NANOWRIMO – April 2025 – Day 1

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The Fourth Son

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It is sometimes quite strange where the ideas for a story come from.

This one started with a man on the roof of an apartment block with a telescope, a place where he can seek refuge from work and people.

Being in New York, of course, made it all the more impossible to get a clear night and a clearer sky, but perhaps it was more about the solitude.

Then I read about the planets lining up, which doesn’t happen very often, and you know the saying, when the planets line up, maybe. .

So, I had my protagonist.

Now, I needed someone to interrupt the solitude and then focus him on the notion that when one door closes, another opens.

Of course the protagonist who is hiding something out of the ordinary, someone with a secret, and someone who has feelings for another who in the greater schene of things in his life, is someone who would not be ‘the right choice’.

Except his position allows him the freedom to choose whom he wants.

A scare finds him beginning to realise that he can not remain behind that veil of anonymity for much longer, and one way or another, it is going to be exposed.

But, by the time he decides to make his feelings known, his secret is no longer a secret.

Writing a book in 365 days – 74/75

Days 74 and 75

Write about a character through dress, expressions, gait, and mannerisms and what makes them memorable. Then, who do they love or fear, where are they going, and do they have a secret?

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If there was one definable item about Jacqueline Bennet, it would be that she could not disappear in a crowd.

I know, I was sent by head office to collect her from the railway station, with the only identification, the fact she was wearing a red coat.

If only…

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For the last six months it had been my assignment to collect people. From the airport, from the bus station, from the train station. The least favourite was the train station.

I had to try and find the new interns in the throngs of people who all got off the train and swelled up into a swirling mass of bodies so thick sometimes all I could see was heads.

Today was no exception, except…

Jacqueline was wearing a hat, purple, almost the shape of a peacock, and as large. I saw the hat before the red coat. That, itself, was so bright it hurt my eyes.

It took three attempts to introduce myself and convince her I was not trying to kidnap her and have her sent to some harem in Arabia. I said there was no such place as Arabia, and it elicited one of seven expressions which by the time I got her to the office I’d worked out to be, incredulous, surprised, dismayed, disappointed, happy, sad, and angry. These expressions were accompanied by little mannerisms, a tic in her left eye, blinking excessively, pursing her lips and sighing. There was a nervous giggle, but I was not sure where that fitted.

She was mostly disappointed, mainly because Mr Brightman, the CEO, had not come to greet her, and instead it was some minion.

I knew this much about her before we got out the main entrance to Grand Central Station, and it was more than I cared to know.

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Outside the station, we caught a cab to the office and then spent the next thirty-five minutes in traffic. For some reason, it was unusually bad because the normal time it took was between ten and fifteen minutes.

The first five minutes were rather tense, so I thought I would lighten the atmosphere by asking, “Where did you come from?”

At first, I thought she was going to ignore me, but then, after a sideways glance that suggested she didn’t tell minions such personal things about herself, she said, “Bridgewater, Ohio.”

When I asked if it was big or small, she said it was a place no one had heard of because it wasn’t a real town. It was a hell hole that everyone wanted to escape. I can’t imagine any place, especially your hometown, as being somewhere you would want to leave willingly, but apparently, the highway that passed through and kept all the businesses going had its route changed and had now bypassed the town. It was the reason for her move, the cafe she worked at had closed, as did just about everything else.

Then there was the toxic relationship with her high school sweetheart, which had been affected by everything else and forced her to make the decision to get away. New city, new start. Our employment agency was recommended by one of her friends who had also made the decision to leave, and had found a happy situation in Florida. Jacqueline was hoping for California.

I had lived in New York all my life and had never suffered the problems that seem to plague the Midwest. Jacqueline was not the first or the last person who had fled their previous existence, but the story seemed to the the same.

But listening to her story tumble out in short, breathless sentences, I felt there was something more behind her move. It was that one statement, thrown in there among the others, that if you were not listening, you would have missed it. “Big cities, they provide an anonymity that can give you that ability to reinvent yourself.”

They could. But equally, a person could simply disappear and never be found again. It had happened to several of the people who had come to us for employment, and this girl, who was under all of that bravado and camouflage, people who had come from abusive homes or relationships, the production of bad education, wasted opportunities, and economic downturn. Anything had to be better than what they had.

“Don’t do it,” I said. We were about five minutes away from the office.

“Don’t do what?”

“Walk in the door, go and see Mr Brightman, accept the job he has picked out for you. Don’t.”

She picked up on the urgency in my tone. I knew what was going to happen, as much as I told myself over and over, it wouldn’t.

“Why? Why on earth would you say such a thing?”

“Because I think you were right when you said you’d finish up in a harem in one of those Arab states. Girls come and girls go, but when I try to find out where they’ve gone, they either never arrived or left soon after they started.”

She looked at me like she thought I was an axe murderer, not a messenger.

“How come you’re telling me this?”

