A to Z – April – 2026 – F

F is for – Five Words

I’d heard about the show, one with a funny title that when people asked, they couldn’t quite get it exactly right, but close enough to “This was your life”.

I thought it was about dead people, odd, because I knew it was impossible to interview dead people, though those days, someone told me, anything was possible on television.

Then I thought it was about people almost at the end of their life, as a celebration of a celebrity, or someone famous.

It was a surprise to learn it was about ordinary people.

Like me.  You couldn’t find anyone more ordinary, or as several people told me, utterly forgettable.

That hurt, but in a sense, they were right.

Which made me wonder just how it was that I received a letter in the mail telling me I had been selected for an episode.

Of course, I thought someone was playing a hoax, and rang them, expecting to be laughed at, but no.  I was being asked to go on the show.

I have no idea why I agreed.

When I arrived at the studio, I was taken to an office where the executive producer told me what was going to happen: sign some papers to say I was not going to divulge details of the show before it was broadcast, and what my five words were.

They were different for each participant.

Today, they were recording five episodes.  I was going to be the last.

My words were Good, Afraid, Trouble, Look and Quiet.  I had plenty of time to think about them in relation to my story.

And that was the odd thing … I actually had a story.

“So,” the host said, in that mesmerising voice of hers that had both the audience and the participants entranced, “Tell us what the word Good means to you.”

Of course, it wasn’t just the word good, it was a better word that meant the same thing.

“It wasn’t just a good day, it was a fantastic, unbelievable day.”

I remembered it well, that last day of high school, when it was, in a lot of cases, the last time I would see my fellow classmates.

Most of them I never wanted to see again, because that final year had been marked by more lows than highs, culminating in my date for the Prom falling ill, and so I didn’t go.  Then I discovered she lied, went with my so-called best friend, and made last week unbearable.

So much so, I headed straight for the railway station and intended to hide at my grandmother’s house on the other side of the country.

The day started badly, arguing with my parents, arguing with my siblings, getting into three separate scuffles at school, then coming home and throwing a few things into a backpack and leaving before I saw anyone at home.

Every step from the house to the railway depot was a reminder of each betrayal, so by the time I sat in the waiting room, an hour before the train was due, I was mentally and physically exhausted.

I expected someone from home would come and try to persuade me to stay.

They didn’t.

Perhaps that was the final betrayal.  The fact that not one of my own family cared whether I stayed or left.

Very few people took the train.  Most people leaving town went to the airport and got a plane.  There was a bus, but it took forever to get anywhere, and the train was an acceptable alternative.

I was the only one leaving town by train.

Until I wasn’t.

Five students in that final year shared my disposition, in that we preferred to study, get good grades and then go to college.  The other three left a week before, gaining admission to an Ivy League university.

I hadn’t applied.

The other person was Alison Breton. 

She was one of those people who no one gave a second look at, or so much as a first.  She was clever, and all the boys didn’t like girls who were smarter than they.

She was also plain, or so it appeared, which caused most of the boys to point out her faults, such as how she presented herself.  Unlike the other girls who dressed to impress, wore make-up and looked stunning, even if it was an objectifying description, she preferred to be different.

I thought she was brave.

We barely spoke, though we were in the same study group with the three Ivy Leaguers.  Two of them were keen on her, but she was not the dating sort.  Or so they said.

Ten minutes before the train arrived, another person came and sat in the waiting room.

Alison Breton.

I ignored her for five whole minutes.  I mean, what could I say to her?

It was when the host mentioned the second word, “afraid.”

It was part of the truth and summed up how I felt about her.  I was afraid of her.  Afraid, or more to the point, literally terrified.

I had imagined many times what I would say to her, fabricating long, I thought, interesting conversations.

And if I let my imagination stretch a little further, I might have to admit I liked her, perhaps more than I should, but could and would never admit it.  One humiliation by a girl in a lifetime was enough, and my completely shattered ego couldn’t take another rejection.

Five whole minutes before she said, “So you’re leaving this dump too?”

It was obvious I was, though the dump was harsh.

And then words came out that were not my own.  “What’s your excuse?”

I knew the moment I tried to speak to her that it would be over.  Maryanne, the betrayer, was different.  I could speak to her, and because of that, I thought she was the one.

She smiled.  “Probably the same as yours.  James told me he loved me, but he didn’t.  Apparently, I’m the subject of a bet.”

I’d heard a rumour and couldn’t believe it.  Or perhaps I could.  Small town, small-minded boys, one ambition, to have what they couldn’t.

“Best get out of town then.”  My solution to the problem wasn’t a one-size-fits-all all.

But it was a response to the host dropping the word trouble.  And then looked and was quiet.  It seemed they were all intertwining in the narrative that was unfolding.

“That doesn’t explain your desire to leave, other than the Maryanne humiliation.  I guess a month away from here might make it go away.”

“It won’t.  I have brothers who will never let me forget.  You grow up in this place, no one forgets the trouble, or more appropriately, your legacy.”

“It’s always us quiet kids, eh, the ones who don’t make a fuss, who are studious and respectful, who don’t want to be noticed.  No matter how we look or feel.  I tried to be invisible.”

“It made you stand out more than the Maryannes.  I was just fodder for girls like her, pandering to the mores of the football team, and you know what they were like.”

Being smart didn’t make us immune to being hurt or hoping against hope that we had a chance.

We both heard the sound of the horn in the distance, a warning that the train was approaching the railway crossing, about two or three miles outside of town.

The train, like always, was running late.

She stood.  “Where are you going?”

“San Francisco.  My grandmother.  She has a large house and many unusual friends.  She was an actress once, when Hollywood was going through its black and white phase.”

“I’m going there too.  My mother’s sister, though I suspect she isn’t.  Maybe we can pretend we’re brother and sister, to be safe.”

I shrugged.  Why not?  Once we got there, I’d probably never see her again.

“Except,” Alison said, holding my hand, and talking to the host with that whimsical expression she had when telling others the story of how we met, “we talked and talked and fell in love, got married, have five amazing children, twelve equally amazing grandchildren, and just lived our lives.  Nothing special, and yet to us, very, very special.”

And then, surprisingly, our time was up.  I had expected it would take half the time allotted.  Instead, it was two hours later, and no one, not any of us, had noticed.

©  Charles Heath  2025-2026

First Dig Two Graves

A sequel to “The Devil You Don’t”

Revenge is a dish best served cold – or preferably so when everything goes right

Of course, it rarely does, as Alistair, Zoe’s handler, discovers to his peril. Enter a wildcard, John, and whatever Alistair’s plan for dealing with Zoe was dies with him.

It leaves Zoe in completely unfamiliar territory.

John’s idyllic romance with a woman who is utterly out of his comfort zone is on borrowed time. She is still trying to reconcile her ambivalence after being so indifferent for so long.

They agree to take a break, during which she disappears. John, thinking she has left without saying goodbye, refuses to accept the inevitable and calls on an old friend for help in finding her.

After the mayhem and being briefly reunited, she recognises an inevitable truth: there is a price to pay for taking out Alistair; she must leave and find them first, and he would be wise to keep a low profile.

But keeping a low profile just isn’t possible, and enlisting another friend, a private detective and his sister, a deft computer hacker, they track her to the border between Austria and Hungary.

