NANOWRIMO – April 2025 – Day 2

The Fourth Son

So here’s the thing.

Our protagonist’s parents have decided they want him back home, and he’s not playing the game

They talk to some reporters, and a large weekend spread about the royal family is published with photographs.

If he’s not coming back, then everyone should know who he is, and the media will then hound him into returning.

Royal parents are like that.

Of course, there is always one reporter who puts two and two together, one who had no compunction in hounding the victim to the ends of the earth for a story, and one who does.

Confronting him and his girlfriend, in his favourite restaurant, on the day he decided that it was time to make his intentions known.

Even knowing that ousting was going to be sooner rather than later, it’s still a shock, to him and his girlfriend Ruth, who is very dismayed at the braveness of the media on pursuing their pretty.

But the jig is up.  No matter how many denials, the truth is the truth, and now a whole restaurant full of diners is left to wonder.

His charmed life till now is gone.

Writing a book in 365 days – 76

Day 76

Write as you speak

If I did, it would be a jumble of words that might not make any sense. But, for the purposes of this exercise, I shall try…

I’m guessing that the point of this is that conversations have to sound natural, and often the words running around in my head sound fine but it’s when you read them out aloud that’s when it sounds wrong.

More than once, I’ve read out a sentence I’ve written and cringed. “Who talks like that?”

More than once, someone has said to me, “Did you just hear what you said?” and of course, we don’t listen to what we say, especially when we are angry and just spitting out words.

Kids make you see red, and once I did actually hear what I said, and if the neighbours had they would no doubt call the police. My eldest son had made me so angry I think I threatened to kill him in several different ways.

Not long after I read an article that said parents frequently threatened their kids with death or worse, and it was the reason why the just laughed at them. As if we were going to kill them.

But it did strike a chord about the sort of conversations my characters would have, and when I read over some of the stuff that I’d written, how much it sounded like me. In fact, one of my relatives was beta-reading a story I’d written, and she said how much it was like me to the point where she could see me as the character.

IT made me think twice every time I write conversations, and now I deliberately listen to other people and pick up on their speech patterns, words used, and manner of speaking to get a better feel for what is needed.

Of course, I’m not perfect, but it’s fun trying to assume different identities and imagine how they would react in any given situation, and particularly what they might say.

A to Z Blog Challenge – April 2025 – A

A is for – “Anyone want to go on safari?”

“You are asking for trouble,” Jennifer, my sister, said with the usual condescending tone.

She hated the fact I was footloose and fancy free, unlike her, shackled to a bad husband and three demanding and bratty children.

It had been an idyllic marriage until she decided she wanted children, and Mike, her husband, didn’t.  Not until they had secured their future.  She went off the script, and everything had gone downhill since then.

She looked tired and, as a result, sounded irritable.

“It’s been cleared by the government, and it’s not the first one.  They’ve run it successfully for two years now without incident.”

We were talking about my latest holiday destination, a safari that ventured across three African nations, one of which had recently been in the news after an unsuccessful coup.

The last safari had been cancelled as a precaution, but the particular nation had said everything was now settled, and the safaris could restart.

It was no surprise that the revenue from the tours was much-needed income for the government.

“I thought you were going ice fishing in Alaska and camping out in an igloo. That would be safer.”

I had thought about it, but that I could do anything.  A safari sounded a lot more interesting, especially when a lot of the animals they had in the wild could basically only be seen in Zoos.

“It’s a once-in-a-lifetime thing, Jen.  My mind is made up.”

“When do you go?”

“Next Tuesday.  It takes about a month, give or take, depending on the weather.”

“I can’t talk you out of it?”

“It’s booked, and I’ve cleared my calendar.  Don’t worry, I’ll report in every day.”

I took the train to Heathrow to avoid the hassle of driving.  I was travelling light and following the tour guide documentation.

Arriving with a few hours to spare, I found a cafe and had a late breakfast and coffee, and whiled away the time researching the countries and animals likely to be seen.

There was an obscure news article filed the day before by a neighbouring country’s national newspaper on a matter of civil unrest in one of the provinces, but it was nowhere near where the tour would be passing through

I also looked at the tour company’s Web page for an update on the tour conditions, where they advised whether there were any problems, and all there was was a nod to the weather, which might turn bad for a day or two.

