Behind the Green Door

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This is where, when you get to the end of the story the ending starts to look a little lame and there are other scenarios dancing in the back of your mind.

The original – Michael has the adjudication, goes through the green door and meets Elsie who is alive, had hijacked a rocket, put Michael into a robot form and they head for the stars.

Silly huh?

For a few weeks that scenario was basically the same but with different variations. Michael was always going to wake up in a new form with Elsie either as a human or new form too.

It’s why in some many places in the last few chapters Michael believes Elsie is still alive.

She isn’t.

She died, and I’m still not sure how she died yet, but there’s at least three different versions. I will need to refine that when the next edit is done. The one I like the most is that a debilitating disease killed her, that she was not murdered by the Pendletons or anyone else.

To be honest, I didn’t want her to die, but Michael needs the motivation to do what he needs to do, using his investigative skills spurred on by a dislike of management to work out what is really going on.

The adjudication proceeds.

The jury gives its decision.

And…

It’s not what you think.

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Word written today 2,500, making a total of 50,050 words

Behind the Green Door

…

This is where, when you get to the end of the story the ending starts to look a little lame and there are other scenarios dancing in the back of your mind.

The original – Michael has the adjudication, goes through the green door and meets Elsie who is alive, had hijacked a rocket, put Michael into a robot form and they head for the stars.

Silly huh?

For a few weeks that scenario was basically the same but with different variations. Michael was always going to wake up in a new form with Elsie either as a human or new form too.

It’s why in some many places in the last few chapters Michael believes Elsie is still alive.

She isn’t.

She died, and I’m still not sure how she died yet, but there’s at least three different versions. I will need to refine that when the next edit is done. The one I like the most is that a debilitating disease killed her, that she was not murdered by the Pendletons or anyone else.

To be honest, I didn’t want her to die, but Michael needs the motivation to do what he needs to do, using his investigative skills spurred on by a dislike of management to work out what is really going on.

The adjudication proceeds.

The jury gives its decision.

And…

It’s not what you think.

…

Word written today 2,500, making a total of 50,050 words

Behind the Green Door

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Michaels last day proceeds, another case, another sparring session with, well Michael isn’t quite sure who he’s sparring with anymore.

I’m still refining the parts of Elsie that exist inside Miranda. Since this is a story, and science fiction, I like the idea that Miranda is really Elsie, but to me that sounds a little far fetched.

It’s why in the orginal plan, Miranda is a blank slate in which a person’s essence could be transplanted, so that form then became that person. Then she was supposed to behave as Miranda until a secret word was uttered, and she transformed.

But…

You can program articifical intelligence into a robot but it is only as good as the programmers who created it. It’s not possible to covered every eventuality, and it will never be as adaptable or reactive as a human. Ai needs to know every single nuance and thats not possible for one or two proagrammers or a whole bunch of them.

It’s why I’ve been wrestling with the how Miranda/Elsie should and does react to Michael and others, and it will require a bit more work in the first edit. Having Elsie hiding within the programming gives me the opportunity to allow Elsie and their relationship to shine through.

It’s now time to front up to the adjudication, face the jury of his peers, and see old friends for the last time.

And hear what Miranda has to say about him as a final wrap up of his life.

To say the least, it’s underwhelming.

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Word written today 1,925, making a total of 47,550 words

Behind the Green Door

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Michaels last day proceeds, another case, another sparring session with, well Michael isn’t quite sure who he’s sparring with anymore.

I’m still refining the parts of Elsie that exist inside Miranda. Since this is a story, and science fiction, I like the idea that Miranda is really Elsie, but to me that sounds a little far fetched.

It’s why in the orginal plan, Miranda is a blank slate in which a person’s essence could be transplanted, so that form then became that person. Then she was supposed to behave as Miranda until a secret word was uttered, and she transformed.

But…

You can program articifical intelligence into a robot but it is only as good as the programmers who created it. It’s not possible to covered every eventuality, and it will never be as adaptable or reactive as a human. Ai needs to know every single nuance and thats not possible for one or two proagrammers or a whole bunch of them.

It’s why I’ve been wrestling with the how Miranda/Elsie should and does react to Michael and others, and it will require a bit more work in the first edit. Having Elsie hiding within the programming gives me the opportunity to allow Elsie and their relationship to shine through.

It’s now time to front up to the adjudication, face the jury of his peers, and see old friends for the last time.

And hear what Miranda has to say about him as a final wrap up of his life.

To say the least, it’s underwhelming.

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Word written today 1,925, making a total of 47,550 words

Behind the Green Door

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Is it too late to say I’m not happy with the ending.

I was not sure what I expected, but Michael, in the original plan, such as it was, was going to have the adjudication and accept his fate.

However, along the way he has kind of changed his mind and doesn’t want to go.

Except…

There isn’t a compelling reason to go on now that Elsie is dead, and there is no fulfilment in continuing.

Revelation one – he is not the leader of the revolutionaries.

Revelation two – there is not going to be a revolution, never was, never will be. No one is that upset with the life they have, just that they are not being told the truth about their existence.

Well, in reality, only a handful of people know they are not being told the truth.

The thimng is, as the story develops, even if there is a loose plan, ideas become more intricate and developed making outcomes possibly different.

We know that people can go outside. I want to make more of that.

But, I need to finish the story as intended and then go back and make some changes, before the month is up.

Stay tuned.

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Word written today 2,557, making a total of 45,625 words

Behind the Green Door

…

Is it too late to say I’m not happy with the ending.

I was not sure what I expected, but Michael, in the original plan, such as it was, was going to have the adjudication and accept his fate.

However, along the way he has kind of changed his mind and doesn’t want to go.

Except…

There isn’t a compelling reason to go on now that Elsie is dead, and there is no fulfilment in continuing.

Revelation one – he is not the leader of the revolutionaries.

Revelation two – there is not going to be a revolution, never was, never will be. No one is that upset with the life they have, just that they are not being told the truth about their existence.

Well, in reality, only a handful of people know they are not being told the truth.

The thimng is, as the story develops, even if there is a loose plan, ideas become more intricate and developed making outcomes possibly different.

We know that people can go outside. I want to make more of that.

But, I need to finish the story as intended and then go back and make some changes, before the month is up.

Stay tuned.

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Word written today 2,557, making a total of 45,625 words

Behind the Green Door

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So, for the purpose of this story, we are told that Elsie and her mother come from another city.

We are also told that Michael’s mother came from another city, and, because of that, she was required to undergo a debriefing after arrival. We also learn that when she was taken away for interrogation, the secret police believed she was possibly a spy for the other city, they were a little too enthusiastic and she died.

For this reason, Michael’s father was very bitter towards the administrators of their city. It’s possible that was the reason why he formed, or joined the underground resistance movement, though it’s never quite sure what they are resisting.

Elsie’s mother who came from the same city, was not treated the same because she married one of the administrators, and it might be inferred, or believed, as Michael’s father did, that Elsie was ‘planted’ among them to relay information on them back to the secret police.

Michael never quite believed that was the case, until one night he followed her, and made a discovery that was ‘surprising’. What also was surprising was why she married him, when she could have done a lot better for herself.

Their life together plays out until her death, an event that was never fully described to him, and was a secret project of his, to find out the truth.

An opportunity arises with Miranda – and the question is, does she know?

What he does discover about Miranda, she is quite good at telling lies.

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Word written today 1,850, making a total of 35,290 words