What John doesn’t realise is that another enemy is tracking him to find her too. It could have been a grand tour of Europe. Instead, it becomes a race against time before enemies old and new converge for what will be an inevitable showdown.

365 Days of writing, 2026 – My Second Story 12

More about my second novel

I’ve been looking back at what’s been written, something you shouldn’t do when trying to get 50,000 words written in 30 days, but I’m ahead of the count, and a little checking is needed, just to make sure everything is running smoothly.

Not that any book written on the fly like this runs smoothly.

There are three themes to this story:

1 – Worthington, now head of the Intelligence agency, is seeking revenge for Zoe killing his brother by mistake, a mistake that he caused

2 – Alistair’s mother is deploying a collection of agents, some of whom were once Zoe’s colleagues, to assassinate the woman who assassinated her son

3 – John’s ever-growing fear that Zoe is tired of him, and, after she leaves, and even though she promised to come back, he doesn’t want to wait to find out he’s been dumped.

4 – Sebastian is always lurking in the background, ostensibly to recruit her as an assassin, but really because he’s jealous of John’s good fortune.

Our two intrepid heroes go off to save her in Marseilles, where she learns of the identity of who is ostensibly looking for her, and sets her off on a lone hunt for him.

We then deploy two new characters, Rupert and Isobel, who, along with John, will create a private detective agency that John uses to locate Zoe by any and all means.

Isobel soon finds out that searching for Zoe on the internet brings risks, both at home and abroad, bringing her in contact with another hacker who seems to know where Zoe’s past is hiding. But can they be trusted?

John heads off to Vienna, after being supplied a file on Zoe, full of information he had not known about her. What he learns in Vienna leads him to Bratislava, when a photo identifying where she suddenly arrives on his phone.

John locates her, she realises he is being used as bait, and they leave, but not before the hit team almost completes their mission, leaving behind a trail of bodies as they get away, but not without injury.

John gets the answers he is seeking, that if he wants a life of looking over his shoulder, by all means, tag along. She is quite pleased to see him, not so much that he brought ‘friends’, but she might yet get to train him.

Sebastian, feeling left out, grills Isobel and Rupert, gets sidelined by Worthington because anywhere Sebastian goes, trouble follows, and then convinces Isobel that John is in over his head and needs their help.

He’s not wrong because Worthington has dispatched another hit team to the main railway stations in Vienna, where John and Zoe are looking to escape, but another shootout occurs as they once again escape when all the station’s exits are covered.

The story has now reached a point where everyone is converging on Vienna.

Along with another person whom John knows, and whom he will least expect to arrive on his doorstep.

NaNoWriMo – April – 2026 – Day 7

After the cat dragged me out of bed simply because he wanted me to refill the food containers, he did the usual trick of sitting there, watching patiently until I walked off, then went over to the bowl, sniffed, and walked off.

OK, he didn’t need to wake me up if he was going to do that.

Stern words are spoken, but it’s water off a duck’s back (or cat’s back if you like).

I’m annoyed, and he’s, well, he’s just a pain in the neck.

So…

Now that I’m up, I might as well get some work done.  I think about breakfast for about a minute, and decide it’s too hard to make toast.  Yes, it’s that kind of morning.

Coffee?

Maybe.  I put the kettle on as a token gesture of doing something, and go out to the writing room.

I’m calling it that for now, because we’re at the end of the first week of NaNoWriMo, and it’s proceeding well, which means, of course, that something is going to happen, and the wheels are going to come off.

I turn on the laptop, and after waiting the usual five minutes, I have the logon screen and no mouse.  It’s been acting erratically for a few days, but that’s Windows anyway.

So, I have a dead mouse.

Should I give it to Chester to play with?

I changed the batteries, usually the problem, but to no avail.

Good thing then we have a few spares because when the granddaughters are over, they are prone to dropping them on the ground and breaking them.  I have a drawer full of dead mice.

One day, Chester will be happy, or not.  It’s hard to tell what he’s thinking.

New mouse, wait for it to install, back to work.

Kettle’s boiled, new distraction, might as well get coffee.

Maybe I’ll get back to work later.

Another excerpt from ‘Betrayal’; a work in progress

My next destination in the quest was the hotel we believed Anne Merriweather had stayed at.

I was, in a sense, flying blind because we had no concrete evidence she had been there, and the message she had left behind didn’t quite name the hotel or where Vladimir was going to take her.

Mindful of the fact that someone might have been following me, I checked to see if the person I’d assumed had followed me to Elizabeth’s apartment was still in place, but I couldn’t see him. Next, I made a mental note of seven different candidates and committed them to memory.

Then I set off to the hotel, hailing a taxi. There was the possibility that the cab driver was one of them, but perhaps I was slightly more paranoid than I should be. I’d been watching the queue, and there were two others before me.

The journey took about an hour, during which time I kept an eye out the back to see if anyone had been following us. If anyone was, I couldn’t see them.

I had the cab drop me off a block from the hotel and then spent the next hour doing a complete circuit of the block the hotel was on, checking the front and rear entrances, the cameras in place, and the siting of the driveway into the underground carpark. There was a camera over the entrance, and one we hadn’t checked for footage. I sent a text message to Fritz to look into it.

The hotel lobby was large and busy, which was exactly what you’d want if you wanted to come and go without standing out. It would be different later at night, but I could see her arriving about mid-afternoon, and anonymous among the clientele the hotel attracted.

I spent an hour sitting in various positions in the lobby simply observing. I had already ascertained where the elevator lobby for the rooms was, and the elevator down to the car park. Fortunately, it was not ‘guarded’, but there was a steady stream of concierge staff coming and going to the lower levels, and, just from time to time, guests.

Then, when there was a commotion at the front door, what seemed to be a collision of guests and free-wheeling bags, I saw one of the seven potential taggers sitting by the front door. Waiting for me to leave? Or were they wondering why I was spending so much time there?

Taking advantage of that confusion, I picked my moment to head for the elevators that went down to the car park, pressed the down button, and waited.

There was no car on the ground level, so I had to wait, watching, like several others, the guests untangling themselves at the entrance, and keeping an eye on my potential surveillance, still absorbed in the confusion.

The doors to the left car opened, and a concierge stepped out, gave me a quick look, then headed back to his desk. I stepped into the car, pressed the first level down, the level I expected cars to arrive on, and waited what seemed like a long time for the doors to close.

As they did, I was expecting to see a hand poke through the gap, a latecomer. Nothing happened, and I put it down to a television moment.

There were three basement levels, and for a moment, I let my imagination run wild and considered the possibility that there were more levels. Of course, there was no indication on the control panel that there were any other floors, and I’d yet to see anything like it in reality.

With a shake of my head to return to reality, the car arrived, the doors opened, and I stepped out.

A car pulled up, and the driver stepped out, went around to the rear of his car, and pulled out a case. I half expected him to throw me the keys, but the instant glance he gave me told him he was not the concierge, and instead he brushed past me like I wasn’t there.

He bashed the up button several times impatiently and cursed when the doors didn’t open immediately. Not a happy man.

Another car drove past on its way down to a lower level.

I looked up and saw the CCTV camera, pointing towards the entrance, visible in the distance. A gate that lifted up was just about back in position, then clunked when it finally closed. The footage from the camera would not prove much, even if it had been working, because it didn’t cover the lift lobby, only what was in the direction of the car entrance.

