Days 116 and 117

Secondary characters – Writing exercise

Relation to protagonist, are they trusted, dialogue differences, what is their purpose, one thing to remember them…

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There were a few years of animosity between Alan and Jay.  And a healthy dose of resentment.

Alan was the eldest son and, as such, should have commanded some respect and, to be fair, had been treated very well.

Until Jay was born.

It didn’t matter that Mary had popped up in between them, except that she would always be their mother’s favourite.

But from the moment Jay arrived, he had commanded all the oxygen in any room he walked into.  He could do no wrong, not even when he was deliberately bad.  And no matter what Alan did, he was always wrong, or jealous, or worse, very childish.

Alan suffered it until he could leave, which was the day after he turned 18.  He simply put what he needed into his backpack, and left for work as he did every Thursday evening, went to the bus station and took the night express to anywhere that far away from what had ceased to be his home.

Over the next five or so years, Alan kept his head down and kept himself to himself, having learned the hard way that he could not rely on anyone other than himself.

He was largely a product of his experiences, and if or when anyone asked him anything about his life, he simply said he had been orphaned in his teens, bounced around the system until he was old enough to leave and make his own way.

He finished high school.  There was no possibility of going to college. His grades and finances precluded both.  He’d initially worked as a busboy and worked his way up to waiter.  He had applied to the police academy, but they had not even deigned to write back one way or another.

Perhaps it was not in his destiny.

As for home, he had only a passing interest.  There had not been one word about his departure, and endless news about the golden boy Jay.  Basketball champ, football champ, swimming champ, Prom King, and graduated top of the class.

Of course he would.

He was everything that Alan wasn’t.  He was the pride and joy of his parents.  And in that whole article about him, there was not one word about the other son.  It was like he didn’t exist.

On the seventh anniversary of Alan’s departure, the family sat around the table as they did every Sunday.  The morning visit to the church for another of Pastor Bill’s illuminating sermons, then back home for lunch.

Those occasions after Alan left were introspective, where everyone had an opinion as to why he left.  Only Mary knew why he had gone, and where, a secret she shared with the Sheriff when her parents had requested his assistance in finding out what happened to him.

Oddly, no one believed he had become a victim of foul play, but equally oddly, no one but Mary could see that their treatment of him was going to always lead to only one eventuality.

Three times, Alan’s mother secretly hired a private detective to find him.  Three times, the detective came back to tell them he had disappeared without a trace.  Only Mary knew that on the last occasion, after telling him what she knew, he found her brother, and in accordance with her wishes, he told them one thing but gave Mary a slip of paper with her brother’s address.

That had been three days ago.

Now, sitting at the table, looking at the feast, waiting for her father to say grace.  He was at one end, her mother at the opposite end, and Jay was sitting opposite her.

It had taken every one of those seven years to hate him as much as her older brother, but for different reasons.  Jay was evil.  It was as simple as that, a boy without a conscience and no scruples whatsoever.

She, too, would have left before now, but her mother was ailing, and she couldn’t leave her, not with Jay, who wouldn’t care about her, and a father who doted more on his son than his wife.

She looked over towards her and could see she was unwell.  The latest visit to the doctor wasn’t good news.  Not knowing where Alan was only made matters worse.

“I want Alan to come home,” she said suddenly, in a tone that had more fire in it than usual.  The latest report from the detective had reduced her to tears.

“Why?” Jay muttered.  “He was a spineless moron, and showed his true colours when he left, without so much as a by your leave.”

“You think?”  Mary said, glaring at him.

“What’s your beef?”

His smug look annoyed her.  She had discovered he did nothing but trash his brother’s name to anyone who would listen.

“Tell us why Bonny went to the sheriff’s office, Jay?”

Wendy, a friend of Sally, who was a friend of Ada who worked in the sherries office, had confided that Bonny, Jay’s latest girlfriend, or if the rumours were right, ex-girlfriend, had complained that he had assaulted her.  Mary suspected it was more than just ‘assault’.

Their mother switched her glare from Jay to her husband.  “What have you two done now?”

Exactly the result Mary wanted.  Jay was looking very guilty.