There was nothing about civil unrest.

About a half hour before boarding commenced, I went to the gate and spent the time evaluating who of the two hundred or so passengers would be my fellow safari travellers.

Until my cell phone vibrated, signalling an incoming message.  I was expecting one from work, but the number it was from was not familiar.

“Jennifer has got it into her head she needs a break from us.  She was muttering something about a safari you were going on.  If this is so, please talk her out of this silliness and tell her to come home.”

What the hell?  Jennifer had never shown any inclination for adventure, so it was difficult to believe she would join me on a safari or anywhere else.  And I was not surprised that Brian had messaged me.  Their home would not survive without her.

I sent back, “If she does come here, you have my word. I will do my utmost to convince her to go home.”

I hope she was not trying to make a point at my expense.  Brian disliked me enough as it was.

A few minutes later, the message I was waiting on arrived.  These two words had great significance, and after going through the presentation, I got the feeling the answer would be no.

I opened the message.  “Operation approved.  Settling wheels in motion.”

I took a deep breath.  It was going to make the time away just a little more interesting if anything happened, although my assessment at the time had been it could take weeks, even months.

Perhaps I should just enjoy the safari and the time away while I could.

Boarding commenced forty minutes before the scheduled departure time.  In my experience, there was no plane I’d ever been on from any airport in the world left on time.

Having opted to pay more for a better seat in business class, I was allowed to board with the first class and frequent fliers with those cards I’d never attain.

It was a refined group for first class, with one exception: a family who looked like they’d stumbled upon the billion ff miles needed for the upgrade, and a more motley group in business class.  I had dressed for the occasion, but some hadn’t.

I think they were university types because they both looked like the lecturers I had, and they had no dress sense either.

The seat next to me was empty, though I expected someone would eventually fill it because I was told the plane was full.  It took the full forty minutes to get everyone on, including a late straggler, the occupant of the seat next to me.

And I was not surprised to see my sister Jennifer.

Perhaps she had left her boarding to the last minute and presented a fait-accompli as the door was closed behind her.  That showed a deliberate intent to come with me.

I frowned at her as she sat, as well as shake my head.

“Don’t look at me in that tone of voice, Jeremy.”

I shrugged.  “What are you doing here?”

“Simple.  I needed a break.  I don’t want to go anywhere by myself, so I chose to go on your safari.”

“You don’t do adventure,” I said, remembering the one and only time she was forced to go on such a holiday.  It didn’t end well.

“Perhaps that’s what’s missing in my life.”

“Brian sent me a message to tell you to go home.”

“To be his and those wretched children’s slave.  No, I’m done with that for a month.  They can either choose to go in without me or perish.”

The steward came past to hand out a drink, orange juice, water, or champagne.  Jennifer picked the champagne.  I had water.

There was a shudder through the plane, and then we started moving back.  For better or worse, we were on our way.

“So, you’re determined to do this?”

“I am.”

The look on her face, of determination tinged with despair, told me all I needed to know.  I was not going to enjoy this holiday.

©  Charles Heath  2025

Writing a book in 365 days – 74/75

Days 74 and 75

Write about a character through dress, expressions, gait, and mannerisms and what makes them memorable. Then, who do they love or fear, where are they going, and do they have a secret?

If there was one definable item about Jacqueline Bennet, it would be that she could not disappear in a crowd.

I know, I was sent by head office to collect her from the railway station, with the only identification, the fact she was wearing a red coat.

If only…

For the last six months it had been my assignment to collect people. From the airport, from the bus station, from the train station. The least favourite was the train station.

I had to try and find the new interns in the throngs of people who all got off the train and swelled up into a swirling mass of bodies so thick sometimes all I could see was heads.

Today was no exception, except…

Jacqueline was wearing a hat, purple, almost the shape of a peacock, and as large. I saw the hat before the red coat. That, itself, was so bright it hurt my eyes.

It took three attempts to introduce myself and convince her I was not trying to kidnap her and have her sent to some harem in Arabia. I said there was no such place as Arabia, and it elicited one of seven expressions which by the time I got her to the office I’d worked out to be, incredulous, surprised, dismayed, disappointed, happy, sad, and angry. These expressions were accompanied by little mannerisms, a tic in her left eye, blinking excessively, pursing her lips and sighing. There was a nervous giggle, but I was not sure where that fitted.

