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A long short story that can’t be tamed – I always wanted to rescue a damsel in distress – 9

Nine

If I had deliberately wanted to flush out the people following us, and eventually lose them, I would never have thought of renting a car at a suburban shop.  I had to wonder what James Bond would have done in similar circumstances.

But it worked.

Driving out of the carpark onto the main street, it wasn’t difficult to see several people caught unawares.  And on their cell phones making calls.

And it was Emily’s last-minute brainwave to cover the car’s registration plates so if they were to take a photo, they would not be able to track it.  Well, not straight away.  It was she who said London had a lot of CCTV cameras, but on the way to the carpark, she had checked out where they were, those that she could readily identify, and we could avoid.

Something I learned about Emily that I didn’t know; she was a computer nerd, and a hacker of sorts, not one of those dark web experts, but she knew enough to dig around in places most people wouldn’t go looking.

That skill might just come in useful.

And, for a few minutes, maybe an hour, we revelled in the thought we may have outwitted them, whoever ‘them’ was.

It was late afternoon when we finally found a hotel with a carpark, a long way from Cecile’s flat in Earl’s Court, and on the other side of the Greater London region in Mile End Road, not very far from the Stepney Green underground station, the result of Emily searching the web for a hotel with a carpark, and near public transport.

She also had our luggage delivered from the airport a little less than two hours from the moment she made the call.  I think I may have remarked that I might just employ her as my travel agent when I started my European odyssey, but she had fallen asleep, way past exhausted.

I wasn’t far behind her.  We had a long day tomorrow, if today was anything to go by.

I woke to the smell of coffee and that more interesting aroma of burnt toast.

There were shopping bags on the table, and it looked as though Emily had been up and around for a while.

I looked at my watch, it was not much past seven, and not an hour I found myself up back home.  I had an apartment in the city, and it was a ten-minute walk to the office, so early rising was not a necessity.  My parents lived in the suburbs, and more than an hour by public transport, and two by car.  It was the reason I moved.  I didn’t want to spend quarter of my life travelling to and from work.

Of course, London was so much larger than where I came from, and definitely not a place I would want to live, or work, despite the advantages that Cecile had tried to impress upon me.  And don’t get me get started on driving around London.  Yesterday had been harrowing, and left me, at times, shaken.

“Good morning, sleepyhead.”

Emily put a coffee plunger on the table, two cups, a plate of toast, bowls, and the cereal that was my favourite, though how she knew was anyone’s guess.

“You’ve been busy.”

“I like to get some exercise every morning, so I combined it with a shopping expedition

I had not attended this type of domesticity in a long time, at least not since I left home.  I had grown accustomed to being on my own, and that might have contributed to Cecile and I drifting apart.  It probably also had a lot to do with my awkwardness with girls, and rather than try to get over it, I just avoided them.

But, somehow, Emily was different, perhaps because she was younger and hadn’t been blunted by the vicissitudes of life.  She had finished school, and as far as I was aware, didn’t have a real job, preferring to spend her time pottering in her father’s office.

I had thought, much like in an 18th century romance novel, she was waiting for the right man to marry, but there were not too many of those running around these days.

Something else I just realised; how well I seemed to like being at ease in her company, much more so than when I was with Cecile, always on my guard not to say or do the wrong thing.

“I find going to a grocery store a trial, which is why I eat out a lot.”

She shook her head.  “You’re just lazy, like everyone else your age.  Convenience over practicality.  And you should think about doing some exercise.”

I could feel the eyes of the appraiser upon me and shivered.  It was good that I could not read her thoughts, but if I could, perhaps some might be considering those extra pounds that had found their way onto my frame after I stopped playing tennis and squash.

“I promise I’ll think about it.”

“Better still, I don’t think it’s all that safe to be jogging the streets in this neighbourhood early in the morning, so you can come with me as my protector.”

She saw my look of disdain, or was it the thought of having to exercise.

“Cheer up, I don’t go very fast.”

The sound of the phone vibrating on the table interrupted that thought, and conversation.

It was a private number, so I assumed it was the man from the day before.

“Yes?”

“Trafalgar Square, by the column, 12:30 pm today.”

It was the man’s voice.

“We’ll see you there.”

The call was disconnected.  Short and to the point.

“We have a lunch date.”

Before I could reach out to pick up my cup of coffee, the phone rang again.

Also a private number, I assumed it was the man ringing back with a change of plans.

“Yes?”

“We need to talk.”

A woman’s voice this time, not one that was familiar.

“About what?”  I was surprised, and didn’t have time to work on a better comeback.

“Your Cecile.  She is over her head.”

Aside from stating the obvious, who was this woman, how did she know about Cecile, and more important, how did she know my cell number?

“Who the hell are you?”

“The London end of the team that recruited her.  Time is of the essence, so we’ll come to you.  We’ll be there in half an hour.”

That line went dead before I could ask another pertinent question, how did she know where we were?