“It’s just a misunderstanding,” Jay muttered, suddenly standing up, sending his chair crashing backwards.  “If this is going to be another bitch session, I’ve got better things to do.  He’s gone, get over it.”

With that said, he stomped out, slamming the door behind him.

“Now look what you’ve done,” her father said. 

“No, Jack.  This is all your fault.  If you had disciplined him years ago, we wouldn’t be here.  Whatever he’s done this time, you’re not going to smooth it over.”

He simply shook his head and followed his son out the door.

Mary reached over and took her mother’s hand in hers.  She could see the tears welling in her eyes.  Jay had finally torn their family apart.

“We’re going on a road trip.  We need to spend time together away from this place.  They can fend for themselves for a few days.”

“Where?”

“It’ll be our secret.  Go throw a few things in a bag, enough for a week or so.  We’re going now.”

“What about…”

“They can clean it up or wallow in it.  You’ve done enough for the ungrateful pigs.  It’s time they did something for you.”

It took Mary a day on the road to finally coax the truth out of her mother.  A secret so devastating that she cried all night. Cancer.  Inoperable.  And six months, perhaps a year.  Mary knew it was bad, just not this bad.

The next morning, after getting back on the road and then stopping at a diner for coffee and apple pie, Mary told her where they were going.

The change in her mother was instant and brought her back to life, the slow descent into despair suddenly arrested.

“I thought…”

“I spoke to the detective this time and told him what I knew.  I figured that Alan never wanted any of us to know where he went, but there were clues which I kept to myself, and he did tell me why he left, and swore me to secrecy.  I don’t think I need to tell you, you’re smart enough to realise what drove him away.  I heard from him a few weeks after he left to tell me he was safe, that it was best not to try and find him, and he was not coming home.”

“Were you going to tell me?  Us?”

“Not Dad or Jay.  They can live in blissful ignorance.  Besides, they’re about to find themselves in a whole world of pain.  But in your case, I had decided on a road trip later, but seeing you yesterday, I realised that I couldn’t wait.  And knowing what we know, I’m glad we’re doing it now.”

“Are you sure he will be where the detective said?  Or that he will want to see me, or you?”

“That’s why I have to initially go by myself.  I know he will be surprised to see me, and when I explain the circumstances, he will agree to see you.”

“Perhaps he might be annoyed with me not trying to reach out earlier than this?”

“I think if he wanted to see you, he knew where you lived.  It might not be you personally that kept him away, but to be fair, you didn’t stop Jay.”

“No.  You’re right.  I didn’t.  For a long time, I didn’t have the courage, and now that I have, I hope it’s not too late to right that wrong.  I’ve decided I’m not going back. I don’t want to spend my last days on God’s earth with either of them.”

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©  Charles Heath  2025

More about my story

If we are going to have a dictatorship with a benign president, and rebels, and a missing leader of the opposition party in what is purported to be a democracy of sorts, then there must be a revolution in the offing.

And what better time to have a coup d’état than when there is a human rights conference going on?

So far, a group of rebels have been thwarted by our protagonist, who is trying to do his job or protecting the keynote speaker, and who is a long-ago love interest.  And yes, we will get past the notion that the woman in white is his daughter.  She is not.

Then we get to the notion that some of the journalists might be agents for the various intelligence agencies in the world, and one in particular, a British journalist who may or may not be MI6.

Of course, that leader of the opposition is not dead, just missing, and the rumours of the catacombs being a vast underground network of tunnels and dungeons, and quite possibly torture chambers, is a good enough notion that someone should have a poke around.

And let’s not forget that the protagonist’s diverting assistant he didn’t want, has now managed to catch the eye of the very nasty head of the secret police.  It’s just one more thing to worry about.

While the, of course, the human rights conference carries on regardless of the antics outside.

More about my story

If we are going to have a dictatorship with a benign president, and rebels, and a missing leader of the opposition party in what is purported to be a democracy of sorts, then there must be a revolution in the offing.

And what better time to have a coup d’état than when there is a human rights conference going on?

So far, a group of rebels have been thwarted by our protagonist, who is trying to do his job or protecting the keynote speaker, and who is a long-ago love interest.  And yes, we will get past the notion that the woman in white is his daughter.  She is not.

