine, and it brought back a few thousand hits, the first with a picture of a brother and sister on the front porch.

The second was a photo of her in a gondola in Venice with a man, Italian perhaps.  She didn’t look happy.

From what I could see, the brother and sister were not similar, so maybe step-siblings. 

Bethany also had titles to three other houses in the city.  Perhaps she lived at one of those addresses and let her little brother stay at the address I called on.

Another acquaintance looked up the car registrations, and for the other cars the siblings had, of which there were four, including one for Freddie.

It was not mentioned in the police report at the crime scene, nor was it at the house, so it might still be somewhere else.

I had another five pieces of paper to go with the photo of the victim and the coroner’s report.  It didn’t amount to much.

I thought about inventing a thousand words and making him a traitor, but the boss would see through it.

The alternative wasn’t much better; tell him I had nothing, well, suspicions.

I knocked on the door, and he growled something unintelligible.  Not a good day.

“What have you got?”  He didn’t look up.

“Missing car, expensive.  Job belies the income to have it.   Looks belie the cause of death.”

“And you infer?”

“Drugs, using, selling.  Has a sister in Italy, or not?  Needs a deep dive.”

“Is that it?”

“Been to the house.  Looks like a mess, but I checked the values.  It’s a gold mine for someone.”

“No one home?”

“Not for a week.”

“Talk to your police friends, see if they’ve got a rap sheet.  Police miss the car?”

“Not in their report, not where he died.”

He looked up.  “Find it, find the sister, talk to the neighbours.  Go.”

No third degree, so sarcasm, just barked orders.  But I wasn’t going to count the chickens just yet.

3am was always the best time to surprise people.  My father once said that the best time to get answers was when people were unprepared.

He had been a policeman and kicked doors in at or just before dawn.  Disorientation, gear, terror at dawn.  Worked a treat.

I wasn’t kicking the door in.  I was visiting.

And hopefully the house was still empty.

The back window was unlocked and opened easily.  I was able to get to the back because of a quirk in the planning of the estate.  The house had a narrow walkway behind it, a public thoroughfare.

At 3 a.m., no one would be about.

I hope.

There wasn’t.  The back fence was as bad as the front, with a gap wide enough to squeeze through.  The back yard was worse than the front, three cars hidden by undergrowth.

Tripped once and crashed into a car.  It hurt

It took a few minutes to get inside.  It smelled badly of wet paper and damp.  The floorboards creaked.  Several pilot lights were giving off just enough light to see by, once my eyes adjusted.

Signs of recent habitation.  Fast food wrappers, health drinks, cigarette butts, and beer cans.  Half-eaten food with mould.  A week, perhaps longer, since anyone was there.

Upstairs.

The reason for the bad smell.

A body, not the sister, but a woman. 

No sign of a bag.  Dead, checked while trying not to be sick, downstairs, found the bag, wallet, ID.  Jessie Walker.  This was the residential address; her car was outside.

Long enough to find nothing else.  If the place had been tossed, it was done by a professional.

I left.

Found a phone booth and called the police to report the body.

I got back to my car to find two men waiting.  There wasn’t much use in running.

“At it again, Sam?”

The two cops that my father had asked to keep me on the straight and narrow.

“What do you mean?”

“Don’t insult us, Sam.  You know what we’re talking about.  You can’t be poking around crime scenes.”

How did they know where I’d been?  I’d only just called it in.

They knew.  I’d known my father had not exactly been clean, not as clean as he said he was, and besides, clean cops were not murdered in a mob hit. No, these were two acolytes.

“How do you…”

Lance, the more senior of the two, shook his head. “Tsk, task, Sam.  Wrong place, wrong time.  Don’t make a habit of it now, will you, son?”

I shook my head in that obedient fashion they liked.

“Good boy.”  Borg patted me on the head like I was a good boy.  I was anything but.  A chip off the old block.

“Good lad.  Leave this one alone.”

A parting pat on the back, and they left.  Was I going to heed good advice?  No.  I waited for an hour, and then I started searching for details on the internet.

Jessie Walker was famous.  Over a million hits in the search engine, and fascinating in death as much as she was in life.  For a police commissioner’s wife of three weeks.

She looked so much more interesting alive when splashed all over the front page of the city daily.  In death, she would barely rate a second glance.

And what did she have to do with Freddie and Bethany Riccardo?  Tomorrow was not going to be a good day.

©  Charles Heath  2025

Top 5 sights on the road less travelled – Pretoria

Discover Pretoria’s Hidden Gems: Top 5 Under-the-Radar Attractions with Breathtaking Character

Pretoria, South Africa’s administrative capital, is often lauded for its grand government buildings like the iconic Union Buildings and the Voortrekker Monument. However, beyond its political skyline lie quieter, lesser-known treasures that offer unique experiences without the bustling crowds. If you’re seeking tranquillity and rich cultural or natural features, here are five must-visit spots in Pretoria that are off the tourist radar but well worth exploring.


1. Tafelberg Ridge: A Hiker’s Paradise with Panoramic Vistas

Tucked just southeast of Pretoria city centre, Tafelberg Ridge is a geological marvel and a haven for outdoor enthusiasts. This iconic rock formation, also known as “The Table,” rises 150 meters above the surrounding plains and boasts the oldest known rock art in southern Africa—dating back over 2,000 years—created by the San people.