“Who was that?”  Emily had been oblivious to the turmoil I was feeling.

“Someone else who wants to talk about Cecile.”

“Who?”

“No idea, but the word recruited popped up, whatever that might mean.”

“Here?  No one knows we’re here.”

“Exactly.”

“Perhaps we should leave, like, right now.”

“No.  I have a feeling that we might find out what Cecile is up to.”

And, in the back of my mind, several small, associated details clicked into place.  At the time they didn’t make any sense, but now, in a bigger context, and given the circumstances, I think I knew now why she had come.

And, more importantly, I realised she had been dropping breadcrumbs for me to follow long before she had left.

…

©  Charles Heath 2024

Writing a book in 365 days – 221/222

Days 221 and 222

Starting the story,

At the foot of the mountain, she discovered…

…

It was never her intention to leave the cottage that morning, go for a walk, and suddenly discover that she didn’t know precisely where she was.

Her aunt had said the previous evening that it was time she stopped moping about the place and did something constructive, like go exploring. The lake was to the west, the mountains to the east, one village, Moreton, was north, and another village, Billson, was south.

Perhaps a walk to the start of the mountains in the east would provide the most interest, because there were ruins of a previous civilisation there, hidden behind the regrowth of the forest, and fossicking for artifacts might give her some purpose.

MaryAnne hadn’t chosen to come to her Aunt’s. She was sent under threat of a fate worse than death if she did, pr at least that was how she saw it in her mind. Her Aunt was ‘batty’, he father had said, having agreed that her mother’s punishment was a little severe, but he could only shrug.

He didn’t dare argue the merits of what was good or bad for their daughter because he had ceded control over her to her mother. Girls were not his bailiwick. Besides, he had three boys, and they were a handful enough.

So, fate decided, he took her to the overnight coach and put her aboard with the lament that it was only going to be three months.

To her, it was just so unfair.

But, that following morning, she got up, strangely feeling totally different, like during the night a fairy or elf had come and cast a magic spell on her, completely changing her attitude. She just didn’t feel like being the sad, sour, resentful granddaughter she had been for the first week.

After breakfast, her grandmother had given her a hand-drawn map with the four destinations drawn simplistically, with directions on how to get to each. Directions she had followed. But the hike had taken a toll, and when she reached the first of the ruins, she had some of the food her grandmother had packed for her, and then decided to rest before exploring.

Perhaps she should not have fallen asleep.

…

When she woke, it was as if she were in a different place, except that couldn’t be right because she remembered the ruins nearby. It was only when she looked back on the way she thought she had come, it looked different.

There was still time for her to explore and then worry about getting back to the cottage. It couldn’t be that difficult; all she had to do was retrace her steps.

The thing was, at first sight, the ruins did not look much different to the basics of the structures in her grandmother’s village. It meant that this place was just an older version that had been abandoned for some reason, but the people who had moved on.

Resources, perhaps? Available water, land to grow crops and graze animals? Perhaps the seasons were unkind because of their proximity to the mountains, or was there something in the mountains that caused them to move on?

As she got closer to the foot of the hills, the ruins became more distinct, and there were streets, leading to a central point which, she could now see, was a fountain. Beyond that was a facade, perhaps once the entrance to a large building or temple, now hidden away.

The fountain, curiously, had water in it, and when she dipped her hand in it, the fountain came to life, a small jet of water spraying up, then out to fill the bowls beneath. As each filled from the top, the water cascaded into the lower bowls and then the pond at the bottom.

Did she just activate it?

“I see you have the curiosity of a cat.” The words were spoken by a woman, about the same age as her mother, dressed like one of the temple princesses, and who had simply appeared.

She looked real.

“Who are you?” she asked.

“The guardian of the sacred ruins. We ensure that visitors who come here do not come with evil intent. You do not look like you are evil.”

“I am not. What place is this?”

“Brookmeadow. It was once a thriving town, but the evil mountain people came. Back then, we were people who trusted everyone had good intentions, because we did not believe in evil ways. We lived in harmony with the other people, the flora and the fauna. We pleased the Gods with seasonal sacrifices, and life was peaceful, and food and water were bountiful. Then evil came, and this is what remains. It will thrive again, one day.”

“I’m sorry to hear that. Maybe one day I will return.”

“Perhaps you will. Perhaps you were sent here for a reason. May your paths be clear, and intentions honourable, young Eliza.”

Then, as mysteriously as she had appeared, the princess disappeared.

Eliza shrugged and decided it was time to go back home. The way back seemed familiar again, and she set out along the path.

…

The princess joined three others who had been hiding in the shadows of the old temple, watching the young girl retreat.

“Is it she?” One asked.

“I believe it is. The next time she returns, we will begin the preparations.”

…

©  Charles Heath  2025

Writing a book in 365 days – 221/222

Days 221 and 222

Starting the story,

At the foot of the mountain, she discovered…

…

It was never her intention to leave the cottage that morning, go for a walk, and suddenly discover that she didn’t know precisely where she was.