Then we get to the notion that some of the journalists might be agents for the various intelligence agencies in the world, and one in particular, a British journalist who may or may not be MI6.

Of course, that leader of the opposition is not dead, just missing, and the rumours of the catacombs being a vast underground network of tunnels and dungeons, and quite possibly torture chambers, is a good enough notion that someone should have a poke around.

And let’s not forget that the protagonist’s diverting assistant he didn’t want, has now managed to catch the eye of the very nasty head of the secret police.  It’s just one more thing to worry about.

While the, of course, the human rights conference carries on regardless of the antics outside.

Day 115

Writing in the first person or in the third person

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Writing in the first or third person is a matter of preference; the former can sometimes be limiting because only one point of view is generally available to the reader, while the latter enables the reader to get more than one point of view.

In the first instance, this is how we tell a story from one perspective that doesn’t necessarily require others.  In the second instance, it is useful for writing a murder mystery where different perspectives, attitudes, and characters, depending on circumstances, add to the story in ways a single perspective can not.

However, as I see it, when writing in the 3rd person, the author has to have multiple personalities in order to write different points of view.  To me, that’s difficult, but not impossible. It simply means you have to get into character so you can write their story.

That, in turn, takes more time and, to a certain degree, a lot more planning for character development.  It’s where a minor character can get to steal the show, as is known to happen in movies.  Sometimes, it’s a pleasant surprise; others are not so much.

A pitfall not to fall into is adopting the same persona type for all the characters.  You would need to sit down and plan each of the individual characters, no matter how small a role they play.

Day 115

Writing in the first person or in the third person

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Writing in the first or third person is a matter of preference; the former can sometimes be limiting because only one point of view is generally available to the reader, while the latter enables the reader to get more than one point of view.

In the first instance, this is how we tell a story from one perspective that doesn’t necessarily require others.  In the second instance, it is useful for writing a murder mystery where different perspectives, attitudes, and characters, depending on circumstances, add to the story in ways a single perspective can not.

However, as I see it, when writing in the 3rd person, the author has to have multiple personalities in order to write different points of view.  To me, that’s difficult, but not impossible. It simply means you have to get into character so you can write their story.

That, in turn, takes more time and, to a certain degree, a lot more planning for character development.  It’s where a minor character can get to steal the show, as is known to happen in movies.  Sometimes, it’s a pleasant surprise; others are not so much.

A pitfall not to fall into is adopting the same persona type for all the characters.  You would need to sit down and plan each of the individual characters, no matter how small a role they play.

Day 114

Do you write what you feel, or do you write what you must?

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I don’t think I have ever written a story because I had to, well, not until now in the process of writing a book in 365 days, from my literary calendar.

But..

The stories I write for this are not to any sort of format. Yet, I guess because I have to write something specifically asked for, then in that case, I write what I must.

But for everything else, I write what I feel like, and quite often those stories follow a set of feelings that are created or prompted by what I see around me, what I see on TV, what
I hear on the radio, and what I read.

It’s nothing to glance at the headlines and sift out one or two, or a set and weave them into an idea that might be the basis of a story. I like the idea of unconnected and random events, and from these, I weave them into a story.

For example:

There was a TV show on, one of a series, and it was in part about a spy network being wound up because they were about to be blown. I write about spies, especially those who have tried to escape from their former lives, and this was too good an opportunity to pass up.

Then there was another, of which I only saw a preview, but it had an interesting premise: what if you didn’t really know the person you had been living with for the past twenty-five years? Yes, you guessed it, a spy.

Day 114

Do you write what you feel, or do you write what you must?

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I don’t think I have ever written a story because I had to, well, not until now in the process of writing a book in 365 days, from my literary calendar.

But..

The stories I write for this are not to any sort of format. Yet, I guess because I have to write something specifically asked for, then in that case, I write what I must.

But for everything else, I write what I feel like, and quite often those stories follow a set of feelings that are created or prompted by what I see around me, what I see on TV, what
I hear on the radio, and what I read.

It’s nothing to glance at the headlines and sift out one or two, or a set and weave them into an idea that might be the basis of a story. I like the idea of unconnected and random events, and from these, I weave them into a story.