She was mostly disappointed, mainly because Mr Brightman, the CEO, had not come to greet her, and instead it was some minion.

I knew this much about her before we got out the main entrance to Grand Central Station, and it was more than I cared to know.

Outside the station, we caught a cab to the office and then spent the next thirty-five minutes in traffic. For some reason, it was unusually bad because the normal time it took was between ten and fifteen minutes.

The first five minutes were rather tense, so I thought I would lighten the atmosphere by asking, “Where did you come from?”

At first, I thought she was going to ignore me, but then, after a sideways glance that suggested she didn’t tell minions such personal things about herself, she said, “Bridgewater, Ohio.”

When I asked if it was big or small, she said it was a place no one had heard of because it wasn’t a real town. It was a hell hole that everyone wanted to escape. I can’t imagine any place, especially your hometown, as being somewhere you would want to leave willingly, but apparently, the highway that passed through and kept all the businesses going had its route changed and had now bypassed the town. It was the reason for her move, the cafe she worked at had closed, as did just about everything else.

Then there was the toxic relationship with her high school sweetheart, which had been affected by everything else and forced her to make the decision to get away. New city, new start. Our employment agency was recommended by one of her friends who had also made the decision to leave, and had found a happy situation in Florida. Jacqueline was hoping for California.

I had lived in New York all my life and had never suffered the problems that seem to plague the Midwest. Jacqueline was not the first or the last person who had fled their previous existence, but the story seemed to the the same.

But listening to her story tumble out in short, breathless sentences, I felt there was something more behind her move. It was that one statement, thrown in there among the others, that if you were not listening, you would have missed it. “Big cities, they provide an anonymity that can give you that ability to reinvent yourself.”

They could. But equally, a person could simply disappear and never be found again. It had happened to several of the people who had come to us for employment, and this girl, who was under all of that bravado and camouflage, people who had come from abusive homes or relationships, the production of bad education, wasted opportunities, and economic downturn. Anything had to be better than what they had.

“Don’t do it,” I said. We were about five minutes away from the office.

“Don’t do what?”

“Walk in the door, go and see Mr Brightman, accept the job he has picked out for you. Don’t.”

She picked up on the urgency in my tone. I knew what was going to happen, as much as I told myself over and over, it wouldn’t.

“Why? Why on earth would you say such a thing?”

“Because I think you were right when you said you’d finish up in a harem in one of those Arab states. Girls come and girls go, but when I try to find out where they’ve gone, they either never arrived or left soon after they started.”

She looked at me like she thought I was an axe murderer, not a messenger.

“How come you’re telling me this?”

“I don’t know. He’s going to kill me when he finds out, but I don’t like this job any more, and talking to you, hearing what it is he is using to lure people like you, that idea that ‘it’s too good to be true’ just reverberates in my head. I was like you three years ago. Small town boy with big aspirations, running away from an abusive father and a town full of bullies. I’m still that boy, big town, small town, the fears are the same, only here, it can swallow you up.”

I’d walked out of the boarding house that morning with nothing but the money I had saved and the notion that I could get on a train to anywhere, that I would not meet the girl, and hope that she would think she had been abandoned and do something else. Then, at the station, like the times before, I lost my nerve.

I pulled out the money and divided it into two. “Take this, find somewhere to stay, and don’t go to Mr Brightman. You can’t trust him. I’m not going back.”

“Now you’re scaring me.”

“You should be. Stop the cab. We’ll get out here.”

“But…”

“If you make one right decision in your life, let it be this one. Take the money. Please.”

The cab stopped, and I paid the fare. I got out and held the door. In that moment, I could see all of the fears that I had myself the first day I arrived, and the girl that Mr Bightman had sent to fetch me. If I’d known then what I know now…”

“Please.”

Finally, she stepped out of the cab. We both watched it drive off.

“Now what?”

“Take the money, and believe that it is the first day of the rest of your life.”

The sun chose that moment to finally come out from behind the clouds and transform that cold, wintry morning into a world filled with possibilities. She looked at me and smiled, the look of a woman who had made a decision.

“Did you have a plan when you left home this morning?”