“I don’t know. He’s going to kill me when he finds out, but I don’t like this job any more, and talking to you, hearing what it is he is using to lure people like you, that idea that ‘it’s too good to be true’ just reverberates in my head. I was like you three years ago. Small town boy with big aspirations, running away from an abusive father and a town full of bullies. I’m still that boy, big town, small town, the fears are the same, only here, it can swallow you up.”

I’d walked out of the boarding house that morning with nothing but the money I had saved and the notion that I could get on a train to anywhere, that I would not meet the girl, and hope that she would think she had been abandoned and do something else. Then, at the station, like the times before, I lost my nerve.

I pulled out the money and divided it into two. “Take this, find somewhere to stay, and don’t go to Mr Brightman. You can’t trust him. I’m not going back.”

“Now you’re scaring me.”

“You should be. Stop the cab. We’ll get out here.”

“But…”

“If you make one right decision in your life, let it be this one. Take the money. Please.”

The cab stopped, and I paid the fare. I got out and held the door. In that moment, I could see all of the fears that I had myself the first day I arrived, and the girl that Mr Bightman had sent to fetch me. If I’d known then what I know now…”

“Please.”

Finally, she stepped out of the cab. We both watched it drive off.

“Now what?”

“Take the money, and believe that it is the first day of the rest of your life.”

The sun chose that moment to finally come out from behind the clouds and transform that cold, wintry morning into a world filled with possibilities. She looked at me and smiled, the look of a woman who had made a decision.

“Did you have a plan when you left home this morning?”

“Other than I was not going to work for Mr Brightman any more, no. I was going to the station, but I was going to get on a train to anywhere but here.”

She shrugged. “I always wanted to go to California, but I didn’t want to go there alone. Fancy joining me? I mean, I still don’t trust you completely, but I can tell if you are telling me the truth or not.”

“Are you sure?”

“No. But what’s the alternative if your suspicions are right?”

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Decisions are made, rightly or wrongly, based sometimes on reality, but often on a hunch.

We went back to the station on foot, taking the opportunity to talk. I think it was her idea that if I was an axe murderer, I would lose patience and simply move on or show my true colours. That I
was willing to talk, tell her all my hopes and aspirations, and how I’d settled for three years in a rut that felt safe.

We had lunch and spent the afternoon getting ourselves from Grand Central to Penn station, and then the next three days sewing the seeds of a friendship that lasted the rest of our lives.

It was interesting to read a small article in the paper about three weeks later, as I settled into a new job working for a large distribution centre as dispatch clerk, the arrest of Mr Brightman, aka Chuck Sentry, aka Walter Winsome, aka Jonathon Bentley on charges relating to the disappearance of at least fourteen people.

They were all the names I could remember, and I wrote them down in a letter and sent it anonymously to the NYPD.

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©  Charles Heath  2025

Writing a book in 365 days – My story 9

More about my story

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There’s always something about that knock on the door in a hotel when you’re not expecting anyone.

This is more so when you are staying in the hotel for reasons other than what you intimated to the desk clerk.

The art of not being noticed is to be anonymous, the sort of person that does not stand out, that no one gives a second look.  That’s a bit hard if you are an Englishman in a foreign country.  Language, skin colour, dietary requirements, allergies, heat or cold, and travelling alone are all features which will catch someone’s attention.

Yes, like the arrivals hall at an international airport, as in a hotel lobby, there are spies watching the spies.

That’s why a universal occupation like journalist flies well in these situations.  And given there is an international conference, he can hide in plain sight.

Except, the police chief likes to know who he’s dealing with and meets up for a little discussion about protocol.  After all, he wouldn’t the first or last journalist to find himself in breach of the customs of the country.

Mind what you write.

And yes, there is a chief of the secret police, a man who scares everyone from the president down, the man who makes people disappear, and we’re going with the dark sunglasses, immaculate uniform, I think I’m a god, tropes.

NANOWRIMO – April 2025 – Day 0

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The Fourth Son

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This store started out as When The Planets Align.

I had this cute idea forming in Mt head as a short story for the A to Z blog, about a man of Royal blood living anonymously in America, away from the mechanations of a Royal life.

After all, he was the fourth son, and reading and hearing so much about Prince Harry being a ‘spare’, I wondered what it would be like if you were the third spare.

So far down the inheritance ladder that you were basically worthless for anything but donning a suit and smiling.  There was only one king, the eldest son.  Any chance of everyone dying so he could take the throne was unbelievable.

It could never, ever happen.

Could it?

And yes, you can guess where this is going.

Never say never ..

Writing a book in 365 days – My story 9

More about my story

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There’s always something about that knock on the door in a hotel when you’re not expecting anyone.

This is more so when you are staying in the hotel for reasons other than what you intimated to the desk clerk.

The art of not being noticed is to be anonymous, the sort of person that does not stand out, that no one gives a second look.  That’s a bit hard if you are an Englishman in a foreign country.  Language, skin colour, dietary requirements, allergies, heat or cold, and travelling alone are all features which will catch someone’s attention.

Yes, like the arrivals hall at an international airport, as in a hotel lobby, there are spies watching the spies.

That’s why a universal occupation like journalist flies well in these situations.  And given there is an international conference, he can hide in plain sight.