Her aunt had said the previous evening that it was time she stopped moping about the place and did something constructive, like go exploring. The lake was to the west, the mountains to the east, one village, Moreton, was north, and another village, Billson, was south.

Perhaps a walk to the start of the mountains in the east would provide the most interest, because there were ruins of a previous civilisation there, hidden behind the regrowth of the forest, and fossicking for artifacts might give her some purpose.

MaryAnne hadn’t chosen to come to her Aunt’s. She was sent under threat of a fate worse than death if she did, pr at least that was how she saw it in her mind. Her Aunt was ‘batty’, he father had said, having agreed that her mother’s punishment was a little severe, but he could only shrug.

He didn’t dare argue the merits of what was good or bad for their daughter because he had ceded control over her to her mother. Girls were not his bailiwick. Besides, he had three boys, and they were a handful enough.

So, fate decided, he took her to the overnight coach and put her aboard with the lament that it was only going to be three months.

To her, it was just so unfair.

But, that following morning, she got up, strangely feeling totally different, like during the night a fairy or elf had come and cast a magic spell on her, completely changing her attitude. She just didn’t feel like being the sad, sour, resentful granddaughter she had been for the first week.

After breakfast, her grandmother had given her a hand-drawn map with the four destinations drawn simplistically, with directions on how to get to each. Directions she had followed. But the hike had taken a toll, and when she reached the first of the ruins, she had some of the food her grandmother had packed for her, and then decided to rest before exploring.

Perhaps she should not have fallen asleep.

…

When she woke, it was as if she were in a different place, except that couldn’t be right because she remembered the ruins nearby. It was only when she looked back on the way she thought she had come, it looked different.

There was still time for her to explore and then worry about getting back to the cottage. It couldn’t be that difficult; all she had to do was retrace her steps.

The thing was, at first sight, the ruins did not look much different to the basics of the structures in her grandmother’s village. It meant that this place was just an older version that had been abandoned for some reason, but the people who had moved on.

Resources, perhaps? Available water, land to grow crops and graze animals? Perhaps the seasons were unkind because of their proximity to the mountains, or was there something in the mountains that caused them to move on?

As she got closer to the foot of the hills, the ruins became more distinct, and there were streets, leading to a central point which, she could now see, was a fountain. Beyond that was a facade, perhaps once the entrance to a large building or temple, now hidden away.

The fountain, curiously, had water in it, and when she dipped her hand in it, the fountain came to life, a small jet of water spraying up, then out to fill the bowls beneath. As each filled from the top, the water cascaded into the lower bowls and then the pond at the bottom.

Did she just activate it?

“I see you have the curiosity of a cat.” The words were spoken by a woman, about the same age as her mother, dressed like one of the temple princesses, and who had simply appeared.

She looked real.

“Who are you?” she asked.

“The guardian of the sacred ruins. We ensure that visitors who come here do not come with evil intent. You do not look like you are evil.”

“I am not. What place is this?”

“Brookmeadow. It was once a thriving town, but the evil mountain people came. Back then, we were people who trusted everyone had good intentions, because we did not believe in evil ways. We lived in harmony with the other people, the flora and the fauna. We pleased the Gods with seasonal sacrifices, and life was peaceful, and food and water were bountiful. Then evil came, and this is what remains. It will thrive again, one day.”

“I’m sorry to hear that. Maybe one day I will return.”

“Perhaps you will. Perhaps you were sent here for a reason. May your paths be clear, and intentions honourable, young Eliza.”

Then, as mysteriously as she had appeared, the princess disappeared.

Eliza shrugged and decided it was time to go back home. The way back seemed familiar again, and she set out along the path.

…

The princess joined three others who had been hiding in the shadows of the old temple, watching the young girl retreat.

“Is it she?” One asked.

“I believe it is. The next time she returns, we will begin the preparations.”

…

©  Charles Heath  2025

Harry Walthenson, Private Detective – the second case – A case of finding the “Flying Dutchman”

…

What starts as a search for a missing husband soon develops into an unbelievable story of treachery, lies, and incredible riches.

…

It was meant to remain buried long enough for the dust to settle on what was once an unpalatable truth, when enough time had passed, and those who had been willing to wait could reap the rewards.

The problem was, no one knew where that treasure was hidden or the location of the logbook that held the secret.

At stake, billions of dollars’ worth of stolen Nazi loot brought to the United States in an anonymous tramp steamer and hidden in a specially constructed vault under a specifically owned plot of land on the once docklands of New York.

It may have remained hidden and unknown to only a few, if it had not been for a mere obscure detail being overheard …

… by our intrepid, newly minted private detective, Harry Walthenson …

… and it would have remained buried.

Now, through a series of unrelated events, or are they, that well-kept secret is out there, and Harry will not stop until the whole truth is uncovered.

Even if it almost costs him his life.  Again.