The doors to the other elevator car opened, and a man in a suit stepped out.

“Can I help you, sir? You seem lost.”

Security, or something else. “It seems that way. I went to the elevator lobby, got in, and it went down rather than up. I must have been in the wrong place.”

“Lost it is, then, sir.” I could hear the contempt for Americans in his tone. “If you will accompany me, please.”

He put out a hand ready to guide me back into the elevator. I was only too happy to oblige him. There had been a sign near the button panel that said the basement levels were only to be accessed by the guests.

Once inside, he turned a key and pressed the lobby button. The doors closed, and we went up. He stood, facing the door, not speaking. A few seconds later, he was ushering me out to the lobby.

“Now, sir, if you are a guest…”

“Actually, I’m looking for one. She called me and said she would be staying in this hotel and to come down and visit her. I was trying to get to the sixth floor.”

“Good. Let’s go over to the desk and see what we can do for you.”

I followed him over to the reception desk, where he signalled one of the clerks, a young woman who looked and acted very efficiently, and told her of my request, but then remained to oversee the proceeding.

“Name of guest, sir?”

“Merriweather, Anne. I’m her brother, Alexander.” I reached into my coat pocket and pulled out my passport to prove that I was who I said I was. She glanced cursorily at it.

She typed the name into the computer, and then we waited a few seconds while it considered what to output. Then, she said, “That lady is not in the hotel, sir.”

Time to put on my best-confused look. “But she said she would be staying here for the week. I made a special trip to come here to see her.”

Another puzzled look from the clerk, then, “When did she call you?”

An interesting question to ask, and it set off a warning bell in my head. I couldn’t say today, it would have to be the day she was supposedly taken.

“Last Saturday, about four in the afternoon.”

Another look at the screen, then, “It appears she checked out Sunday morning. I’m afraid you have made a trip in vain.”

Indeed, I had. “Was she staying with anyone?”

I just managed to see the warning pass from the suited man to the clerk. I thought he had shown an interest when I mentioned the name, and now I had confirmation. He knew something about her disappearance. The trouble was, he wasn’t going to volunteer any information because he was more than just hotel security.

“No.”

“Odd,” I muttered. “I thought she told me she was staying with a man named Vladimir something or other. I’m not too good at pronouncing those Russian names. Are you sure?”

She didn’t look back at the screen. “Yes.”

“OK, now one thing I do know about staying in hotels is that you are required to ask guests with foreign passports their next destination, just in case they need to be found. Did she say where she was going next?” It was a long shot, but I thought I’d ask.

“Moscow. As I understand it, she lives in Moscow. That was the only address she gave us.”

I smiled. “Thank you. I know where that is. I probably should have gone there first.”

She didn’t answer; she didn’t have to, her expression did that perfectly.

The suited man spoke again, looking at the clerk. “Thank you.” He swivelled back to me. “I’m sorry we can’t help you.”

“No. You have more than you can know.”

“What was your name again, sir, just in case you still cannot find her?”

“Alexander Merriweather. Her brother. And if she is still missing, I will be posting a very large reward. At the moment, you can best contact me via the American Embassy.”

Money is always a great motivator, and that thoughtful expression on his face suggested he gave a moment’s thought to it.

I left him with that offer and left. If anything, the people who were holding her would know she had a brother, that her brother was looking for her, and equally that brother had money.

© Charles Heath – 2018-2025

NaNoWriMo – April – 2026 – Day 6

The Maple Leafs are playing, and so I thought I would juggle watching them play and work on my NaNoWriMo project at the same time.

It seemed like a good way to get in 3 hours of work and a little entertainment on the side.

But…

First period down, and the Maple Leafs are 2 goals down.

What I first thought was going to be easy is now becoming mission impossible.

After the second Philadelphia goal, Chester, my stalwart anti-everything cat, comes down to see what the commotion is.  By that I mean, almost yelling at the TV screen.

A lot of good that’s going to do when they’re 12,000 miles away on the other side of the world.

And by the look on Chester’s face, I think he thinks it’s a waste of time too.  Or maybe that’s his usual, I don’t give a $%^^%$ expression he has most of the time.

We have the Philadelphia feed, so we’re getting the joy from the intermission analysts at their team’s lead, but it does take me back to Philadelphia when we were there a few years back, when America was worth visiting, when they cut to shots of the city.

And, of course, instead of having my eyes on the story, I’m now thinking of a subplot, yes, you guessed it, in Philadelphia, which is not very far from New York, where the main action takes place.

Then…

We score.  It’s now a more respectable scoreline, but Anderson has his work cut out for him, and I’m thinking of turning off the sound because I don’t want to hear any more praise for their young stars.

The story proceeds, taking out the outline pages and looking to see where it can fit in.  Yes, I see a gap where I can fit in an interlude and scribble a few notes.

End of the second period.  Still 2 goals to 1 down.

Start of the third period.  Chester decided to jump up on the table and, seeing the pencil sitting there, started to push it around with his paw. I snatch it away, and he gives me a chastising swipe.

Blast him, while my attention was diverted, we score again, and I missed it.  Thank heavens for the replay.  Over and over.

I finish the notes for the interlude, and the game ends in a draw.  We now move to overtime.

I get the first few lines of the chapter I began working on at the start of the game, and just as the words are flowing, overtime ends with no score, and we go into a shootout.  And before you know it, the game’s over, and we’ve lost.

I swear, Chester is smirking, so I pick him up and put him on the floor with a very stern admonishment.

No, I’m not taking the loss badly, but there are a few bad guys about to die horribly.

A to Z – April – 2026 – E

E is for Empire State Building

Making a plan, having certain expectations, taking that leap of faith that all of us are destined to do at least once, I found myself standing at the top of the Empire State Building, on the last day of the twelfth month, exactly five years after making a promise in exactly the same place, I would be there.

There was a 3 pm in there, but that was flexible, because I always liked to be early.

It had been after high school graduation, after the prom, every bit the magical moment it was meant to be, with the girl of my dreams, Margaret Cates.  We had spent those last years of high school together, studying hard, each helping the other achieve the grades needed to enter the best University.

There was no talk of romance, of a life together, or anything other than of being brought together, almost inseparable.  We were voted the most likely to be married and living contentedly in a house with a picket fence and three children.

Expectations were what parents had, and both of our parents were best friends, who simply chose to believe the inevitable would happen.  Graduation, a combined family trip to New York to see the sights, culminating in New Year’s Eve at the top of the Empire State Building.

That was where we made the promise, no matter what, we would reconvene, that was Margaret’s word, at the same time.  It was also the first time we kissed, and I think it took a week before my heart rate went back to normal.

Soon after that, Margaret left.  She had been accepted into her university of choice.  Her parents were surprised, and my parents were in shock. 

I was not.  It was the plan.  Margaret had a plan for everything. There was no plan with me in it.  Not in those first five years.  I was sad but not devastated.

I said to my parents, if we were meant to be, she would come back.  I had to set her free.

My plan was there was no plan.  I got the grades, and I got accepted into my University of choice.

At the end of the second year, I was in a what could only be described as a car crash, and was badly injured, to the extent that I had to put my life on hold.