  • Why Visit?
    Hike or rock-climb to the summit for breathtaking 360° views of Pretoria and the surrounding Highveld. The well-maintained trails cater to all fitness levels, and the ridge’s historical significance adds an educational layer to your adventure.
  • Crowd Tip: Early mornings or weekdays ensure solitude and are perfect for capturing sunrise photos or soaking in the serenity.

2. Pretoria National Botanical Garden: A Verdant Escape

This 280-hectare haven, located on the banks of the Apies River, is a lush sanctuary for nature lovers. Unlike the more crowded urban parks, the Pretoria National Botanical Garden offers a diverse array of indigenous flora, serene waterways, and a suspended canopy walkway.

  • Why Visit?
    Explore themed gardens like the Veld Reserve (showcasing natural landscapes) and the Rock Garden, stroll across the sky bridge for elevated views, or enjoy a peaceful picnic by the lake. It’s a living museum of South Africa’s biodiversity.
  • Crowd Tip: Weekdays are virtually empty, making it ideal for leisurely strolls or birdwatching among over 160 species.

3. Irene Village: A Step Back in Time

Nestled just outside Pretoria, Irene Village is a quaint, centuries-old settlement that retains its original charm. Once a strategic military town, it now offers a blend of history, architecture, and artisanal flair.

  • Why Visit?
    Wander cobbled streets lined with cobalt-blue houses, visit the Irene Museum (housed in a 19th-century inn), and enjoy farm-to-table dining at local cafés. The village’s tranquillity and preserved heritage make it a time capsule of old Pretoria.
  • Crowd Tip: Sundays are the quietest, perfect for exploring with a leisurely pace.

4. Church Square: Pretoria’s Cultural Heart

Right in the heart of Pretoria, Church Square is a dynamic yet surprisingly uncluttered space. Often overshadowed by its more ostentatious neighbours, this square is the focal point of the city’s cultural identity.

  • Why Visit?
    Admire the statue of Paul Kruger (South Africa’s first president), attend one of the weekly markets (Fridays and Saturdays), or enjoy street performances and weekend festivals. The square’s mix of politics, art, and history is palpable.
  • Crowd Tip: Weekdays are calm, offering a chance to reflect among the monuments and learn about Pretoria’s contested past.

5. Pretoria Prison: A Stark Glimpse into the Past

Now a museum, Pretoria Prison is a striking example of colonial-era architecture and a sobering look into South Africa’s political history. Built in 1888, it once held prominent figures like Nelson Mandela and Paul Kruger.

  • Why Visit?
    Walk through the same concrete cells and tunnels that imprisoned freedom fighters, and explore exhibits on the evolution of South Africa’s penal system. The prison’s eerie ambience and historical weight make it a unique and thought-provoking experience.
  • Crowd Tip: Public tours are intimate, with early morning slots being the least crowded.

Final Thoughts: Pretoria’s Quiet Side Awaits

Pretoria’s lesser-known attractions offer a quieter, more personal way to connect with the city’s rich heritage and natural beauty. Whether you’re hiking to the top of Tafelberg Ridge or sipping coffee in Irene Village, these destinations reveal Pretoria’s soul away from the usual tourist trails. So next time you visit, trade the postcards for a deeper, more reflective journey.

Pro Tip: Pair these experiences with a visit to the Union Buildings or Voortrekker Monument for the perfect mix of iconic and hidden Pretoria!

Ready to discover the unsung gems of Pretoria? Let the adventure begin! 🌿🌄

What I learned about writing – The art of effective self editing

Mastering Self-Editing: 10 Practical Techniques for Polished Writing

Self-editing is a vital skill for any writer. Whether you’re crafting a blog post, an academic essay, or a novel, the ability to refine your work independently can elevate your writing from good to exceptional. While peer feedback is invaluable, mastering self-editing ensures your drafts are clear, cohesive, and compelling before sharing them with others. Here are 10 practical strategies to enhance your self-editing process.


1. Step Away, Then Return with Fresh Eyes

Before diving into edits, take a break from your work. A few hours—or even a few days—can provide a new perspective. Distance allows you to approach your text as a reader, making it easier to spot inconsistencies, redundancy, or awkward phrasing. Rushing into edits while still in your “writing mindset” often causes you to overlook errors.


2. Read Aloud to Detect Rhythm and Flow

Reading your work aloud engages your senses differently. By hearing the words, you can identify clunky sentence structures, awkward word choices, and unintentional repetition. For example, a phrase like “The man who lived in the house was tired” might sound better as “The man in the house was tired.” Use this technique to fine-tune your writing’s cadence.


3. Leverage Technology, But Stay Sceptical

Grammar-check tools like Grammarly or Hemingway Editor are handy for catching typos and readability issues. However, these tools aren’t infallible. They might suggest grammatically correct but contextually odd changes. Use them as a starting point, then double-check with your own judgment. For instance, a tool might flag “I am” as redundant in a sentence when it’s actually necessary for clarity.