A long short story that can’t be tamed- I always wanted to rescue a damsel in distress – 8

Eight

So, not to sound like I was a snotty loser, when Cecile had first told me about Jake, the man I assumed was her new boyfriend, I said he was too good to be true.

He’d been sent to Australia to work in a branch of his father’s company as a learning experience on the way to bigger and better things.  He was just the sort of man she thought she wanted, not the slow and steady wins the race type, but someone who would, and literally did, sweep her off her feet.

Our last conversation, when she told me I was not the man of her dreams, she didn’t exactly identify him, but I knew who she was talking about.  She had fobbed me off several times, so I followed her and lo and behold, there was the man himself.

All she had to do was tell me we were done, but she didn’t, and exactly why she hadn’t remained a mystery.

That he had led her down a very dangerous path, well, I might have carried a grudge, but we had been together since childhood, and my feelings for her were not easily extinguished, not to the point I would take her back, but I would find her, and save her if she wanted to be saved.  After that, I would be the tourist for a while before going home.

Or if I got the travel bug, tour Europe for a while.

From the moment I’d told Emily about our separation, she had gone quiet.  Had she known about it?  If she knew that we were no longer together, why did she think I would come with her on this mission?  Get us back together?  We were going to have to talk about this, and the fact Cecile and I were done, and sooner rather than later, in case she got the wrong idea.

I was not the knight in shining armour, not anymore.

As for this Jake character, just who the hell was her.  If he was not who he said he was, and his parents were bot the people she was expecting, was he just some cheap imposter, after he money.  Her parents were wealthy, yes, but not overly so, and certainly not the sort who could pay a hefty ransom.

All of this would make sense if he was a conman.  And if that was the case, perhaps the man in the pin stripe suit was his accomplice.  I would call him soon once we were resettled in another hotel.

In the meantime, we had to make sure we were not being followed.

After spending an hour confusing even ourselves where we were, we stopped at a café.  Coffee and a rest, along with a consultation with the map, and an internet search of small hotels, on the other side of town, one that required a few changes of train and/or bus.

We had said little except to agree or disagree which way to go, until now.  I could see that revelation about Cecile and her new boyfriend had struck her, and I began to believe that Cecile had neither told her, or told anyone else about Jake.

That made sense too, if he didn’t want her to tell anyone ‘Just yet’, until they got home.  For a girl with so much common sense, how could she have been so easily led astray?

After the coffee and a cake was delivered to the table, she said, “I’m sorry.”

“About what?”

“Dragging you here on this odyssey.  If I’d known you two had split up, I would not have been so insensitive.  Why didn’t you tell me?”

“I thought she had.”

“Do you know who this Jake is?”

“Only saw him once, and he was devilishly handsome.  Adonis would have had trouble competing with him.”

Did that sound like sour grapes?  Probably.  The first time I saw him, I knew I had no chance.

“That’s not her type.”

“Apparently it is now.”

She took a moment, eyed the cake, and mentally calculated the number of calories it contained, in exactly the manner he elder sister did, then asked, “Why did you come?”

“I still care about her, and what happens to her.”

“Even after she dumped you?”

I had forgotten Emily could be quite blunt sometimes, and now that she had learned of our split, she wasn’t taking it well.  That may have had something to do with the fact she took the credit for us getting together, all those years ago, when I might add, she was about five.

I’d been part of the furniture for almost all of her life, so I guess it was hard to take.

“Well, when we find her, I’m going to give her a very stern bollocking.”

If, and/or when, we found her. 

We still had to find a new hotel, get our luggage from the airport, Figure how to find our way to Jakes last known address, and make a call to a man called Sid Jackson, though he didn’t look like a Sid to me.

An idea occurred to me, and rather than having to rely on public transport, not that in London it wasn’t far better than anything we had at home, I remembered seeing a rent-a-car place not too far back.  A car might just be the thing, and in one respect, just the move they might not be expecting.

Something else had just occurred to me too.  Why had Cecile left this trail of breadcrumbs for me to follow, when she had made it quite clear she didn’t want to be with me anymore?

I guess it was a question I’d have to ask when we finally found her.

…

©  Charles Heath  2024

Writing a book in 365 days – My Story 33

More about my story – the Commissioner of Police, Delacrat

…

Beneath the Uniform: The Quiet Rebellion in a Tyrant’s Shadow

In a world suffocated by the heavy hand of dictatorship, where every whisper is monitored and every shadow holds a threat, true heroism often wears a disguise. It doesn’t always roar from the barricades; sometimes, it sits in silence, biding its time, hidden in plain sight.

Meet Chief Superintendent Delacrat. On the surface, he is the unwavering head of the nation’s regular police department, a pillar of the system. He upholds the law, maintains order, and presents an image of stern, unyielding authority. But behind the impeccable uniform and the steady gaze lies a burning secret: Delacrat is a profoundly fair and honest man, a moral compass tragically misaligned with the corrupt regime he serves.