I would recover, not one hundred per cent but enough to continue whatever path I’d chosen, but with some limitations.  The doctor was upbeat, and my parents were upbeat.

I went home, not quite in the manner I’d intended.  I was assured that life was like that, and I had to accept, accident or no accident, life was full of unexpected challenges.

Summer Atkins was probably the most irritating, aggravating, and ingratiating person on the planet.

She lived next door, one of five girls, the eldest, and coincidentally in my grade at high school.  In fact, she was in all the grades from Elementary.

She was gawky, awkward, loud and clumsy.  It was not her fault.  She had a kind heart, always the first to volunteer for the worst jobs, and suffered a lot at the hands of the boys and the girls, too.

I was not pleased to say when I looked back at my time that I was one of them, and probably the only one who apologised after the prom for what had been, at times, unforgivable.  The prank for the prom was probably her lowest point.

It took a week before she would come out of her room, and I came over every day to join the few who actually cared about her.  After Margaret left and before I followed, we spent time together, where she asked me what she needed to do to just get to talk to a guy like me.

I thought it strange.  She was talking to me, I was talking to her, we had coffee and cake at the diner and hung out.  She had no aspirations to go to college, just to help her parents look after her siblings and work in the diner.  I had suggested she might want to do something for herself, and she looked at me strangely.  I did not, she said, understand her.

We parted awkwardly, with this thing I had done, but what it was, I had no idea.  It ended when she told me that if I was waiting for Margaret, I would be waiting a long time.  How did she know anything about what my expectations were?

I came back home under the radar.  I didn’t want anyone to know because I had set myself a high bar, and I was never going to reach it.

I felt that I had become a disappointment to my parents, and while they put on a brave face, and my siblings were polite, it was clear that they were happy for me to hide away, and my siblings were happy to see the high flyer crash and burn.  Kid would be kids, I expected no less.

So when Summer unexpectedly knocked on the door, a certain element of panic went through the house.  Upstairs, I heard that voice drift up the stairs with mixed emotions.  I wanted to see her, but I didn’t want to see her.

Not like this.  It was an odd feeling, and I couldn’t understand what fuelled it.  It was Summer, she wouldn’t care, more likely revel in the fact.  How the mighty had fallen.

My mother answered the door.

“Mrs Abercrombie, you look tired?”  The grating tone had gone, her voice had softened, and there was genuine concern in it.

“It’s…”

She caught herself before mentioning my name.  It had been a secret for about a month.  I was surprised Summer had not called earlier.

My mother shifted the topic.  She was good at that.  “How is your father?  That latest bout of chemotherapy cannot be helping the diner.”

“He’s responding to the treatment, and we’re managing.  How are you faring without Allen?  I’m sorry I should have come over more often.”

“It’s fine.  We’re all coping with life as best we can.”

“How is Allen, if I may ask?”

That was Summer.  Gets the bit between her teeth and doesn’t let go.

My mother was not one to lie.  Obfuscate but not lie.  Not outright.  But confronted…

“Something’s wrong,” she said in a hushed voice, so low I couldn’t barely hear her.  I could virtually see my mother’s face.  It had always been expressive.  It’s why she could never play poker.

It went quiet for a minute or two, and I knew it was time to brace myself.  Summer was the last person I wanted to see, perhaps the only one other than Margaret, not that I expected her to drop everything.

Again, I couldn’t explain why, other than showing vulnerability. 

A few minutes passed while I was hoping my mother would explain that I didn’t want to see anyone, that I wanted to be better before facing the outside world.  Whether Summer would accede to a request if leaving me alone was moot.

If she knew I was there, she would not hesitate to come up and remind me of the Allen of old, with the shoe now firmly on the other foot.

I tried hiding under the covers, but she had X-ray eyes.  I knew she was in the room; I could feel her presence.  And the scent she used was a hint of primrose.  Once it was far stronger, but I suspect she had mastered the art of cosmetic use.

“You will suffocate long before I leave, Allen.  I’m not the same girl you left behind.  I don’t hate you.  I did for a while, but then I realised you cared when all the rest didn’t.  I’m sorry we parted angry.”

She sounded reasonable, far more reasonable than I expected.  She should have still been angry, if not with me, but with the others.

“OK.  If you don’t come out, I’ll get in there with you.  You know me well enough to know I will.”

Did I know her well enough?  I never took the opportunity.  No one wanted to because she didn’t fit the other girls’ profile.  It wasn’t like that at University, there it was simply a competition.  There was dating, but it was more convenient than romance.  There were not many hours left in a day for extracurricular activities.

When I peeled back the covers, it was like seeing an angel, the sun shining in the window, throwing a glow over her.  Summer had changed from the awkward, ugly duckling into a graceful Swan.

A look of concern crossed her face.  Just lifting the covers was a difficult task, like most normal movements we all took for granted.  It was getting easier and less painful, but it would take time.

“What happened to you?”

“A car and I had a disagreement.  It won.”

“And you didn’t think to tell me.  How long have you been here?  What do you need? Tell me, and I’ll make it happen.”

Summer basically glued me back together.  It was, she said, one of her projects, others minding the children of silly sisters, nursing her farther past cancer, keeping up her waitress job at the diner, and just being Summer, the girl who always pitched in.

Such was the value of her help that my mother said I should marry her before someone else snapped her up.  Just before I was to go back to University, I did just that, but she rejected me.

There was someone else, and he was going to propose any day.

I could respect that.  Whatever I thought she might think of me, I would forever be one of those boys who made her life hell.  I didn’t deserve someone like her.  I just got on the train and left.

But the truth was, I was never the same again.

How could I?

I had tried to tell Margaret, but the terms of the pact were clear.  5 years, do your thing, meet and discuss.  If feelings were the same, who knew what might happen?

I was disappointed I hadn’t been able to find her, but I had a story to tell.

A year after returning, I gave it up.  I didn’t have the same enthusiasm, and feeling like a failure, I didn’t go home.  I simply pretended everything was fine and moved to New York and found work in a rather offbeat bookshop in Queens.

It fuelled my love of literature, and after reading anything and everything, I started writing my version of the Great American Novel.  Small-town boy makes it big in the big city.  A bit like my life, really.

Which brings us back to the Empire State Building.

3pm.

And Margaret.

I saw her and thought she was coming to the spot.  She looked different, older, smarter, and with a touch of elegance and sophistication.

Halfway, I saw her smile and then wrap her arms around this bear of a man whom I instantly recognised.  I mean, you would have to live under a rock not to know him.

Her parents were there, and a bunch of media people.  The oohs and ahhs told me it was the moment he went down on one knee; it was going to be a News At 6 moment.

I was but a distant memory, forgotten in her moment of agreeing to be Mrs Albert Johnstone Gerythorn III.

I guess the employee of an eclectic bookshop was hardly a match for a multi-billionaire, or one who was soon to be.

“Sucks to be you.”

It did.  That voice, the one that had grated on my nerves nearly all of my school years, came from behind me.

I knew who it was.  I didn’t turn around.

“I knew it was a mistake to tell you my innermost secrets.”

“Oh, I would not have missed this for the world.”

I felt her hand slip into mine and her body move closer. 

“Five years is a long time.  People change.”

“People like us change, Allen.  People like her do not.”

“I thought you were getting married?”