4. Tackle One Task at a Time

Editing is more effective when broken into focused tasks. Start with big-picture elements like structure and argument clarity, then move to line edits for sentence flow, and finally proofread for grammar and typos. This approach prevents overwhelm and ensures no detail is missed.


5. Trim the Fat: Delete Unnecessary Words

Concise writing is powerful. Remove redundant phrases like “in order to” (simply “to”) and vague fillers like “very” or “that.” For example, “She was a tall, slender woman” becomes “She was tall and slender.” A short list of common redundancies can help you systematically cut fluff.


6. Reverse Outline for Structure Checks

For longer pieces, summarise each paragraph in a separate document. This reverse outline helps identify plot holes, repetitive sections, or tangents. If your summary reads like a disjointed list, your draft likely needs reorganisation.


7. Maintain Consistency with a Style Sheet

Track key details like character names, technical terms, or formatting in a reference sheet. For example, if a character’s surname is “McGraw” in one chapter and “McGregor” in another, this tool ensures consistency. It’s especially crucial for novels or complex projects with recurring elements.


8. Seek Peer Feedback Strategically

While this post focuses on self-editing, one round of trusted feedback can illuminate blind spots. Share your work with peers who understand your goals and ask targeted questions: “Does the argument hold?” or “Is the tone consistent?” Use their insights to prioritise edits.


9. Use the Pomodoro Technique for Focus

Self-editing can feel marathon-like. Break it into shorter, intentional sessions: 25 minutes of focused editing followed by a 5-minute break. This method combats burnout and keeps your mind sharp for small details like punctuation or word choice.


10. Audit Passive Voice and Weak Nouns/Verbs

Overusing passive voice (“The cake was eaten”) can weaken prose. Replace with active voice (“She ate the cake”) unless passive is intentional. Similarly, swap weak verbs like “made a decision” with stronger alternatives like “decided.”


Conclusion: Sharpen Your Craft with Purpose

Effective self-editing is a balance of technique, patience, and critical thinking. By incorporating these strategies, you’ll refine your writing’s clarity, impact, and professionalism. Remember, even well-known authors like Maya Angelou and Stephen King relied on meticulous editing to shape their masterpieces. Start with one or two techniques, practice consistently, and watch your confidence—and your writing—grow.

What self-editing hacks have worked for you? Share your tips in the comments below!


This blog post blends actionable advice with relatable examples, offering writers a roadmap to polish their work independently. By prioritising structure, focus, and critical distance, you’ll transform self-editing from a chore into a rewarding part of your creative process.

Top 5 sights on the road less travelled – Abuja

Hidden Gems of Abuja: 5 Off-the-Beaten-Path Attractions You Shouldn’t Miss

Abuja, Nigeria’s capital city, is often celebrated for its wide boulevards, modern architecture, and bustling political hubs. While most tourists flock to well-known spots like the National Mosque, Millennium Park, or the Aso Rock Monument, there’s a quieter, more intimate side to Abuja that often goes unnoticed. Beyond the crowds lies a collection of serene, unique, and culturally rich attractions that offer a more personal and authentic experience.

If you’re looking to explore Abuja beyond the tourist brochures, here are the top five lesser-known yet distinctive attractions that promise tranquillity, beauty, and a touch of local charm—without the hustle and bustle.


1. Abuja National Zoo

Tucked away in the quieter Gwarimpa district, the Abuja National Zoo offers a peaceful escape into the world of Nigerian wildlife. Unlike the more crowded national parks, this compact zoo is family-friendly and sees far fewer visitors, making it ideal for a relaxed afternoon.

What makes it special?
Home to indigenous species like the Nigerian dwarf crocodile, West African manatees, and various primates, the zoo also features educational exhibits on conservation. The lush, well-maintained grounds include shaded walkways and picnic spots—perfect for nature lovers and families seeking a quiet day out.

Pro Tip: Visit on weekday mornings for an even more serene experience, and don’t miss the reptile house—it’s one of the few places in the country showcasing a dedicated collection of African reptiles.


2. Jabi Lake and Boat Club (Beyond the Kayaks)

While Jabi Lake is known for its weekend kayaking activities and lakeside cafes, few visitors venture beyond the main dock or the popular eateries. However, the surrounding trails and the quieter eastern shoreline offer a completely different vibe.

What makes it special?
Early mornings at the lake are magical—fog hovers above the water, birds call from the reeds, and fishermen paddle silently in wooden canoes. The lesser-used walking paths along the eastern bank provide scenic views and a chance to observe local life along the water’s edge. It’s a photographer’s dream and a meditative retreat from city noise.

Pro Tip: Bring a coffee from a nearby café and take a quiet stroll along the back trails before 8 AM to fully appreciate the lake’s tranquil beauty.


3. Kubwa Hills and Rock Formations

Located just a short drive from the city centre in the Kubwa neighbourhood, these natural rock formations rise dramatically from the savannah, offering panoramic views and a sense of untouched wilderness.

What makes it special?
Unlike Aso Rock, which is often crowded and surveilled, the Kubwa Hills are largely unmarked and unmanaged—making them perfect for adventurous travellers who enjoy hiking and solitude. The area is rich in geological history, with unique weathered granite outcrops and hidden caves. It’s also a favorite among local artists and spiritual groups, adding a subtle cultural layer to the landscape.