His days are a constant torment. He sees the reports, hears the whispers, and feels the tremors of fear that ripple through the populace. He knows all too well the true architects of this fear: the Secret Police. A shadowy organization, led by a truly monstrous figure, their ranks are filled with brutal ex-soldiers, perfectly trained in the art of terror. They perpetrate unspeakable crimes against their own people – disappearances, torture, summary executions – all in the name of “state security.” Delacrat knows every single atrocity, every injustice, and the helplessness to intervene eats at his very soul. Yet.

That “yet” is the silent promise of a coming dawn. For Chief Superintendent Delacrat is not merely an observer of injustice; he is a quiet architect of change. Deep in the shadows, he has forged a perilous alliance with the revolutionary forces, the very people the regime seeks to crush. He moves with calculated precision, gathering intelligence, making strategic delays, and preparing for the inevitable. When the day of reckoning arrives, when the fight to reclaim their country explodes into the open, Delacrat has a specific, vital role to play – a role that only a man in his unique position could execute, a role that could tip the scales of destiny.

And then, there’s Willoughby. An outsider, he arrives in this subjugated nation for reasons entirely unrelated to its internal turmoil. Perhaps he’s an academic, an engineer, or a diplomat with a seemingly innocuous mission. But in the grand, dangerous chess game unfolding, Willoughby’s arrival proves to be an unexpected boon. With a skill set or an uncanny knack for navigating the complex web of power and resistance, he is quickly identified as a useful assistant, an unwitting (or perhaps eventually very willing) pawn who can help get the job done.

The fuse is lit. The pieces are moving into place. In the heart of a broken country, a good man in a bad uniform, an unexpected visitor, and a desperate revolution are converging. The question isn’t if the storm will break, but when, and what will remain when the dust settles, when justice finally demands its due.

Writing a book in 365 days – My Story 33

More about my story – the Commissioner of Police, Delacrat

…

Beneath the Uniform: The Quiet Rebellion in a Tyrant’s Shadow

In a world suffocated by the heavy hand of dictatorship, where every whisper is monitored and every shadow holds a threat, true heroism often wears a disguise. It doesn’t always roar from the barricades; sometimes, it sits in silence, biding its time, hidden in plain sight.

Meet Chief Superintendent Delacrat. On the surface, he is the unwavering head of the nation’s regular police department, a pillar of the system. He upholds the law, maintains order, and presents an image of stern, unyielding authority. But behind the impeccable uniform and the steady gaze lies a burning secret: Delacrat is a profoundly fair and honest man, a moral compass tragically misaligned with the corrupt regime he serves.

His days are a constant torment. He sees the reports, hears the whispers, and feels the tremors of fear that ripple through the populace. He knows all too well the true architects of this fear: the Secret Police. A shadowy organization, led by a truly monstrous figure, their ranks are filled with brutal ex-soldiers, perfectly trained in the art of terror. They perpetrate unspeakable crimes against their own people – disappearances, torture, summary executions – all in the name of “state security.” Delacrat knows every single atrocity, every injustice, and the helplessness to intervene eats at his very soul. Yet.

That “yet” is the silent promise of a coming dawn. For Chief Superintendent Delacrat is not merely an observer of injustice; he is a quiet architect of change. Deep in the shadows, he has forged a perilous alliance with the revolutionary forces, the very people the regime seeks to crush. He moves with calculated precision, gathering intelligence, making strategic delays, and preparing for the inevitable. When the day of reckoning arrives, when the fight to reclaim their country explodes into the open, Delacrat has a specific, vital role to play – a role that only a man in his unique position could execute, a role that could tip the scales of destiny.

And then, there’s Willoughby. An outsider, he arrives in this subjugated nation for reasons entirely unrelated to its internal turmoil. Perhaps he’s an academic, an engineer, or a diplomat with a seemingly innocuous mission. But in the grand, dangerous chess game unfolding, Willoughby’s arrival proves to be an unexpected boon. With a skill set or an uncanny knack for navigating the complex web of power and resistance, he is quickly identified as a useful assistant, an unwitting (or perhaps eventually very willing) pawn who can help get the job done.

The fuse is lit. The pieces are moving into place. In the heart of a broken country, a good man in a bad uniform, an unexpected visitor, and a desperate revolution are converging. The question isn’t if the storm will break, but when, and what will remain when the dust settles, when justice finally demands its due.

“The Things we do for Love”, the story behind the story

This story has been ongoing since I was seventeen, and just to let you know, I’m 71 this year.

Yes, it’s taken a long time to get it done.

Why, you might ask.

Well, I never gave it much interest because I started writing it after a small incident when I was 17, and working as a book packer for a book distributor in Melbourne

At the end of my first year, at Christmas, the employer had a Christmas party, and that year, it was at a venue in St Kilda.

I wasn’t going to go because at that age, I was an ordinary boy who was very introverted and basically scared of his own shadow and terrified by girls.