“So did I.  I guess we were both wrong.  Found that cute little bookshop of yours.  If I didn’t know you better, I’d be guessing you’ve started that great American novel.  Am I right or am I right?”

“You know me too well.  You want to stay, or shall we find another circus, something a little more our style?”

“Do we have one?”

“Of course.  Everyone has style.”

Then I noticed Margaret was coming towards us, a rather serious expression on her face.  Had she finally recognised me?

“Excuse me, but the photographers would like to get some photos of my fiancée and me by this corner.  It would be most appreciated.”

No.  No sign of recognition.

Summer instead smiled sweetly, ” Of course, Margery Mugmouth, the pleasure would be all ours.”

It was Margaret’s nickname among those girls she trashed, and she instantly recognised Summer, and then me.

“Five years, to the day.  You came.  Have a happy life, Margaret.”

With that, we left.

A reporter, or just someone with a notepad, was scribbling frantically and then tried to head us off at the elevator.  Just too late.  The doors closed.

“The nerve,” Summer said.  “That was our corner.  Or I hope it will be.”

“So did I.  Would you like to marry me?” I asked.

The elevator went silent, except for the whishing sound of it going down.

“She made a face, quite amusing, and then said, “Yes.”

People outside the elevator when it arrived thought something bad had happened, given the roar and applause which followed us out into the foyer after it arrived.

Five years, on the last day of the last month at 3 pm, something did happen.  I proposed to the girl of my dreams.  I just hadn’t realised it until then.

©  Charles Heath  2026

365 Days of writing, 2026 – 79

Day 79 – Irrelevant trivialities

Why the Small Stuff Beats the Big Stuff: What Really Hooks Readers (And Why Over‑The‑Top Heroes Can Turn Them Off)


  • Readers remember the everyday, not the epic. A scene about a coffee‑spilled meeting can out‑shine a chapter on a geopolitical summit.
  • Tiny, relatable details act as emotional anchors that keep the audience glued to the page.
  • “Chest‑pounding, wildly gesticulating heroes” feel like propaganda, not people. Readers want flawed, grounded protagonists, not cartoon‑ish mascots.
  • Writing tip: Sprinkle specific, sensory “trivialities” throughout your narrative and let your characters react authentically.

1. The Myth of the “Grand Event”

When you think of a story set against the backdrop of political turbulence—a coup, a trade war, climate‑policy battles—you might assume the macro events are the magnetic core. After all, they’re the headlines.

But ask yourself:

  • Do readers remember the exact date a treaty was signed?
  • Do they recite the exact number of votes in a parliament?

Rarely. What stays is the human fallout of those events: the cramped office where a junior analyst slips a secret note under a coffee mug, the nervous laugh of a teenager watching a televised protest, the sound of a door that refuses to close properly in a tense diplomatic hallway.

These are the “irrelevant trivialities” that feel relevant because they are personal.

The Science

Cognitive psychologists call this the “concreteness effect.” Concrete, sensory details are easier for the brain to encode and retrieve than abstract concepts. A story about “economic sanctions” can be dull, but a story about “the metallic clink of a coin dropping from a nervous hand as a sanction is announced” sticks.


2. Trivialities as Story‑Fuel: A Few Proven Examples

Trivial DetailWhat It RevealsWhy It Hooks
A broken pen on a diplomat’s deskThe diplomat’s hurried preparation, underlying anxietyReaders picture the scene; the pen becomes a symbol of vulnerability
The way a protester’s shoes squeak on wet pavementThe protester’s perseverance despite discomfortAuditory detail pulls readers into the moment
A toddler’s “why?” after hearing the newsThe generational ripple of political eventsHighlights stakes in a fresh, innocent voice
The smell of burnt toast in a kitchen where a secret meeting is plannedThe domestic normalcy juxtaposed with clandestine actionSmell is a powerful memory trigger; it grounds the plot
A half‑written text message left unsentThe character’s indecision, fear of consequencesCreates suspense without a single explosive headline

Takeaway: The tiny can carry the weight of the massive. Use them as micro‑hooks that pull the reader deeper into the macro plot.


3. When “Heroic Gestures” Turn Into Annoyance

Imagine a scene where the protagonist, after a tense negotiation, slams his fist on the table, chest out, voice echoing:

“We will not be bowed down! Our destiny is ours!”

It might feel satisfying on paper, but to a modern reader it can feel over‑the‑top for three reasons:

  1. It’s Show‑rather‑than‑Tell on Steroids
    The gesture tells us “this character is brave” without letting us experience the courage through choices, doubts, and consequences.
  2. It Undermines Relatability
    Real people don’t deliver speeches in Hollywood slow‑motion. They fidget, they bite their lip, they stumble over words. When a character behaves like a marble statue, readers can’t see themselves in them.
  3. It Drowns Out the Real Stakes
    The drama of the political storm is drowned in a melodramatic performance. The audience’s attention shifts from what’s happening to how loudly the hero is shouting.

The Better Way: Flawed, Measured, Human

Instead of a grandiose chest‑pound, try:

  • A quiet, nervous laugh after a risky decision.
  • A hand trembling as they sign a treaty, betraying fear.
  • A solitary walk through a rain‑slicked corridor, reflecting on the consequences of the day’s events.

These moments show bravery, fear, doubt, and resolve through action—they let the reader feel the hero rather than being told they’re a hero.


4. Practical Strategies for Writers

Below are actionable steps to let trivialities do the heavy lifting and keep heroic gestures in check.

A. Build a “Triviality Checklist” for Every Scene

Scene ElementTrivial Detail to AddSensory Cue
Political rallyA protester’s cracked phone screenVisual (shattered glass)
Diplomatic briefingThe faint hum of an air‑conditioning unitAuditory (steady whirr)
War‑room decisionA coffee mug with a chipped rimTactile (cold ceramic)
After‑effects of a treatyThe lingering scent of fresh‑cut grass from a nearby parkOlfactory (green, hopeful)
Personal falloutA child’s drawing pinned to a refrigeratorVisual (crayon lines)

Why? It forces you to pause and ask, “What little thing is happening here that could reveal something deeper?”

B. Replace One “Heroic Gesture” with a Micro‑Choice

  • Instead of: “He raised his sword and shouted.”
  • Write: “He slipped the sword back into its sheath, his hand shaking just enough to catch the edge of the blade.”

The choice is more telling than the gesture.

C. Use “Object‑Perspective” to Anchor Trivialities

Pick an object in the scene—say, a paperclip—and describe its interaction with characters. The paperclip might bend as a diplomat’s hand trembles, or get lost in a chaotic desk drawer, symbolising the fragile nature of negotiations.

D. Test for “Heroic Overkill”

After drafting, ask yourself:

  1. Does the scene convey the character’s inner state through subtle actions?
  2. Would the same emotional punch work if the hero were an ordinary person?
  3. Am I relying on a single, flamboyant gesture to summarise the moment?

If you answer yes to any, tone it down.


5. Real‑World Case Studies

5.1. The Night Manager (TV Adaptation)

The series revolves around an international arms deal—high stakes, global politics. Yet the most gripping moments are tiny: a bartender polishing glasses while listening to a covert conversation, the rustle of a ticket stub that reveals an undercover operative’s identity. The “hero” is never a chest‑pounding soldier but a weary coffee‑shop clerk whose nervous glance does the storytelling.