For example:

There was a TV show on, one of a series, and it was in part about a spy network being wound up because they were about to be blown. I write about spies, especially those who have tried to escape from their former lives, and this was too good an opportunity to pass up.

Then there was another, of which I only saw a preview, but it had an interesting premise: what if you didn’t really know the person you had been living with for the past twenty-five years? Yes, you guessed it, a spy.

Day 113

Do you have a pet writing project or subject

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In my case, I do. The history of my family. This had only become a project in the last few months, and it is one of those things that we would all like to know something about, and probably think it’s too hard to do.

After all, time passes, the first-hand sources of material die, and you have to go the hard road and start digging for information. I’m lucky in a sense, my older brother has been doing this for a few years now and has been visiting the places where we came from.

But, from my standpoint, this is an excellent exercise in characterisation, especially if you want to write historical fiction. It has led me down a path of searching for records in the most unlikely places, discovering just how much information from the past has been digitised and is accessible.

It has also led to the discovery of newspaper archives, one of the more interesting sources of information, and just a little thrill every time I uncover another snippet about one of my ancestors.

And no, not yet, have I discovered a true gem of a discovery, though one path led to a possible connection, very remote, to J R R Tolkien, and another to Harriet Beecher Stowe.

They have yet to be proved, but I don’t think we could be that lucky.

Day 113

Do you have a pet writing project or subject

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In my case, I do. The history of my family. This had only become a project in the last few months, and it is one of those things that we would all like to know something about, and probably think it’s too hard to do.

After all, time passes, the first-hand sources of material die, and you have to go the hard road and start digging for information. I’m lucky in a sense, my older brother has been doing this for a few years now and has been visiting the places where we came from.

But, from my standpoint, this is an excellent exercise in characterisation, especially if you want to write historical fiction. It has led me down a path of searching for records in the most unlikely places, discovering just how much information from the past has been digitised and is accessible.

It has also led to the discovery of newspaper archives, one of the more interesting sources of information, and just a little thrill every time I uncover another snippet about one of my ancestors.

And no, not yet, have I discovered a true gem of a discovery, though one path led to a possible connection, very remote, to J R R Tolkien, and another to Harriet Beecher Stowe.

They have yet to be proved, but I don’t think we could be that lucky.

Day 112

Writing exercise

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The Smithsons had always lived in a house at the middle of the cul-de-sac on the nice side of the neighbourhood, where they never quite made the grade.

That’s not to say they didn’t belong there, and they might well have fitted in if it had not been for the rather gregarious behaviour of Mrs Smithson.

Or so my mother said, many times in hushed tones, when stealing a glance out the front window, and Mrs Smithson would be standing in the front yard in attire that, as my mother so bluntly described it, a decent woman would not wear inside the house, let alone out.

My father, being the polite man he was, would also glance out the window, but I always thought his look was one of appreciation. I know my older brother had the same look, but with a different set of feelings. I was too young, at the time, to understand such things.

Where had they come from?

Why had the realtor sold them the house, especially when he knew that only a certain type of person would be welcomed into the neighbourhood, or was it for some other reason?

Years later, when my home for many years was finally handed down to the last family member, me, I got to discover the truth.

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The Smithsons had a daughter, well, that’s another story, but a girl about my age turned up one morning outside the front of their house, in a rather strange manner.

Or given how the neighbourhood perceived the Smithsons, perhaps it was in character for them.

A rather posh car stopped out front, and my mother, not to miss anything that happened there, happened to be peering through the blinds.

“Come and look at this,” she said, excited, to my father, who was about to leave for work.

“Jenny, don’t you have better things to do?”

Like take us to school, of course, but for the gossip session later…

He didn’t join her but continued on his way out. I went over instead.

Just in time to see a man get out of the driver’s side and come around to open the door for a lady who was dressed differently from us. The man had a hat and a suit on.

Then a girl got out of the car, about eight or nine, with a small suitcase. The woman who I assumed was her mother grabbed her hand and literally dragged her to the front door of the Smithsons’ residence, then started pounding on the door.