Except, the police chief likes to know who he’s dealing with and meets up for a little discussion about protocol.  After all, he wouldn’t the first or last journalist to find himself in breach of the customs of the country.

Mind what you write.

And yes, there is a chief of the secret police, a man who scares everyone from the president down, the man who makes people disappear, and we’re going with the dark sunglasses, immaculate uniform, I think I’m a god, tropes.

Writing a book in 365 days – 73

Day 73

Editing – getting the reader invested

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There are two, possibly more, but two fundamental questions you have to ask yourself when you are reading through your work, and perhaps for the first time after finishing writing that first draft.

What am I saying?

What happens next for the characters?

Here’s the thing…

What your saying is what the reader wants to know, what sets the tone, what sets up the story. I like to throw readers in the deep right from the start, to give the reader a sense of who they’re going on the journey with.

In my opinion, a book is a journey and the more compelling you can make it, the more invested the reader will be.

Your ultimate aim: that the reader cannot put the book down. They just have to read a bit more to see what happens.

It is always going to be what happens next, whether our protagonist is hanging out of a helicopter trying to avoid being killed, or chasing a lead (or person), chasing a suspect or a person of interest, or just a red herring or entanglement.

And there is always that trope, the cliff hanger at the end of every chapter.

Writing a book in 365 days – 73

Day 73

Editing – getting the reader invested

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There are two, possibly more, but two fundamental questions you have to ask yourself when you are reading through your work, and perhaps for the first time after finishing writing that first draft.

What am I saying?

What happens next for the characters?

Here’s the thing…

What your saying is what the reader wants to know, what sets the tone, what sets up the story. I like to throw readers in the deep right from the start, to give the reader a sense of who they’re going on the journey with.

In my opinion, a book is a journey and the more compelling you can make it, the more invested the reader will be.

Your ultimate aim: that the reader cannot put the book down. They just have to read a bit more to see what happens.

It is always going to be what happens next, whether our protagonist is hanging out of a helicopter trying to avoid being killed, or chasing a lead (or person), chasing a suspect or a person of interest, or just a red herring or entanglement.

And there is always that trope, the cliff hanger at the end of every chapter.

Writing a book in 365 days – 72

Day 72

Originality

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So, can you write a completely original fiction story? Some would say they could, but every time you pick up a book, can you say that you have not seen parts of it before, in one form or another?

It is said that there are only seven basic plots that are used over and over again.

Others will say there are three, six, or thirty-six. No one can seem to agree on a number, but they all believe there is just a small number of master plots from which every story is written.

  1. Overcoming the Monster
  2. Rags to Riches
  3. The Quest
  4. Voyage and Return
  5. Rebirth
  6. Comedy
  7. Tragedy

This is from The Seven Basic Plots: Why We Tell Stories by Christopher Booker.

There are endless variations, some end happy, others sad, and what is left in tragedy.

I like to have happy endings and am not a fan of sad endings, there’s enough of those on TV, and I think the last thing we want before we go to bed is to see a show that reflects daily life. I like to see the good guys win every now and then just to restore my faith in human nature.

Writing a book in 365 days – 72

Day 72

Originality

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So, can you write a completely original fiction story? Some would say they could, but every time you pick up a book, can you say that you have not seen parts of it before, in one form or another?

It is said that there are only seven basic plots that are used over and over again.

Others will say there are three, six, or thirty-six. No one can seem to agree on a number, but they all believe there is just a small number of master plots from which every story is written.

  1. Overcoming the Monster
  2. Rags to Riches
  3. The Quest
  4. Voyage and Return
  5. Rebirth
  6. Comedy
  7. Tragedy

This is from The Seven Basic Plots: Why We Tell Stories by Christopher Booker.

There are endless variations, some end happy, others sad, and what is left in tragedy.

I like to have happy endings and am not a fan of sad endings, there’s enough of those on TV, and I think the last thing we want before we go to bed is to see a show that reflects daily life. I like to see the good guys win every now and then just to restore my faith in human nature.

Writing a book in 365 days – 71

Day 71

Editing, and the effect on length

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Sometimes editing has a different effect on how long the book will be.

Sending it to an editor with the instruction to lose 20,000 words of a novel that is 110,000 words long will get just that. That’s the editor’s job.

Sending a book to another editor and telling them to make sure the story is written properly, that there’s continuity, and the character’s timelines and backstories are fitting, may add another 20,000 words.

As a case in point, one of my stories started out at 365 pages. It was read by three different beta readers who all said the same thing. There were parts of the novel ‘missing’.

I read it, then reread it, and could see what they meant. I sat down and rewrote it, filling in the gaps, and when I was finished, it was 535 pages, and a completely different, but much better, story.

Sometimes it’s not a matter of cutting things out, not unless they don’t add to the story, but more that the story cannot have gaps, plot holes, and stuff happening without content or relevance.

To me, a story takes as many pages as it does to get it from the start to the end and make sense to the reader. The editor with then make suggestions on whether more is needed or less. We all tend to waffle at times, so be prepared for cuts, but these might not be as bad as it seems.