5.2. The White Tiger (Aravind Adiga)

While the novel touches on India’s class struggle and economic upheaval, the reader’s hook is Balram’s observation of a cracked tile in his master’s bathroom. That mundane detail becomes a metaphor for the fissures in the social order. No grand speeches—just the felt reality of a cracked surface.

5.3. The Secret History (Donna Tartt)

A murder in an elite college becomes the focal point. The “heroic” act is a quiet, trembling hand placing a book back on a shelf; the trivial act of adjusting a cufflink reveals guilt. The story’s power lies in the micro-behaviours, not the headline‑making crime.


6. Frequently Asked Questions

QuestionShort Answer
Can I still have a “heroic” moment?Yes—just make it earned and subtle. A quiet decision that reflects growth is more powerful than a shouted declaration.
What if my story is a thriller?Even thrillers need texture. A sniper’s routine of sharpening a blade, the sound of a ticking clock, the taste of stale coffee—these ground the adrenaline.
Is there a risk of “over‑trivializing” the plot?Balance is key. Trivial details should serve the larger narrative, not distract. Use them as sprinkles, not the entire cake.
How many trivial details per chapter?No hard rule. One or two well‑chosen details per scene can be enough. If you find yourself listing six unrelated facts, trim.
Do readers notice these tiny details consciously?Often they don’t notice consciously, but the brain registers them, making the world feel real and immersive.

7. The Bottom Line

The next time you sit down to write a chapter set against the roar of political upheaval, pause. Look around the room where your characters live, work, and argue. What’s the coffee stain on the ledger, the leak from the ceiling, the whisper of a child’s lullaby? Write those. Let the storm be felt through the drip.

And when you feel the urge to have your protagonist chest‑pound and deliver a cinematic monologue, ask yourself: Will my readers remember the speech or the trembling hand that penned the treaty? If the answer leans toward the former, scale it back.

Great stories are built on the foundation of the ordinary; it’s the extraordinary that rises from it.


Quick Recap Checklist

  • ✅ Identify one trivial detail for each major scene.
  • ✅ Show character emotion through small actions, not grand gestures.
  • ✅ Replace at least one “heroic” moment with a subtle, authentic choice.
  • ✅ Read aloud to catch overly dramatic language.
  • ✅ Solicit feedback: Ask beta readers what they felt rather than what they heard.

Implement these, and you’ll find your readers hooked not by the headlines of world affairs, but by the heartbeat of the everyday lives that swirl around them.


Happy writing!

If you found this post useful, subscribe for more storytelling strategies, or drop a comment below about the most memorable trivial detail you’ve ever written.


References & Further Reading:

  • Daniel Kahneman, Thinking, Fast and Slow – Concreteness Effect.
  • Ellen G. White, The Art of Narrative – The Power of Small Details.
  • John Truby, The Anatomy of Story – Character as the Engine.

A to Z – April – 2026 – E

E is for Empire State Building

Making a plan, having certain expectations, taking that leap of faith that all of us are destined to do at least once, I found myself standing at the top of the Empire State Building, on the last day of the twelfth month, exactly five years after making a promise in exactly the same place, I would be there.

There was a 3 pm in there, but that was flexible, because I always liked to be early.

It had been after high school graduation, after the prom, every bit the magical moment it was meant to be, with the girl of my dreams, Margaret Cates.  We had spent those last years of high school together, studying hard, each helping the other achieve the grades needed to enter the best University.

There was no talk of romance, of a life together, or anything other than of being brought together, almost inseparable.  We were voted the most likely to be married and living contentedly in a house with a picket fence and three children.

Expectations were what parents had, and both of our parents were best friends, who simply chose to believe the inevitable would happen.  Graduation, a combined family trip to New York to see the sights, culminating in New Year’s Eve at the top of the Empire State Building.

That was where we made the promise, no matter what, we would reconvene, that was Margaret’s word, at the same time.  It was also the first time we kissed, and I think it took a week before my heart rate went back to normal.

Soon after that, Margaret left.  She had been accepted into her university of choice.  Her parents were surprised, and my parents were in shock. 

I was not.  It was the plan.  Margaret had a plan for everything. There was no plan with me in it.  Not in those first five years.  I was sad but not devastated.

I said to my parents, if we were meant to be, she would come back.  I had to set her free.

My plan was there was no plan.  I got the grades, and I got accepted into my University of choice.

At the end of the second year, I was in a what could only be described as a car crash, and was badly injured, to the extent that I had to put my life on hold.

I would recover, not one hundred per cent but enough to continue whatever path I’d chosen, but with some limitations.  The doctor was upbeat, and my parents were upbeat.

I went home, not quite in the manner I’d intended.  I was assured that life was like that, and I had to accept, accident or no accident, life was full of unexpected challenges.

Summer Atkins was probably the most irritating, aggravating, and ingratiating person on the planet.

She lived next door, one of five girls, the eldest, and coincidentally in my grade at high school.  In fact, she was in all the grades from Elementary.

She was gawky, awkward, loud and clumsy.  It was not her fault.  She had a kind heart, always the first to volunteer for the worst jobs, and suffered a lot at the hands of the boys and the girls, too.

I was not pleased to say when I looked back at my time that I was one of them, and probably the only one who apologised after the prom for what had been, at times, unforgivable.  The prank for the prom was probably her lowest point.

It took a week before she would come out of her room, and I came over every day to join the few who actually cared about her.  After Margaret left and before I followed, we spent time together, where she asked me what she needed to do to just get to talk to a guy like me.

I thought it strange.  She was talking to me, I was talking to her, we had coffee and cake at the diner and hung out.  She had no aspirations to go to college, just to help her parents look after her siblings and work in the diner.  I had suggested she might want to do something for herself, and she looked at me strangely.  I did not, she said, understand her.

We parted awkwardly, with this thing I had done, but what it was, I had no idea.  It ended when she told me that if I was waiting for Margaret, I would be waiting a long time.  How did she know anything about what my expectations were?

I came back home under the radar.  I didn’t want anyone to know because I had set myself a high bar, and I was never going to reach it.

I felt that I had become a disappointment to my parents, and while they put on a brave face, and my siblings were polite, it was clear that they were happy for me to hide away, and my siblings were happy to see the high flyer crash and burn.  Kid would be kids, I expected no less.

So when Summer unexpectedly knocked on the door, a certain element of panic went through the house.  Upstairs, I heard that voice drift up the stairs with mixed emotions.  I wanted to see her, but I didn’t want to see her.

Not like this.  It was an odd feeling, and I couldn’t understand what fuelled it.  It was Summer, she wouldn’t care, more likely revel in the fact.  How the mighty had fallen.

My mother answered the door.

“Mrs Abercrombie, you look tired?”  The grating tone had gone, her voice had softened, and there was genuine concern in it.

“It’s…”

She caught herself before mentioning my name.  It had been a secret for about a month.  I was surprised Summer had not called earlier.

My mother shifted the topic.  She was good at that.  “How is your father?  That latest bout of chemotherapy cannot be helping the diner.”

“He’s responding to the treatment, and we’re managing.  How are you faring without Allen?  I’m sorry I should have come over more often.”

“It’s fine.  We’re all coping with life as best we can.”

“How is Allen, if I may ask?”

