Writing a book in 365 days – My Story 29

More about my story

When I was writing the original story, there was no Natasha.

The thing is, there was going to be retribution, but it was going to be the usual revenge: sneak up on the person responsible, and shoot him.

Blunt, but quick and satisfying.

But the thing is, revenge is never that simple; there are always multiple layers, events, and people that bring this revenge to life.

It helps to know who the revenge is against and why.

First, Willoughby’s head of department, O’Connell’s the man who can’t lie straight in bed. To him, a double cross is like a grist to the mill. He’s not the instigator, just the agent of doom. McConnell has no time for people like Whitelaw or Fitzherbert.

Second, Whitelaw, the man who perceived the unjust treatment of his request to head the new department. He’s the yes man that every minister needs, except his minister decides to give it to McConnell. What more reason for a man like Whitelaw, who doesn’t suffer rebuff very well, is needed to try and bring McConnell down?

Pity those caught in the crossfire? Absolutely.

Third, Fitzherbert, the relevant minister, and a problem. He doesn’t understand the spy business
But what minister does unless he was a spy or ran a covert intelligence agency?

Pity then the man who has oversight is barely able to spell intelligence, let alone handle oversight. That’s the bailiwick of the permanent head (sadly, our disgruntled Whitelaw)

You can see where this is going.

Four, Archibald, the Prime Minister, who wasn’t when Natasha first arrived, but her handlers knew the potential, and she got in on the ground floor as his mistress, among others.

Five, Natasha herself, was recruited with her sister from an orphanage and trained to be a sleeper agent until activated. Spies.

The question is whether Archibald knew who and what she was, because he’s the one who recalls her from retirement to do what had turned out to be a very messy internecine war that had crippled their intelligence operations.

And for Natasha, she was already invested because of Willoughby being the final victim in that war. She was already in the country monitoring Willoughby’s progress, and it was only a matter of time before she unravelled the situation.

And pissing off Natasha was the last thing any of them wanted to do because retribution in her hands meant only one outcome.

Writing a book in 365 days – My Story 29

More about my story

When I was writing the original story, there was no Natasha.

The thing is, there was going to be retribution, but it was going to be the usual revenge: sneak up on the person responsible, and shoot him.

Blunt, but quick and satisfying.

But the thing is, revenge is never that simple; there are always multiple layers, events, and people that bring this revenge to life.

It helps to know who the revenge is against and why.

First, Willoughby’s head of department, O’Connell’s the man who can’t lie straight in bed. To him, a double cross is like a grist to the mill. He’s not the instigator, just the agent of doom. McConnell has no time for people like Whitelaw or Fitzherbert.

Second, Whitelaw, the man who perceived the unjust treatment of his request to head the new department. He’s the yes man that every minister needs, except his minister decides to give it to McConnell. What more reason for a man like Whitelaw, who doesn’t suffer rebuff very well, is needed to try and bring McConnell down?

Pity those caught in the crossfire? Absolutely.

Third, Fitzherbert, the relevant minister, and a problem. He doesn’t understand the spy business
But what minister does unless he was a spy or ran a covert intelligence agency?

Pity then the man who has oversight is barely able to spell intelligence, let alone handle oversight. That’s the bailiwick of the permanent head (sadly, our disgruntled Whitelaw)

You can see where this is going.

Four, Archibald, the Prime Minister, who wasn’t when Natasha first arrived, but her handlers knew the potential, and she got in on the ground floor as his mistress, among others.

Five, Natasha herself, was recruited with her sister from an orphanage and trained to be a sleeper agent until activated. Spies.

The question is whether Archibald knew who and what she was, because he’s the one who recalls her from retirement to do what had turned out to be a very messy internecine war that had crippled their intelligence operations.

And for Natasha, she was already invested because of Willoughby being the final victim in that war. She was already in the country monitoring Willoughby’s progress, and it was only a matter of time before she unravelled the situation.

And pissing off Natasha was the last thing any of them wanted to do because retribution in her hands meant only one outcome.

Writing a book in 365 days – 199

Day 199

Writing before computers.

It’s the 250th anniversary of something to do with Jane Austen, and I was watching a limited series about her life, or her sister, or something like that.

I’m a Jane Austen fan, by the way, introduced to her writing by Pride and Prejudice, the TV series way, way back with Colin Firth as Mr Darcy.

But I digress…

What was notable about it was how Jane Austen wrote her books, on sheets of paper with a quill and ink, and I got the impression she created her own ink, and it was messy. Her writing fingers were stained with the black stuff.

It took me back to when I started, a little more modern with a ruled exercise book and a biro, though it was no less messy when the ink of the biro got messy and smudgy.