Pro Tip: Visit with a local guide or a trusted companion, wear comfortable shoes, and bring water—there are no facilities on-site. Sunset here offers one of the most underrated views in Abuja.


4. Arts Market at Sheraton Hotel (Abuja Arts & Crafts Market)

While many head to city malls and souvenir shops, the weekly arts and crafts market held outside the Sheraton Hotel (Friday afternoons to Sunday evenings) is a hidden treasure trove of Nigerian creativity.

What makes it special?
Here, you’ll find hand-carved sculptures, traditional fabrics, beadwork, and pottery from artisans across Nigeria’s 36 states. Because it’s not widely advertised, it attracts more locals than tourists, making it a genuine cultural exchange. The prices are fair, and vendors are happy to share stories behind their crafts.

Pro Tip: Go on a Saturday morning to see the most variety and engage with artists while they’re setting up their stalls. It’s a fantastic place to pick up authentic, one-of-a-kind souvenirs.


5. Nigeria Nuclear Regulatory Authority (NNRA) Garden and Sculpture Park

An unexpected gem, the NNRA premises in Jabi doubles as a hidden sculpture garden and green space. While the agency is operational, its front garden is open to the public and maintained like a mini-park.

What makes it special?
The space features abstract metal sculptures by Nigerian artists, serene water features, and winding pathways through thick foliage. The blend of art, nature, and science is unique—rarely seen elsewhere in the city. It’s an oasis of calm where you can sit, reflect, and enjoy a moment of quiet contemplation.

Pro Tip: Combine your visit with a stop at the nearby Jabi Lake or a quiet lunch at one of the less crowded local restaurants in Jabi Mall.


Final Thoughts: Discover a Different Abuja

Abuja is more than government buildings and grand monuments. Its quieter corners reveal a city rich in culture, nature, and local life. By stepping off the beaten path, you not only avoid the crowds but also gain a deeper appreciation for the capital’s soul.

So the next time you’re in Abuja—or planning a visit—skip the queues and embrace the serenity. These five spots may not be on every tourist map, but they promise experiences that are authentic, memorable, and refreshingly uncrowded.

Abuja’s best-kept secrets are waiting—will you go find them?


Have you visited any of these hidden spots? Share your experience in the comments below, or tag us on social media with your Abuja off-the-grid adventures!

365 Days of writing, 2026 – 6

Day 6 – Writing exercise

Writing exercise

You’ve got a habit of being in the wrong place, don’t you, Sam? But this time…

Everyone was busy.  

The morning meeting, where the boss sat at the head of a long table, and the writing staff sat, waiting for either a bollocking or an assignment, had travelled along the usual path.

The boss was the typical editor, loud, opinionated, and acerbic.  Very few could remember him being complimentary.

I sat at the end of the table, the opposite end, and as far away from him as I could get.  He hated me more than any other.

I looked around.

Whether or not they liked their assignments or the request for a rewrite, it was hard to tell.  No one wanted to be seen shirking.

Yes, he called it shirking if you were not pounding the keyboard, working on tomorrow’s news today.

And because he hated me, I was last, got the full-on death stare and then in those oily words dispensed with forced amiability, “Jacobs, you got the dead guy, what’s his name, Rickard, Richard…”

“Ricardo,” a mousey voice called out, his current ‘favourite’.

“That dead guy.  A thousand scintillating words.”

Then the expansive glare around the table, “Well, what are you lot waiting for?”

Al, just up from me, muttered, under his breath, “A written invitation.”  As he did in every meeting.

Another obituary.  Another nobody that needed life breathed into the corpse. 

A gopher dropped a file on my desk as he went past, not stopping.  Not worth the five minutes of hell from the boss about wasting time on idle chatter.

A single page, a name, and an address.  Several notes that highlighted a nothing life.  Too young to have a life.  Too young to die.  Too young for scintillating words.

Cause of death?  Heart failure.

His photo belied the notion that he had anything remotely wrong with his heart.  Adonis himself would be jealous.

Coroner’s report?  Heart failure, cause unknown.

Not obese, not too thin, none of the danger signs that he was heart attack material, I knew my way around a medical report and this one?

Something was not right.  Was the boss testing me, see if I could see if there was anything more?

Of course, I’d been down this path before and come a cropper.  No, the boss took anything I requested with a grain of salt.

“Just report the facts.  Don’t embellish, don’t add your suspicions, ten times out of ten you’re going to be wrong.”

And infurioratingly he was right.

Which meant I had to get creative.

The name Freddie Ricardo brought up 100,000 plus hits on the search engine, but I found one entry that pointed to an Instagram page that loaded, then disappeared.

Like completely disappeared, returning a 404 error when I tried to reload it.  Someone had deleted it just after I found it.

Why?

Who would care?

From the fleeting look I got of it, it was just a guy’s page that had photos of him and friends guzzling beer and either hunting, fishing or acting stupid.

Very unaccountant-like. 

Next step, go to the address.

A suburban street, quiet, an old house, run down and in need of repair, garden overgrown.  Two car wrecks in the front yard, and an antique car in the driveway.

I sat outside the house for an hour, not a creature stirred, not even a mouse.  The car suggested someone was inside, but they didn’t look out the windows, and they didn’t turn any lights on.