“Other than I was not going to work for Mr Brightman any more, no. I was going to the station, but I was going to get on a train to anywhere but here.”

She shrugged. “I always wanted to go to California, but I didn’t want to go there alone. Fancy joining me? I mean, I still don’t trust you completely, but I can tell if you are telling me the truth or not.”

“Are you sure?”

“No. But what’s the alternative if your suspicions are right?”

Decisions are made, rightly or wrongly, based sometimes on reality, but often on a hunch.

We went back to the station on foot, taking the opportunity to talk. I think it was her idea that if I was an axe murderer, I would lose patience and simply move on or show my true colours. That I
was willing to talk, tell her all my hopes and aspirations, and how I’d settled for three years in a rut that felt safe.

We had lunch and spent the afternoon getting ourselves from Grand Central to Penn station, and then the next three days sewing the seeds of a friendship that lasted the rest of our lives.

It was interesting to read a small article in the paper about three weeks later, as I settled into a new job working for a large distribution centre as dispatch clerk, the arrest of Mr Brightman, aka Chuck Sentry, aka Walter Winsome, aka Jonathon Bentley on charges relating to the disappearance of at least fourteen people.

They were all the names I could remember, and I wrote them down in a letter and sent it anonymously to the NYPD.

©  Charles Heath  2025

NANOWRIMO – April 2025 – Day 1

The Fourth Son

It is sometimes quite strange where the ideas for a story come from.

This one started with a man on the roof of an apartment block with a telescope, a place where he can seek refuge from work and people.

Being in New York, of course, made it all the more impossible to get a clear night and a clearer sky, but perhaps it was more about the solitude.

Then I read about the planets lining up, which doesn’t happen very often, and you know the saying, when the planets line up, maybe. .

So, I had my protagonist.

Now, I needed someone to interrupt the solitude and then focus him on the notion that when one door closes, another opens.

Of course the protagonist who is hiding something out of the ordinary, someone with a secret, and someone who has feelings for another who in the greater schene of things in his life, is someone who would not be ‘the right choice’.

Except his position allows him the freedom to choose whom he wants.

A scare finds him beginning to realise that he can not remain behind that veil of anonymity for much longer, and one way or another, it is going to be exposed.

But, by the time he decides to make his feelings known, his secret is no longer a secret.

Writing a book in 365 days – 74/75

Days 74 and 75

Write about a character through dress, expressions, gait, and mannerisms and what makes them memorable. Then, who do they love or fear, where are they going, and do they have a secret?

If there was one definable item about Jacqueline Bennet, it would be that she could not disappear in a crowd.

I know, I was sent by head office to collect her from the railway station, with the only identification, the fact she was wearing a red coat.

If only…

For the last six months it had been my assignment to collect people. From the airport, from the bus station, from the train station. The least favourite was the train station.

I had to try and find the new interns in the throngs of people who all got off the train and swelled up into a swirling mass of bodies so thick sometimes all I could see was heads.

Today was no exception, except…

Jacqueline was wearing a hat, purple, almost the shape of a peacock, and as large. I saw the hat before the red coat. That, itself, was so bright it hurt my eyes.

It took three attempts to introduce myself and convince her I was not trying to kidnap her and have her sent to some harem in Arabia. I said there was no such place as Arabia, and it elicited one of seven expressions which by the time I got her to the office I’d worked out to be, incredulous, surprised, dismayed, disappointed, happy, sad, and angry. These expressions were accompanied by little mannerisms, a tic in her left eye, blinking excessively, pursing her lips and sighing. There was a nervous giggle, but I was not sure where that fitted.

She was mostly disappointed, mainly because Mr Brightman, the CEO, had not come to greet her, and instead it was some minion.

I knew this much about her before we got out the main entrance to Grand Central Station, and it was more than I cared to know.

Outside the station, we caught a cab to the office and then spent the next thirty-five minutes in traffic. For some reason, it was unusually bad because the normal time it took was between ten and fifteen minutes.

The first five minutes were rather tense, so I thought I would lighten the atmosphere by asking, “Where did you come from?”

At first, I thought she was going to ignore me, but then, after a sideways glance that suggested she didn’t tell minions such personal things about herself, she said, “Bridgewater, Ohio.”