Back then, I would cross the street to avoid them

Also, other members of the staff in the shipping department were rough and ready types who were not backwards in telling me what happened, and being naive, perhaps they knew I’d be either shocked or intrigued.

I was both adamant I wasn’t coming and then got roped in on a dare.

Damn!

So, back then, in the early 70s, people looked the other way when it came to drinking, and of course, Dutch courage always takes away the concerns, especially when normally you wouldn’t do half the stuff you wouldn’t in a million years

I made it to the end, not as drunk and stupid as I thought I might be, and St Kilda being a salacious place if you knew where to look, my new friends decided to give me a surprise.

It didn’t take long to realise these men were ‘men about town’ as they kept saying, and we went on an odyssey.  Yes, those backstreet brothels where one could, I was told, have anything they could imagine.

Let me tell you, large quantities of alcohol and imagination were a very bad mix.

So, the odyssey in ‘The things we do’ was based on that, and then the encounter with Diana. Well, let’s just say I learned a great deal about girls that night.

Firstly, not all girls are nasty and spiteful, which seemed to be the case whenever I met one. There was a way to approach, greet, talk to, and behave.

It was also true that I could have had anything I wanted, but I decided what was in my imagination could stay there.  She was amused that all I wanted was to talk, but it was my money, and I could spend it how I liked.

And like any 17-year-old naive fool, I fell in love with her and had all these foolish notions.  Months later, I went back, but she had moved on, to where no one was saying or knew.

Needless to say, I was heartbroken and had to get over that first loss, which, like any 17-year-old, was like the end of the world.

But it was the best hour I’d ever spent in my life and would remain so until I met the woman I have been married to for the last 48 years.

As Henry, he was in part based on a rebel, the son of rich parents who despised them and their wealth, and he used to regale anyone who would listen about how they had messed up his life

If only I’d come from such a background!

And yes, I was only a run away from climbing up the stairs to get on board a ship, acting as a purser.

I worked for a shipping company and they gave their junior staff members an opportunity to spend a year at sea working as a purser on a cargo ship that sailed between Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart in Australia.

One of the other junior staff members’ turn came, and I would visit him on board when he would tell me stories about life on board, the officers, the crew, and other events. These stories, which sounded incredible to someone so impressionable, were a delight to hear.

Alas, by that time, I had tired of office work and moved on to be a tradesman at the place where my father worked.

It proved to be the right move, as that is where I met my wife.  Diana had been right; love would find me when I least expected it.

A long short story that can’t be tamed – I always wanted to rescue a damsel in distress – 7

Seven

If I had deliberately wanted to flush out the people following us, and eventually lose them, I would never have thought of renting a car at a suburban shop.  I had to wonder what James Bond would have done in similar circumstances.

But it worked.

Driving out of the carpark onto the main street, it wasn’t difficult to see several people caught unawares.  And on their cell phones making calls.

And it was Emily’s last-minute brainwave to cover the car’s registration plates so if they were to take a photo, they would not be able to track it.  Well, not straight away.  It was she who said London had a lot of CCTV cameras, but on the way to the carpark, she had checked out where they were, those that she could readily identify, and we could avoid.

Something I learned about Emily that I didn’t know; she was a computer nerd, and a hacker of sorts, not one of those dark web experts, but she knew enough to dig around in places most people wouldn’t go looking.

That skill might just come in useful.

And, for a few minutes, maybe an hour, we revelled in the thought we may have outwitted them, whoever ‘them’ was.

It was late afternoon when we finally found a hotel with a carpark, a long way from Cecile’s flat in Earl’s Court, and on the other side of the Greater London region in Mile End Road, not very far from Stepney Green underground station, the result of Emily searching the web for a hotel with a carpark, and near public transport.

She also had our luggage delivered from the airport a little less than two hours from the moment she made the call.  I think I may have remarked that I might just employ her as my travel agent when I started my European odyssey, but she had fallen asleep, way past exhausted.

I wasn’t far behind her.  We had a long day tomorrow if today was anything to go by.

I woke to the smell of coffee and that more interesting aroma of burnt toast.

There were shopping bags on the table, and it looked as though Emily had been up and around for a while.

I looked at my watch, it was not much past seven, and not an hour I found myself up back home.  I had an apartment in the city, and it was a ten-minute walk to the office, so early rising was not a necessity.  My parents lived in the suburbs, and more than an hour by public transport, and two by car.  It was the reason I moved.  I didn’t want to spend a quarter of my life travelling to and from work.

Of course, London was so much larger than where I came from, and definitely not a place I would want to live, or work, despite the advantages that Cecile had tried to impress upon me.  And don’t get me get started on driving around London.  Yesterday had been harrowing, and left me, at times, shaken.

“Good morning, sleepyhead.”

Emily put a coffee plunger on the table, two cups, a plate of toast, bowls, and the cereal that was my favourite, though how she knew was anyone’s guess.

“You’ve been busy.”