At the end of the hour, I got out of the car and walked over to the front door.  The fence was falling over, the gate off its hinges, held up by the weeds and growth around it.

The door had peeling paint, but the lock and handle were new.  The verandah boards were rotting and in places broken.  They creaked as I walked on them.

I knocked.  No answer. 

I checked the car in the driveway.  A fine film of dust covered it, telling me it hadn’t moved in days, maybe a week.

One of the neighbours came out and looked over.

“Who are you?”  It wasn’t a polite question.

“Does Freddie Ricardo live here?”

“Did.  Who wants to know?”

“I’m from the newspaper, asked to do a small piece on him.”

“No need.  He wouldn’t want it.”

“Anyone else live here?”

“His sister.  She ain’t here at the moment.  I’m keeping an eye on the place.  Now, I suggest you leave.”

A sister.  Rather a large omission in the briefing paper provided.  Research was slipping.

“Fair enough.”

A last look, I went back to the car.  I waited, but the neighbour didn’t leave his porch.  When he reached for his cell phone, I left.

Before going back to the office, I went to the city administration building and met up with an acquaintance who got me a copy of the deed for the house.

It had belonged to the parents, then was handed down to the elder daughter, Bethany.  There were only two of them, Bethany and Freddie.  He didn’t have a stake in the house.

I ran Bethany’s name in the search engine, and it brought back a few thousand hits, the first with a picture of a brother and sister on the front porch.

The second was a photo of her in a gondola in Venice with a man, Italian perhaps.  She didn’t look happy.

From what I could see, the brother and sister were not similar, so maybe step-siblings. 

Bethany also had titles to three other houses in the city.  Perhaps she lived at one of those addresses and let her little brother stay at the address I called on.

Another acquaintance looked up the car registrations, and for the other cars the siblings had, of which there were four, including one for Freddie.

It was not mentioned in the police report at the crime scene, nor was it at the house, so it might still be somewhere else.

I had another five pieces of paper to go with the photo of the victim and the coroner’s report.  It didn’t amount to much.

I thought about inventing a thousand words and making him a traitor, but the boss would see through it.

The alternative wasn’t much better; tell him I had nothing, well, suspicions.

I knocked on the door, and he growled something unintelligible.  Not a good day.

“What have you got?”  He didn’t look up.

“Missing car, expensive.  Job belies the income to have it.   Looks belie the cause of death.”

“And you infer?”

“Drugs, using, selling.  Has a sister in Italy, or not?  Needs a deep dive.”

“Is that it?”

“Been to the house.  Looks like a mess, but I checked the values.  It’s a gold mine for someone.”

“No one home?”

“Not for a week.”

“Talk to your police friends, see if they’ve got a rap sheet.  Police miss the car?”

“Not in their report, not where he died.”

He looked up.  “Find it, find the sister, talk to the neighbours.  Go.”

No third degree, so sarcasm, just barked orders.  But I wasn’t going to count the chickens just yet.

3am was always the best time to surprise people.  My father once said that the best time to get answers was when people were unprepared.

He had been a policeman and kicked doors in at or just before dawn.  Disorientation, gear, terror at dawn.  Worked a treat.

I wasn’t kicking the door in.  I was visiting.

And hopefully the house was still empty.

The back window was unlocked and opened easily.  I was able to get to the back because of a quirk in the planning of the estate.  The house had a narrow walkway behind it, a public thoroughfare.

At 3 a.m., no one would be about.

I hope.

There wasn’t.  The back fence was as bad as the front, with a gap wide enough to squeeze through.  The back yard was worse than the front, three cars hidden by undergrowth.

Tripped once and crashed into a car.  It hurt

It took a few minutes to get inside.  It smelled badly of wet paper and damp.  The floorboards creaked.  Several pilot lights were giving off just enough light to see by, once my eyes adjusted.

Signs of recent habitation.  Fast food wrappers, health drinks, cigarette butts, and beer cans.  Half-eaten food with mould.  A week, perhaps longer, since anyone was there.

Upstairs.

The reason for the bad smell.

A body, not the sister, but a woman. 

No sign of a bag.  Dead, checked while trying not to be sick, downstairs, found the bag, wallet, ID.  Jessie Walker.  This was the residential address; her car was outside.

Long enough to find nothing else.  If the place had been tossed, it was done by a professional.

I left.

Found a phone booth and called the police to report the body.

I got back to my car to find two men waiting.  There wasn’t much use in running.

“At it again, Sam?”

The two cops that my father had asked to keep me on the straight and narrow.

“What do you mean?”

“Don’t insult us, Sam.  You know what we’re talking about.  You can’t be poking around crime scenes.”

How did they know where I’d been?  I’d only just called it in.

They knew.  I’d known my father had not exactly been clean, not as clean as he said he was, and besides, clean cops were not murdered in a mob hit. No, these were two acolytes.

“How do you…”

Lance, the more senior of the two, shook his head. “Tsk, task, Sam.  Wrong place, wrong time.  Don’t make a habit of it now, will you, son?”

I shook my head in that obedient fashion they liked.

“Good boy.”  Borg patted me on the head like I was a good boy.  I was anything but.  A chip off the old block.