When I asked if it was big or small, she said it was a place no one had heard of because it wasn’t a real town. It was a hell hole that everyone wanted to escape. I can’t imagine any place, especially your hometown, as being somewhere you would want to leave willingly, but apparently, the highway that passed through and kept all the businesses going had its route changed and had now bypassed the town. It was the reason for her move, the cafe she worked at had closed, as did just about everything else.

Then there was the toxic relationship with her high school sweetheart, which had been affected by everything else and forced her to make the decision to get away. New city, new start. Our employment agency was recommended by one of her friends who had also made the decision to leave, and had found a happy situation in Florida. Jacqueline was hoping for California.

I had lived in New York all my life and had never suffered the problems that seem to plague the Midwest. Jacqueline was not the first or the last person who had fled their previous existence, but the story seemed to the the same.

But listening to her story tumble out in short, breathless sentences, I felt there was something more behind her move. It was that one statement, thrown in there among the others, that if you were not listening, you would have missed it. “Big cities, they provide an anonymity that can give you that ability to reinvent yourself.”

They could. But equally, a person could simply disappear and never be found again. It had happened to several of the people who had come to us for employment, and this girl, who was under all of that bravado and camouflage, people who had come from abusive homes or relationships, the production of bad education, wasted opportunities, and economic downturn. Anything had to be better than what they had.

“Don’t do it,” I said. We were about five minutes away from the office.

“Don’t do what?”

“Walk in the door, go and see Mr Brightman, accept the job he has picked out for you. Don’t.”

She picked up on the urgency in my tone. I knew what was going to happen, as much as I told myself over and over, it wouldn’t.

“Why? Why on earth would you say such a thing?”

“Because I think you were right when you said you’d finish up in a harem in one of those Arab states. Girls come and girls go, but when I try to find out where they’ve gone, they either never arrived or left soon after they started.”

She looked at me like she thought I was an axe murderer, not a messenger.

“How come you’re telling me this?”

“I don’t know. He’s going to kill me when he finds out, but I don’t like this job any more, and talking to you, hearing what it is he is using to lure people like you, that idea that ‘it’s too good to be true’ just reverberates in my head. I was like you three years ago. Small town boy with big aspirations, running away from an abusive father and a town full of bullies. I’m still that boy, big town, small town, the fears are the same, only here, it can swallow you up.”

I’d walked out of the boarding house that morning with nothing but the money I had saved and the notion that I could get on a train to anywhere, that I would not meet the girl, and hope that she would think she had been abandoned and do something else. Then, at the station, like the times before, I lost my nerve.

I pulled out the money and divided it into two. “Take this, find somewhere to stay, and don’t go to Mr Brightman. You can’t trust him. I’m not going back.”

“Now you’re scaring me.”

“You should be. Stop the cab. We’ll get out here.”

“But…”

“If you make one right decision in your life, let it be this one. Take the money. Please.”

The cab stopped, and I paid the fare. I got out and held the door. In that moment, I could see all of the fears that I had myself the first day I arrived, and the girl that Mr Bightman had sent to fetch me. If I’d known then what I know now…”

“Please.”

Finally, she stepped out of the cab. We both watched it drive off.

“Now what?”

“Take the money, and believe that it is the first day of the rest of your life.”

The sun chose that moment to finally come out from behind the clouds and transform that cold, wintry morning into a world filled with possibilities. She looked at me and smiled, the look of a woman who had made a decision.

“Did you have a plan when you left home this morning?”

“Other than I was not going to work for Mr Brightman any more, no. I was going to the station, but I was going to get on a train to anywhere but here.”

She shrugged. “I always wanted to go to California, but I didn’t want to go there alone. Fancy joining me? I mean, I still don’t trust you completely, but I can tell if you are telling me the truth or not.”

“Are you sure?”

“No. But what’s the alternative if your suspicions are right?”

Decisions are made, rightly or wrongly, based sometimes on reality, but often on a hunch.

We went back to the station on foot, taking the opportunity to talk. I think it was her idea that if I was an axe murderer, I would lose patience and simply move on or show my true colours. That I
was willing to talk, tell her all my hopes and aspirations, and how I’d settled for three years in a rut that felt safe.