When there was no answer, but I did see movement of one of the curtains indicating someone from within was watching, she yelled out, “Daniel, you’d better get out there and collect your little brat, because I’m leaving her here. You hear me, Daniel? You’ll be hearing from my lawyers.”

She waited a minute, said something to the girl that made her start crying, then stomped back to the car. The man opened the door for her, she got in, and then they left.

Only then did the front door open, and the girl and the suitcase dragged her in and slammed the door.

And from that point, there were nothing but heated arguments that often spilled out into the cul-de-sac, until one morning, it all ended. Mrs Smithson left with her own suitcase.

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I used to play by myself because most of the children in the cul-de-sac were much older, in a field behind the Smithsons’ house, and gained access to it by a narrow walkway between the Smithson house and their neighbour.

Sometimes Smithson was waiting for anyone who dared to use that walkway, or his two eldest boys, who were bullies. It became a game in itself to get past them, and one I succeeded in doing more often than not.

Once, I ran into ‘the little brat’, named Eloise. That much I knew from the shouting matches. She was hiding down in the makeshift hut I’d built out of builders’ waste, a summer holiday project.

“Who are you?” she asked.

“The owner of this hut.”

“It doesn’t belong to anyone.”

“It’s not yours.”

“I’m here.”

“So am I. Who are you?”

“Eloise. What’s your name?”

“Jack.”

“You live over the road. Does your mother always peer out from behind the curtains? My mother says she should mind her own business.”

“That’s what my dad says. What do your parents argue about all the time?”

“Me.”

“Why?”

“I’m supposed to be the result of my Daddy’s sordid affair with my mother. Now my mother no longer wants me, and neither does Daddy.”

“You could come and live with us,” I said without thinking and without knowing the ways of the world. To me, it seemed an easy thing to do.

“That would be nice, but I’m being sent to a relative in New York. That will be better than staying here where I’m not wanted. I’d better go before they send those two horrible boys to find me.”

When I came home from school about a week after Mrs Smithson left, my mother told me that ‘obnoxious little brat over the road’ had been taken away. I didn’t bother telling her just how wrong she was about Eloise.

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By a quirk of fate and a very bad year, I found myself the new owner of the house I grew up in.

How it happened was another of those stories that fitted into that category, ‘you wouldn’t believe if I told you’.

I was surprised when the lawyer called me, and even more surprised to learn of both my parents and brothers’ passing.  We had a falling out, some years before, over something quite trivial, but pride and stupidity on both sides created and perpetuated a stand-off that was never bridged.

The pity of it was that I did not feel the loss as keenly as I should have, and for a month or so, I dithered about returning.  In the end, I decided the happy memories outweighed the despair, and I decided to move back home.

Now, standing in the lounge, I stole a glance towards the window that my mother had spent so much time at, stickybeaking at the neighbours.  For a moment, I was tempted.

But, the moving boxes weren’t going to move themselves, the movers running out of time, and had dumped the last twenty in the foyer.

Until there was a knock on the door.

Was this the neighbourhood welcoming committee?  There had been one when we first moved in. I went over and opened the door.

“Hello, Jack”

A woman about my age but very familiar stood on the front porch, looking back towards the Smithsons’ house.

“I know you, don’t I?”

“Yes, you do.”

“Then give me a minute… Oh, yes.  Eloise?”

She smiled.  “Very good.  I see you have just moved in.  I’m loath to say I was watching through the front window.”

“A regular pastime in this neighbourhood.  God, the number of hours my mother wasted.  I apologise for her behaviour.”

“It doesn’t matter.  Never did, for me anyway.  I wasn’t there long enough for it to matter.  Are you staying or passing through?”

“Staying.”

“Your family?”

“Passed.  A car accident a while back.”

“Oh, I’m sorry for your loss.”

“Thank you.  When did you return?”

“About a week ago.  A quirk of fate, really.  Last relative standing.  Parents divorced and passed, both to cancer, and those two beastly boys died in Afghanistan.  I guess being the result of an affair sometimes has its advantages.  So, here I am, and so are you.  I never forgot that moment of kindness.  I thought, if it were you, I would invite you over for dinner.  Unless you have other plans.”

I looked around at the mess.  “It can wait.  What time?”

“Now.”

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©  Charles Heath  2025