“Good lad.  Leave this one alone.”

A parting pat on the back, and they left.  Was I going to heed good advice?  No.  I waited for an hour, and then I started searching for details on the internet.

Jessie Walker was famous.  Over a million hits in the search engine, and fascinating in death as much as she was in life.  For a police commissioner’s wife of three weeks.

She looked so much more interesting alive when splashed all over the front page of the city daily.  In death, she would barely rate a second glance.

And what did she have to do with Freddie and Bethany Riccardo?  Tomorrow was not going to be a good day.

©  Charles Heath  2025

First Dig Two Graves

A sequel to “The Devil You Don’t”

Revenge is a dish best served cold – or preferably so when everything goes right

Of course, it rarely does, as Alistair, Zoe’s handler, discovers to his peril. Enter a wildcard, John, and whatever Alistair’s plan for dealing with Zoe was dies with him.

It leaves Zoe in completely unfamiliar territory.

John’s idyllic romance with a woman who is utterly out of his comfort zone is on borrowed time. She is still trying to reconcile her ambivalence, after being so indifferent for so long.

They agree to take a break, during which she disappears. John, thinking she has left without saying goodbye, refuses to accept the inevitable, calls on an old friend for help in finding her.

After the mayhem and being briefly reunited, she recognises an inevitable truth: there is a price to pay for taking out Alistair; she must leave and find them first, and he would be wise to keep a low profile.

But keeping a low profile just isn’t possible, and enlisting another friend, a private detective and his sister, a deft computer hacker, they track her to the border between Austria and Hungary.

What John doesn’t realise is that another enemy is tracking him to find her too. It could have been a grand tour of Europe. Instead, it becomes a race against time before enemies old and new converge for what will be an inevitable showdown.

A long short story that can’t be tamed – I always wanted to rescue a damsel in distress – 1

One

It was not the practicality of the place, where many, many passengers began or ended their journey, whether to or from a holiday or place of work or something else.

It was not the fact many people worked there, in the cafe, as ticket sellers or collectors, as station assistants helping with the mail, parcels or other types of freight, or just there to assist passengers.

For me, it was a reminder of an ending, an end to the life I once knew and had hoped would last forever.

It was where I said bon-voyage to a very special person, hoping as the train pulled out of the station it was not a goodbye.

Three months later I received a text message that said, basically, she was not coming back, that she had met someone special.

Oddly enough I was at the very same station when I received that fateful text and after a hour’s contemplation, and a sudden realization that I had mentally prepared myself for the inevitable, and in fact had talked about it with her sister Emily, not three days before.

She had told me then she had received a very strange email from Cecile, almost as if it hadn’t been written by her, a prelude to that of not returning home.  She, too, had received a message similar to mine.

We thought it odd, but it was not out of character for her, and although it raised concerns with her parents Emily, and I, thought no more of it.

Not till nearly three months later when both Emily and I received another text, from a blocked number somewhere in England that simply said, “help cee”.

‘Cee’ was a name she had shared with Emily and I and would never necessarily give to anyone else to use, not unless she was very close to them.  Not even her parents could use it.  I had considered it was miss-sent, that it was for her ‘new’ friend and not me.

Not until there was a knock on the door of my apartment, and found Emily, and a packed bag, on my doorstep.

“Something is very wrong,” she said without preamble, then barged past, one of her suitcase wheels running over my foot.

I closed the door and leaned against it.  “What are you talking about?”

“You would have got the same message.  She would not use Cee to anyone other than us.”

She flopped down on the best seat in the room, looking tired and exasperated.

“I thought it was miss-sent.  A new boyfriend that’s keeping her there, surely she would accord him the same privilege.”

“You’re joking.  How long did it take you, before she told you?”

I’d known her since grade school, but it was not until we graduated from university, she accorded that privilege.  But she was right.

“OK.  So why did you come here?  If she’s in trouble, there’s not much I can do from here.”

She dug into a voluminous handbag, pulled out an envelope, and waved it in the air.  “We’re going to London.  Tonight.  Pack a bag.  Your passport is current, and I’ve got all the necessary documentation sorted.  You know my dad; he just made a few calls.”

I thought about it for a minute or two.  London was a large city and the odds of picking up her trail after so long was remote, even if we received the message in the last 24 hours, nor did it mean it emanated from London, but could be from anywhere.  Obviously, she knew something I didn’t.

“You know where that message came from?”

“Yes.  When that message was sent, it was near where she was living.  Dad has been talking to the police over there and said she was not home when they called.  It’s the first place we’re going once we get there.”  Then, a second later, she said, “don’t just stand there, get packing.”

It was like an expression I’d heard often, going from one extreme to the other.

When we left it was the middle of summer and coming down from a high of 42 degrees Celsius, to when we landed at just after 6 am to a temperature that was below zero.  We felt the first force of it going up the gangway, then delayed the full force of the weather until we got off the underground at Wimbledon.

Early morning on a workday people were flooding into the station on their way to work, only to discover delays.  We’d seen the snow come, first in a trickle and then a steady downpour that only eased off when we arrived.