We had lunch and spent the afternoon getting ourselves from Grand Central to Penn station, and then the next three days sewing the seeds of a friendship that lasted the rest of our lives.

It was interesting to read a small article in the paper about three weeks later, as I settled into a new job working for a large distribution centre as dispatch clerk, the arrest of Mr Brightman, aka Chuck Sentry, aka Walter Winsome, aka Jonathon Bentley on charges relating to the disappearance of at least fourteen people.

They were all the names I could remember, and I wrote them down in a letter and sent it anonymously to the NYPD.

©  Charles Heath  2025

Writing a book in 365 days – My story 9

More about my story

There’s always something about that knock on the door in a hotel when you’re not expecting anyone.

This is more so when you are staying in the hotel for reasons other than what you intimated to the desk clerk.

The art of not being noticed is to be anonymous, the sort of person that does not stand out, that no one gives a second look.  That’s a bit hard if you are an Englishman in a foreign country.  Language, skin colour, dietary requirements, allergies, heat or cold, and travelling alone are all features which will catch someone’s attention.

Yes, like the arrivals hall at an international airport, as in a hotel lobby, there are spies watching the spies.

That’s why a universal occupation like journalist flies well in these situations.  And given there is an international conference, he can hide in plain sight.

Except, the police chief likes to know who he’s dealing with and meets up for a little discussion about protocol.  After all, he wouldn’t the first or last journalist to find himself in breach of the customs of the country.

Mind what you write.

And yes, there is a chief of the secret police, a man who scares everyone from the president down, the man who makes people disappear, and we’re going with the dark sunglasses, immaculate uniform, I think I’m a god, tropes.

NANOWRIMO – April 2025 – Day 0

The Fourth Son

This store started out as When The Planets Align.

I had this cute idea forming in Mt head as a short story for the A to Z blog, about a man of Royal blood living anonymously in America, away from the mechanations of a Royal life.

After all, he was the fourth son, and reading and hearing so much about Prince Harry being a ‘spare’, I wondered what it would be like if you were the third spare.

So far down the inheritance ladder that you were basically worthless for anything but donning a suit and smiling.  There was only one king, the eldest son.  Any chance of everyone dying so he could take the throne was unbelievable.

It could never, ever happen.

Could it?

And yes, you can guess where this is going.

Never say never ..

Writing a book in 365 days – My story 9

More about my story

There’s always something about that knock on the door in a hotel when you’re not expecting anyone.

This is more so when you are staying in the hotel for reasons other than what you intimated to the desk clerk.

The art of not being noticed is to be anonymous, the sort of person that does not stand out, that no one gives a second look.  That’s a bit hard if you are an Englishman in a foreign country.  Language, skin colour, dietary requirements, allergies, heat or cold, and travelling alone are all features which will catch someone’s attention.

Yes, like the arrivals hall at an international airport, as in a hotel lobby, there are spies watching the spies.

That’s why a universal occupation like journalist flies well in these situations.  And given there is an international conference, he can hide in plain sight.

Except, the police chief likes to know who he’s dealing with and meets up for a little discussion about protocol.  After all, he wouldn’t the first or last journalist to find himself in breach of the customs of the country.

Mind what you write.

And yes, there is a chief of the secret police, a man who scares everyone from the president down, the man who makes people disappear, and we’re going with the dark sunglasses, immaculate uniform, I think I’m a god, tropes.

Writing a book in 365 days – 73

Day 73

Editing – getting the reader invested

There are two, possibly more, but two fundamental questions you have to ask yourself when you are reading through your work, and perhaps for the first time after finishing writing that first draft.

What am I saying?

What happens next for the characters?

Here’s the thing…

What your saying is what the reader wants to know, what sets the tone, what sets up the story. I like to throw readers in the deep right from the start, to give the reader a sense of who they’re going on the journey with.

In my opinion, a book is a journey and the more compelling you can make it, the more invested the reader will be.

Your ultimate aim: that the reader cannot put the book down. They just have to read a bit more to see what happens.

It is always going to be what happens next, whether our protagonist is hanging out of a helicopter trying to avoid being killed, or chasing a lead (or person), chasing a suspect or a person of interest, or just a red herring or entanglement.

And there is always that trope, the cliff hanger at the end of every chapter.