“I like to get some exercise every morning, so I combined it with a shopping expedition

I had not attended this type of domesticity in a long time, at least not since I left home.  I had grown accustomed to being on my own, and that might have contributed to Cecile and I drifting apart.  It probably also had a lot to do with my awkwardness with girls, and rather than try to get over it, I just avoided them.

But, somehow, Emily was different, perhaps because she was younger and hadn’t been blunted by the vicissitudes of life.  She had finished school, and as far as I was aware, didn’t have a real job, preferring to spend her time pottering in her father’s office.

I had thought, much like in an 18th century romance novel, she was waiting for the right man to marry, but there were not too many of those running around these days.

Something else I just realised; how well I seemed to like being at ease in her company, much more so than when I was with Cecile, always on my guard not to say or do the wrong thing.

“I find going to a grocery store a trial, which is why I eat out a lot.”

She shook her head.  “You’re just lazy, like everyone else your age.  Convenience over practicality.  And you should think about doing some exercise.”

I could feel the eyes of the appraiser upon me and shivered.  It was good that I could not read her thoughts, but if I could, perhaps some might be considering those extra pounds that had found their way onto my frame after I stopped playing tennis and squash.

“I promise I’ll think about it.”

“Better still, I don’t think it’s all that safe to be jogging the streets in this neighbourhood early in the morning, so you can come with me as my protector.”

She saw my look of disdain, or was it the thought of having to exercise.

“Cheer up, I don’t go very fast.”

The sound of the phone vibrating on the table interrupted that thought, and conversation.

It was a private number, so I assumed it was the man from the day before.

“Yes?”

“Trafalgar Square, by the column, 12:30 pm today.”

It was the man’s voice.

“We’ll see you there.”

The call was disconnected.  Short and to the point.

“We have a lunch date.”

Before I could reach out to pick up my cup of coffee, the phone rang again.

Also a private number, I assumed it was the man ringing back with a change of plans.

“Yes?”

“We need to talk.”

A woman’s voice this time, not one that was familiar.

“About what?”  I was surprised and didn’t have time to work on a better comeback.

“Your Cecile.  She is over her head.”

Aside from stating the obvious, who was this woman, how did she know about Cecile, and more importantly, how did she know my cell number?

“Who the hell are you?”

“The London end of the team that recruited her.  Time is of the essence, so we’ll come to you.  We’ll be there in half an hour.”

That line went dead before I could ask another pertinent question, how did she know where we were?

“Who was that?”  Emily had been oblivious to the turmoil I was feeling.

“Someone else who wants to talk about Cecile.”

“Who?”

“No idea, but the word reruited popped up, whatever that might mean.”

“Here?  No one knows we’re here.”

“Exactly.”

“Perhaps we should leave, like, right now.”

“No.  I have a feeling that we might find out what Cecile is up to.”

And, in the back of my mind, several small, associated details clicked into place.  At the time they didn’t make any sense, but now, in a bigger context, and given the circumstances, I think I knew now why she had come.

And, more importantly, I realised she had been dropping breadcrumbs for me to follow long before she had left.

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©  Charles Heath  2024

Writing a book in 365 days – 220

Day 220

How to pitch a story to a prospective publisher

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From Spark to Submission: Unearthing Your Story’s Soul & Crafting the Perfect Publisher Pitch

You did it. You poured your heart, soul, and countless hours onto the page. You wrestled with characters, built worlds, shaped narratives, and perhaps, finally, typed “The End.” That’s a monumental achievement in itself. But for many writers, the real work, or at least the most daunting, begins after the last word is written: the journey from manuscript to published book.

This journey often involves two critical questions:

  1. What is your story really about?
  2. How do you pitch it to a publisher (or agent)?

Let’s dive in.

What is Your Story Really About? Beyond the Plot

This might seem like a simple question. “It’s about a wizard who goes on a quest!” or “It’s a memoir about overcoming a difficult childhood.” But a publisher (or agent) wants to know more than just the surface plot. They want to understand the heart, the hook, the unique selling proposition of your book.

Think of it as distilling your entire manuscript into a potent, irresistible essence.

Here’s how to dig deeper:

  1. The Core Conflict & Stakes: What is the central problem your protagonist faces? What will they lose if they fail? What will they gain if they succeed? The higher the stakes, the more compelling the story.
    • Example: Instead of “A wizard goes on a quest,” try: “A reluctant wizard must retrieve a mythical artifact to prevent a shadow realm from consuming his world, even if it means confronting the darkness within himself.”
  2. The “So What?” (Theme & Message): Beyond the events, what is your story saying? Is it about resilience, love, the corrupting nature of power, the complexities of family, the search for identity? This is the underlying universal truth that will resonate with readers long after they’ve turned the final page.
    • Ask yourself: What do I want readers to feel or think about after reading my book?
  3. The Character’s Arc: How does your protagonist change or grow throughout the story? What emotional journey do they undertake? Readers connect with characters, and compelling character arcs are the backbone of great narratives.
  4. The Unique Hook: What makes your story stand out from the thousands of others? Is it a fresh take on an old trope? A never-before-seen world? A voice unlike any other? A surprising twist? This is what will make an agent pause.
  5. The “Elevator Pitch” (Logline): Can you summarize your entire book in 1-2 sentences? This is a crucial exercise. It forces you to identify the core concept, protagonist, conflict, and stakes. Practice saying it out loud. If it doesn’t immediately grab attention, refine it.
    • Template Idea: “When [inciting incident happens to protagonist], [protagonist] must [goal/quest] before [stakes/consequences].”