That was Summer.  Gets the bit between her teeth and doesn’t let go.

My mother was not one to lie.  Obfuscate but not lie.  Not outright.  But confronted…

“Something’s wrong,” she said in a hushed voice, so low I couldn’t barely hear her.  I could virtually see my mother’s face.  It had always been expressive.  It’s why she could never play poker.

It went quiet for a minute or two, and I knew it was time to brace myself.  Summer was the last person I wanted to see, perhaps the only one other than Margaret, not that I expected her to drop everything.

Again, I couldn’t explain why, other than showing vulnerability. 

A few minutes passed while I was hoping my mother would explain that I didn’t want to see anyone, that I wanted to be better before facing the outside world.  Whether Summer would accede to a request if leaving me alone was moot.

If she knew I was there, she would not hesitate to come up and remind me of the Allen of old, with the shoe now firmly on the other foot.

I tried hiding under the covers, but she had X-ray eyes.  I knew she was in the room; I could feel her presence.  And the scent she used was a hint of primrose.  Once it was far stronger, but I suspect she had mastered the art of cosmetic use.

“You will suffocate long before I leave, Allen.  I’m not the same girl you left behind.  I don’t hate you.  I did for a while, but then I realised you cared when all the rest didn’t.  I’m sorry we parted angry.”

She sounded reasonable, far more reasonable than I expected.  She should have still been angry, if not with me, but with the others.

“OK.  If you don’t come out, I’ll get in there with you.  You know me well enough to know I will.”

Did I know her well enough?  I never took the opportunity.  No one wanted to because she didn’t fit the other girls’ profile.  It wasn’t like that at University, there it was simply a competition.  There was dating, but it was more convenient than romance.  There were not many hours left in a day for extracurricular activities.

When I peeled back the covers, it was like seeing an angel, the sun shining in the window, throwing a glow over her.  Summer had changed from the awkward, ugly duckling into a graceful Swan.

A look of concern crossed her face.  Just lifting the covers was a difficult task, like most normal movements we all took for granted.  It was getting easier and less painful, but it would take time.

“What happened to you?”

“A car and I had a disagreement.  It won.”

“And you didn’t think to tell me.  How long have you been here?  What do you need? Tell me, and I’ll make it happen.”

Summer basically glued me back together.  It was, she said, one of her projects, others minding the children of silly sisters, nursing her farther past cancer, keeping up her waitress job at the diner, and just being Summer, the girl who always pitched in.

Such was the value of her help that my mother said I should marry her before someone else snapped her up.  Just before I was to go back to University, I did just that, but she rejected me.

There was someone else, and he was going to propose any day.

I could respect that.  Whatever I thought she might think of me, I would forever be one of those boys who made her life hell.  I didn’t deserve someone like her.  I just got on the train and left.

But the truth was, I was never the same again.

How could I?

I had tried to tell Margaret, but the terms of the pact were clear.  5 years, do your thing, meet and discuss.  If feelings were the same, who knew what might happen?

I was disappointed I hadn’t been able to find her, but I had a story to tell.

A year after returning, I gave it up.  I didn’t have the same enthusiasm, and feeling like a failure, I didn’t go home.  I simply pretended everything was fine and moved to New York and found work in a rather offbeat bookshop in Queens.

It fuelled my love of literature, and after reading anything and everything, I started writing my version of the Great American Novel.  Small-town boy makes it big in the big city.  A bit like my life, really.

Which brings us back to the Empire State Building.

3pm.

And Margaret.

I saw her and thought she was coming to the spot.  She looked different, older, smarter, and with a touch of elegance and sophistication.

Halfway, I saw her smile and then wrap her arms around this bear of a man whom I instantly recognised.  I mean, you would have to live under a rock not to know him.

Her parents were there, and a bunch of media people.  The oohs and ahhs told me it was the moment he went down on one knee; it was going to be a News At 6 moment.

I was but a distant memory, forgotten in her moment of agreeing to be Mrs Albert Johnstone Gerythorn III.

I guess the employee of an eclectic bookshop was hardly a match for a multi-billionaire, or one who was soon to be.

“Sucks to be you.”

It did.  That voice, the one that had grated on my nerves nearly all of my school years, came from behind me.

I knew who it was.  I didn’t turn around.

“I knew it was a mistake to tell you my innermost secrets.”

“Oh, I would not have missed this for the world.”

I felt her hand slip into mine and her body move closer. 

“Five years is a long time.  People change.”

“People like us change, Allen.  People like her do not.”

“I thought you were getting married?”

“So did I.  I guess we were both wrong.  Found that cute little bookshop of yours.  If I didn’t know you better, I’d be guessing you’ve started that great American novel.  Am I right or am I right?”

“You know me too well.  You want to stay, or shall we find another circus, something a little more our style?”

“Do we have one?”

“Of course.  Everyone has style.”

Then I noticed Margaret was coming towards us, a rather serious expression on her face.  Had she finally recognised me?

“Excuse me, but the photographers would like to get some photos of my fiancée and me by this corner.  It would be most appreciated.”

No.  No sign of recognition.

Summer instead smiled sweetly, ” Of course, Margery Mugmouth, the pleasure would be all ours.”

It was Margaret’s nickname among those girls she trashed, and she instantly recognised Summer, and then me.

“Five years, to the day.  You came.  Have a happy life, Margaret.”

With that, we left.

A reporter, or just someone with a notepad, was scribbling frantically and then tried to head us off at the elevator.  Just too late.  The doors closed.

“The nerve,” Summer said.  “That was our corner.  Or I hope it will be.”

“So did I.  Would you like to marry me?” I asked.

The elevator went silent, except for the whishing sound of it going down.

“She made a face, quite amusing, and then said, “Yes.”

People outside the elevator when it arrived thought something bad had happened, given the roar and applause which followed us out into the foyer after it arrived.

Five years, on the last day of the last month at 3 pm, something did happen.  I proposed to the girl of my dreams.  I just hadn’t realised it until then.

©  Charles Heath  2026

365 Days of writing, 2026 – 79

Day 79 – Irrelevant trivialities

Why the Small Stuff Beats the Big Stuff: What Really Hooks Readers (And Why Over‑The‑Top Heroes Can Turn Them Off)


  • Readers remember the everyday, not the epic. A scene about a coffee‑spilled meeting can out‑shine a chapter on a geopolitical summit.
  • Tiny, relatable details act as emotional anchors that keep the audience glued to the page.
  • “Chest‑pounding, wildly gesticulating heroes” feel like propaganda, not people. Readers want flawed, grounded protagonists, not cartoon‑ish mascots.
  • Writing tip: Sprinkle specific, sensory “trivialities” throughout your narrative and let your characters react authentically.

1. The Myth of the “Grand Event”

When you think of a story set against the backdrop of political turbulence—a coup, a trade war, climate‑policy battles—you might assume the macro events are the magnetic core. After all, they’re the headlines.

But ask yourself:

  • Do readers remember the exact date a treaty was signed?
  • Do they recite the exact number of votes in a parliament?

Rarely. What stays is the human fallout of those events: the cramped office where a junior analyst slips a secret note under a coffee mug, the nervous laugh of a teenager watching a televised protest, the sound of a door that refuses to close properly in a tense diplomatic hallway.