It stopped just as we came out of the station onto Wimbledon Hill Road, and from there it was a short walk to Worple Road.  At least, if it held off long enough, we would get to her flat just cold, not wet and cold.  To be honest, the snow was a novelty for us, because where we lived, it didn’t snow.  We had to go to the mountains a few hundred miles away for that privilege.

But the fact it wasn’t snowing didn’t make it any more pleasant.  If anything, the exertion needed to traverse the icy pathways and nearly slipping over several times made it worse.   Emily wasn’t impressed that she had to carry her case instead of being able to drag it, and it certainly didn’t improve her temper.

For the distance, about a half-mile, it took longer than expected because of the weather and the state of the path.  Added to that, it just started to snow again, lightly at least, but we made it, went inside, and shook off the snow on the ground floor foyer, then went up the stairs to the third floor.

Her flat was 3c and overlooked the main road.

Emily opened the door and we both stood back as the door swung open.

It was not what we expected.

©  Charles Heath  2024

365 Days of writing, 2026 – 5

Day 5 – Fiction based on fact

Finding the Balance: When Factual Background Meets Narrative Flow

Introduction
Imagine being immersed in a gripping novel, only to have the story halted by a lengthy explanation of 17th-century tax policies. Or picture a documentary where key context is skipped entirely, leaving you puzzled about the stakes. This is the delicate tightrope every writer walks: providing enough factual background to ground the reader while maintaining a timeline that serves the narrative. Whether you’re crafting fiction, non-fiction, or creative non-fiction, striking this balance is essential to keep your audience engaged and informed.


The Pitfalls of Overloading Factual Background

Factual background gives readers context, but when it overpowers the narrative, it becomes a barrier. Consider these scenarios:

  • Info Dumps: A historical novel that pauses for a 500-word description of a forgotten dynasty halfway through a chase scene.
  • Date Overload: A memoir listing every event in chronological order, turning the story into an encyclopedic list rather than a journey.

Impact on Engagement
Studies show that readers lose interest when factual content disrupts the flow. Excessive background can create “cognitive overload,” where the reader becomes overwhelmed and disengages. For example, a thriller filled with period-accurate military tactics might lose readers who just want to follow the protagonist’s survival.

When It Works
However, rich detail can elevate a story. The Da Vinci Code weaves historical facts into its plot without halting action, using suspense to justify context. The key is integration—not isolation.


The Challenge of Chronological vs. Non-Chronological Timelines

Timelines guide where and how the story unfolds. Sticking to a timeline ensures clarity, but deviations can add depth.

Stick to the Script: When Chronology is Key
In non-fiction, like biographies or historical analysis, strict timelines are essential for accuracy. A book about the Cold War, for example, must present events in order to maintain logical cause-and-effect.

Creative Chronology: Bending Time for Drama
Fiction often thrives on non-linear timelines. The Social Network uses a fragmented structure to build suspense around the founding of Facebook, while Lincoln sticks to a chronological rise. The choice depends on your genre:

  • Fiction: Use flashbacks or parallel timelines to reveal character motivations (e.g., Cloud Atlas by David Mitchell).
  • Non-fiction: A memoir might jump between time periods to highlight personal growth, provided transitions are clear.

The Danger of Anachronisms
Even in creative works, respecting timelines is crucial. A medieval knight quoting Shakespearean phrases or a 1920s novel lacking air travel would shatter credibility. Research is your safeguard.


Techniques to Balance Background and Story

How can writers integrate necessary information without overload? Here are practical strategies:

  1. Show, Don’t Tell
    • Reveal historical context through a character’s actions (e.g., a soldier’s uniform indicating the time period).
    • Use dialogue to drop clues: “The war’s end came as a shock,” a character might say, subtly signalling war’s conclusion.
  2. Summarise, Then Deepen
    • Start with a brief summary of the context. Introduce deeper details only when they’re relevant to the plot. For instance, a character researching a family heirloom can naturally uncover its history.
  3. Pace Your Exposition
    • Introduce background in “micro-doses.” If writing a fantasy novel about a magical kingdom, sprinkle details about its politics through different scenes: a conversation, a newspaper article, or a character’s memory.
  4. Use Tools of the Trade
    • In Media Res: Begin in the middle of the action and provide context as the story unfolds.
    • Signposts: Guide the reader with clear transitions when shifting timelines.

Case Studies in Balance

  • Book Example: Pride and Prejudice assumes readers understand 19th-century social hierarchies—Jane Austen implies, rather than explains, the system through character interactions.
  • Film Example: Inception (2010) layers timelines with clear visual cues, ensuring the complex plot remains graspable.
  • Podcast Example: Serial uses background episodes to build context in a story-heavy format, balancing narration with interviews.

Conclusion: Striking the Right Rhythm

Finding the balance between factual background and narrative flow is as much an art as it is a craft. Ask yourself:

  • Is this detail essential to the story or character development?
  • Would a timeline shift enhance the narrative, or confuse the reader?

Remember, your audience’s expectations matter. A historical mystery might require more context than a modern workplace drama. Use beta readers to pinpoint where facts eclipse the story or where confusion lingers.

Final Takeaway: Trust your reader. Provide enough to ground them, and no more. Let the timeline serve the story, not the other way around. With practice, this balance will transform from a challenge into a narrative strength.

Now, go write—without overwriting!