Why is this important for pitching? Because an agent or editor needs to quickly grasp what your book is, why it matters, and who it’s for. If you can articulate this clearly, you’re halfway there.

Mastering the Publisher Pitch: Your Gateway Document (The Query Letter)

For fiction, and often for memoirs, the primary tool for pitching is the query letter. For non-fiction (like self-help, business, cookbooks), you’ll typically need a more extensive book proposal. Here, we’ll focus on the query letter, which serves as your book’s literary dating profile.

The Goal: To intrigue an agent (who will then pitch your book to publishers) or a publisher directly (if they accept unagented submissions) enough to request more of your manuscript.

Key Components of a Killer Query Letter:

  1. Personalization (The Research is Key):
    • Address the agent by name: “Dear Ms. Smith” or “Dear Mr. Jones.” Never “To Whom It May Concern.”
    • State why you’re contacting them: Mention a specific book they represented that resonates with yours, an interview where they expressed interest in your genre, or a conference where you heard them speak. This shows you’ve done your homework and aren’t just spamming everyone.
  2. The Hook (Your Logline in Action):
    • Start immediately with your compelling 1-2 sentence logline. This is your chance to grab their attention within the first few seconds. Make it punchy, intriguing, and hint at the core conflict.
  3. The Brief Synopsis (2-3 paragraphs):
    • This is not a chapter-by-chapter breakdown. It’s a concise, engaging summary of your book’s main plot points, character arc, and central conflict.
    • Introduce your protagonist, their world, and the inciting incident.
    • Detail the main rising action and the core struggles.
    • Crucially, do NOT reveal the ending. End on a suspenseful note that makes them want to read more. What is the climax the protagonist must face? What’s at stake?
  4. About the Author (The Credentials):
    • Keep this brief and relevant. Mention anything that lends credibility to your writing (previous publications, awards, relevant professional experience that informs the book).
    • If you have a significant author platform (large social media following, relevant professional network, speaking engagements), mention it, especially for non-fiction.
    • If you have no prior publications, that’s okay! Be honest and professional. Focus on your passion and the book itself.
  5. Comparable Titles (The “Comps”):
    • Suggest 2-3 recently published books (within the last 3-5 years) that are similar to yours in genre, tone, or target audience.
    • DO NOT compare your book to bestsellers like “The next Harry Potter” or classics like “War and Peace.”
    • Choose books that agents sold successfully. This shows you understand the current market and where your book fits.
    • Example: “My novel will appeal to readers who enjoyed the intricate world-building of [Book A] combined with the emotional depth of [Book B].”
  6. Word Count & Genre:
    • State your manuscript’s exact word count (e.g., “This standalone novel is complete at 85,000 words.”)
    • Clearly state its genre (e.g., “Young Adult Contemporary,” “Historical Fantasy,” “Literary Fiction”).
  7. The Professional Close:
    • Thank them for their time and consideration.
    • Reiterate that you’ve attached/included the requested materials (e.g., “Per your submission guidelines, I have included the first ten pages of my manuscript below.”).
    • “Sincerely,” or “All best,” followed by your full name.
    • Include your contact information (email, phone).

Common Pitfalls to Avoid:

  • Typos and Grammatical Errors: Proofread endlessly. Get others to proofread. This is your first impression.
  • Being Overly Familiar or Demanding: Maintain a professional and courteous tone.
  • Pitching an Unfinished Manuscript (for Fiction): Unless specifically requested, your fiction manuscript must be complete and polished before querying.
  • Revealing the Entire Plot/Ending: You want to entice, not summarize everything.
  • Too Long: A query letter should ideally be one page, 300-500 words maximum. Every word counts.
  • Begging or Desperation: Confidence in your work, not desperation, is attractive.
  • Not Following Guidelines: Every agent has specific submission guidelines (e.g., paste into email, attach as PDF, query form). Follow them exactly. Not doing so is an instant rejection.

The Road Ahead

Getting published is a marathon, not a sprint. It requires patience, resilience, and a thick skin. Expect rejections – they are a universal part of the process. Use them as motivation to refine your pitch, improve your manuscript, and keep learning.

Your story deserves to be heard. By understanding its true essence and mastering the art of the pitch, you’re giving it the best possible chance to find its way from your heart to a reader’s hands.

Now, tell us: What’s the very core of your story? And what’s one thing you’re most nervous about when it comes to pitching? Share in the comments below!