These are the “irrelevant trivialities” that feel relevant because they are personal.

The Science

Cognitive psychologists call this the “concreteness effect.” Concrete, sensory details are easier for the brain to encode and retrieve than abstract concepts. A story about “economic sanctions” can be dull, but a story about “the metallic clink of a coin dropping from a nervous hand as a sanction is announced” sticks.


2. Trivialities as Story‑Fuel: A Few Proven Examples

Trivial DetailWhat It RevealsWhy It Hooks
A broken pen on a diplomat’s deskThe diplomat’s hurried preparation, underlying anxietyReaders picture the scene; the pen becomes a symbol of vulnerability
The way a protester’s shoes squeak on wet pavementThe protester’s perseverance despite discomfortAuditory detail pulls readers into the moment
A toddler’s “why?” after hearing the newsThe generational ripple of political eventsHighlights stakes in a fresh, innocent voice
The smell of burnt toast in a kitchen where a secret meeting is plannedThe domestic normalcy juxtaposed with clandestine actionSmell is a powerful memory trigger; it grounds the plot
A half‑written text message left unsentThe character’s indecision, fear of consequencesCreates suspense without a single explosive headline

Takeaway: The tiny can carry the weight of the massive. Use them as micro‑hooks that pull the reader deeper into the macro plot.


3. When “Heroic Gestures” Turn Into Annoyance

Imagine a scene where the protagonist, after a tense negotiation, slams his fist on the table, chest out, voice echoing:

“We will not be bowed down! Our destiny is ours!”

It might feel satisfying on paper, but to a modern reader it can feel over‑the‑top for three reasons:

  1. It’s Show‑rather‑than‑Tell on Steroids
    The gesture tells us “this character is brave” without letting us experience the courage through choices, doubts, and consequences.
  2. It Undermines Relatability
    Real people don’t deliver speeches in Hollywood slow‑motion. They fidget, they bite their lip, they stumble over words. When a character behaves like a marble statue, readers can’t see themselves in them.
  3. It Drowns Out the Real Stakes
    The drama of the political storm is drowned in a melodramatic performance. The audience’s attention shifts from what’s happening to how loudly the hero is shouting.

The Better Way: Flawed, Measured, Human

Instead of a grandiose chest‑pound, try:

  • A quiet, nervous laugh after a risky decision.
  • A hand trembling as they sign a treaty, betraying fear.
  • A solitary walk through a rain‑slicked corridor, reflecting on the consequences of the day’s events.

These moments show bravery, fear, doubt, and resolve through action—they let the reader feel the hero rather than being told they’re a hero.


4. Practical Strategies for Writers

Below are actionable steps to let trivialities do the heavy lifting and keep heroic gestures in check.

A. Build a “Triviality Checklist” for Every Scene

Scene ElementTrivial Detail to AddSensory Cue
Political rallyA protester’s cracked phone screenVisual (shattered glass)
Diplomatic briefingThe faint hum of an air‑conditioning unitAuditory (steady whirr)
War‑room decisionA coffee mug with a chipped rimTactile (cold ceramic)
After‑effects of a treatyThe lingering scent of fresh‑cut grass from a nearby parkOlfactory (green, hopeful)
Personal falloutA child’s drawing pinned to a refrigeratorVisual (crayon lines)

Why? It forces you to pause and ask, “What little thing is happening here that could reveal something deeper?”

B. Replace One “Heroic Gesture” with a Micro‑Choice

  • Instead of: “He raised his sword and shouted.”
  • Write: “He slipped the sword back into its sheath, his hand shaking just enough to catch the edge of the blade.”

The choice is more telling than the gesture.

C. Use “Object‑Perspective” to Anchor Trivialities

Pick an object in the scene—say, a paperclip—and describe its interaction with characters. The paperclip might bend as a diplomat’s hand trembles, or get lost in a chaotic desk drawer, symbolising the fragile nature of negotiations.

D. Test for “Heroic Overkill”

After drafting, ask yourself:

  1. Does the scene convey the character’s inner state through subtle actions?
  2. Would the same emotional punch work if the hero were an ordinary person?
  3. Am I relying on a single, flamboyant gesture to summarise the moment?

If you answer yes to any, tone it down.


5. Real‑World Case Studies

5.1. The Night Manager (TV Adaptation)

The series revolves around an international arms deal—high stakes, global politics. Yet the most gripping moments are tiny: a bartender polishing glasses while listening to a covert conversation, the rustle of a ticket stub that reveals an undercover operative’s identity. The “hero” is never a chest‑pounding soldier but a weary coffee‑shop clerk whose nervous glance does the storytelling.

5.2. The White Tiger (Aravind Adiga)

While the novel touches on India’s class struggle and economic upheaval, the reader’s hook is Balram’s observation of a cracked tile in his master’s bathroom. That mundane detail becomes a metaphor for the fissures in the social order. No grand speeches—just the felt reality of a cracked surface.

5.3. The Secret History (Donna Tartt)

A murder in an elite college becomes the focal point. The “heroic” act is a quiet, trembling hand placing a book back on a shelf; the trivial act of adjusting a cufflink reveals guilt. The story’s power lies in the micro-behaviours, not the headline‑making crime.


6. Frequently Asked Questions

QuestionShort Answer
Can I still have a “heroic” moment?Yes—just make it earned and subtle. A quiet decision that reflects growth is more powerful than a shouted declaration.
What if my story is a thriller?Even thrillers need texture. A sniper’s routine of sharpening a blade, the sound of a ticking clock, the taste of stale coffee—these ground the adrenaline.
Is there a risk of “over‑trivializing” the plot?Balance is key. Trivial details should serve the larger narrative, not distract. Use them as sprinkles, not the entire cake.
How many trivial details per chapter?No hard rule. One or two well‑chosen details per scene can be enough. If you find yourself listing six unrelated facts, trim.
Do readers notice these tiny details consciously?Often they don’t notice consciously, but the brain registers them, making the world feel real and immersive.

7. The Bottom Line

The next time you sit down to write a chapter set against the roar of political upheaval, pause. Look around the room where your characters live, work, and argue. What’s the coffee stain on the ledger, the leak from the ceiling, the whisper of a child’s lullaby? Write those. Let the storm be felt through the drip.

And when you feel the urge to have your protagonist chest‑pound and deliver a cinematic monologue, ask yourself: Will my readers remember the speech or the trembling hand that penned the treaty? If the answer leans toward the former, scale it back.

Great stories are built on the foundation of the ordinary; it’s the extraordinary that rises from it.


Quick Recap Checklist

  • ✅ Identify one trivial detail for each major scene.
  • ✅ Show character emotion through small actions, not grand gestures.
  • ✅ Replace at least one “heroic” moment with a subtle, authentic choice.
  • ✅ Read aloud to catch overly dramatic language.
  • ✅ Solicit feedback: Ask beta readers what they felt rather than what they heard.

Implement these, and you’ll find your readers hooked not by the headlines of world affairs, but by the heartbeat of the everyday lives that swirl around them.


Happy writing!

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References & Further Reading:

  • Daniel Kahneman, Thinking, Fast and Slow – Concreteness Effect.
  • Ellen G. White, The Art of Narrative – The Power of Small Details.
  • John Truby, The Anatomy of Story – Character as the Engine.