Call to Action: Share your favourite example of a story that balanced context and narrative perfectly. How did it keep you hooked? Let’s discuss in the comments!

Top 5 sights on the road less travelled – Abuja

Hidden Gems of Abuja: 5 Off-the-Beaten-Path Attractions You Shouldn’t Miss

Abuja, Nigeria’s capital city, is often celebrated for its wide boulevards, modern architecture, and bustling political hubs. While most tourists flock to well-known spots like the National Mosque, Millennium Park, or the Aso Rock Monument, there’s a quieter, more intimate side to Abuja that often goes unnoticed. Beyond the crowds lies a collection of serene, unique, and culturally rich attractions that offer a more personal and authentic experience.

If you’re looking to explore Abuja beyond the tourist brochures, here are the top five lesser-known yet distinctive attractions that promise tranquillity, beauty, and a touch of local charm—without the hustle and bustle.


1. Abuja National Zoo

Tucked away in the quieter Gwarimpa district, the Abuja National Zoo offers a peaceful escape into the world of Nigerian wildlife. Unlike the more crowded national parks, this compact zoo is family-friendly and sees far fewer visitors, making it ideal for a relaxed afternoon.

What makes it special?
Home to indigenous species like the Nigerian dwarf crocodile, West African manatees, and various primates, the zoo also features educational exhibits on conservation. The lush, well-maintained grounds include shaded walkways and picnic spots—perfect for nature lovers and families seeking a quiet day out.

Pro Tip: Visit on weekday mornings for an even more serene experience, and don’t miss the reptile house—it’s one of the few places in the country showcasing a dedicated collection of African reptiles.


2. Jabi Lake and Boat Club (Beyond the Kayaks)

While Jabi Lake is known for its weekend kayaking activities and lakeside cafes, few visitors venture beyond the main dock or the popular eateries. However, the surrounding trails and the quieter eastern shoreline offer a completely different vibe.

What makes it special?
Early mornings at the lake are magical—fog hovers above the water, birds call from the reeds, and fishermen paddle silently in wooden canoes. The lesser-used walking paths along the eastern bank provide scenic views and a chance to observe local life along the water’s edge. It’s a photographer’s dream and a meditative retreat from city noise.

Pro Tip: Bring a coffee from a nearby café and take a quiet stroll along the back trails before 8 AM to fully appreciate the lake’s tranquil beauty.


3. Kubwa Hills and Rock Formations

Located just a short drive from the city centre in the Kubwa neighbourhood, these natural rock formations rise dramatically from the savannah, offering panoramic views and a sense of untouched wilderness.

What makes it special?
Unlike Aso Rock, which is often crowded and surveilled, the Kubwa Hills are largely unmarked and unmanaged—making them perfect for adventurous travellers who enjoy hiking and solitude. The area is rich in geological history, with unique weathered granite outcrops and hidden caves. It’s also a favorite among local artists and spiritual groups, adding a subtle cultural layer to the landscape.

Pro Tip: Visit with a local guide or a trusted companion, wear comfortable shoes, and bring water—there are no facilities on-site. Sunset here offers one of the most underrated views in Abuja.


4. Arts Market at Sheraton Hotel (Abuja Arts & Crafts Market)

While many head to city malls and souvenir shops, the weekly arts and crafts market held outside the Sheraton Hotel (Friday afternoons to Sunday evenings) is a hidden treasure trove of Nigerian creativity.

What makes it special?
Here, you’ll find hand-carved sculptures, traditional fabrics, beadwork, and pottery from artisans across Nigeria’s 36 states. Because it’s not widely advertised, it attracts more locals than tourists, making it a genuine cultural exchange. The prices are fair, and vendors are happy to share stories behind their crafts.

Pro Tip: Go on a Saturday morning to see the most variety and engage with artists while they’re setting up their stalls. It’s a fantastic place to pick up authentic, one-of-a-kind souvenirs.


5. Nigeria Nuclear Regulatory Authority (NNRA) Garden and Sculpture Park

An unexpected gem, the NNRA premises in Jabi doubles as a hidden sculpture garden and green space. While the agency is operational, its front garden is open to the public and maintained like a mini-park.

What makes it special?
The space features abstract metal sculptures by Nigerian artists, serene water features, and winding pathways through thick foliage. The blend of art, nature, and science is unique—rarely seen elsewhere in the city. It’s an oasis of calm where you can sit, reflect, and enjoy a moment of quiet contemplation.

Pro Tip: Combine your visit with a stop at the nearby Jabi Lake or a quiet lunch at one of the less crowded local restaurants in Jabi Mall.


Final Thoughts: Discover a Different Abuja

Abuja is more than government buildings and grand monuments. Its quieter corners reveal a city rich in culture, nature, and local life. By stepping off the beaten path, you not only avoid the crowds but also gain a deeper appreciation for the capital’s soul.

So the next time you’re in Abuja—or planning a visit—skip the queues and embrace the serenity. These five spots may not be on every tourist map, but they promise experiences that are authentic, memorable, and refreshingly uncrowded.

Abuja’s best-kept secrets are waiting—will you go find them?


Have you visited any of these hidden spots? Share your experience in the comments below, or tag us on social media with your Abuja off-the-grid adventures!