So I graduated to a pencil and found that I could cross out less and use an eraser to get rid of what I didn’t want. The pencil stayed, and the notebooks got smaller so I could take one with me everywhere in case an idea popped into my head.

I have a box of about three or four hundred of them, filled with writing that was later transcribed into books.

However, after pencil and paper came a typewriter, my mother’s old portable with a ribbon that often needed replacement before the writing became too hard to read.

And the typeface got bent out of shape, making the strings of letters somewhat odd.

But these days I have an app on my phone, a Galaxy tab and a notebook computer, but I still use Notepads and pencils and handwrite a lot of my writing. Just in case technology disappears and we go back to living in caves.

Writing a book in 365 days – 199

Day 199

Writing before computers.

IT’s the 250th anniversary of something to do with Jane Austen, and I was watching a limited series about her life, or her sister, or something like that.

I’m a Jane Austen fan, by the way, introduced to her writing by Pride and Prejudice, the TV series way, way back with Colin Firth as Mr Darcy.

But I digress…

What was notable about it was how Jane Austen wrote her books, on sheets of paper with a quill and ink, and I got the impression she created her own ink, and it was messy. Her writing fingers were stained with the black stuff.

It took me back to when I started, a little more modern with a ruled exercise book and a biro, though it was no less messy when the ink of the biro got messy and smudgy.

So I graduated to a pencil and found that I could cross out less and use an eraser to get rid of what I didn’t want. The pencil stayed, and the notebooks got smaller so I could take one with me everywhere in case an idea popped into my head.

I have a box of about three or four hundred of them, filled with writing that was later transcribed into books.

However, after pencil and paper came a typewriter, my mother’s old portable with a ribbon that often needed replacement before the writing became too hard to read.

And the typeface got bent out of shape, making the strings of letters somewhat odd.

But these days I have an app on my phone, a Galaxy tab and a notebook computer, but I still use Notepads and pencils and handwrite a lot of my writing. Just in case technology disappears and we go back to living in caves.

First Dig Two Graves

A sequel to “The Devil You Don’t”

Revenge is a dish best served cold – or preferably so when everything goes right

Of course, it rarely does, as Alistair, Zoe’s handler, discovers to his peril. Enter a wildcard, John, and whatever Alistair’s plan for dealing with Zoe was dies with him.

It leaves Zoe in completely unfamiliar territory.

John’s idyllic romance with a woman who is utterly out of his comfort zone is on borrowed time. She is still trying to reconcile her ambivalence, after being so indifferent for so long.

They agree to take a break, during which she disappears. John, thinking she has left without saying goodbye, refuses to accept the inevitable, calls on an old friend for help in finding her.

After the mayhem and being briefly reunited, she recognises an inevitable truth: there is a price to pay for taking out Alistair; she must leave and find them first, and he would be wise to keep a low profile.

But keeping a low profile just isn’t possible, and enlisting another friend, a private detective and his sister, a deft computer hacker, they track her to the border between Austria and Hungary.

What John doesn’t realise is that another enemy is tracking him to find her too. It could have been a grand tour of Europe. Instead, it becomes a race against time before enemies old and new converge for what will be an inevitable showdown.

Writing a book in 365 days – 198

Day 198

Writing a story to astonish the reader

I was sitting down and wondering just what I could write that would create a sense of astonishment, or even shock the reader.

Then my news feed arced up and – well, I have to say I’m astonished.

At the state of American politics, and the lengths political parties will go to avoid getting caught, especially when they’ve been caught.

I utterly refuse to believe that the Democratic Party is to blame for absolutely everything in America. It takes a long time to completely stuff everything up, and both parties have a hand in all the problems.

It’s the same in Australia. We’ve got a lot of problems, but no one party has caused them; they are caused by both, and a lot to do with election cycles. No one wants to set in place the 10-year cycle it would take to fix things.

Then, I have to say it is the same everywhere.

The next thing that flashes up in the news cycle, pedophiles. OK, not the domain of one party, but everyone has a hand in this. And it is abhorrent, and we say we don’t tolerate it, but the fact is, politicians, judges, policemen, lawyers, doctors, priests and even presidents are complicit. The thing is, we all know they’re complicit, we want answers and arrests, and somehow it all gets buried.

Shock!

Or not.

It’s no surprise, no shock, and we are not even astonished when the politicians from the top down, and then the law enforcement officers, all lie, lie, lie, and then lie again.

And we let them.

There’s the shock, right there.

And the next shock? Nothing is going to happen. We’ll be talking about this in four years, and no one will be arrested. Someone might commit suicide (ha bloody ha), absolving the guilty.

If the Republicans are in power, it’s all the Democrats who are pedophiles, and if the Democrats are in power then it’s all the Republicans who are pedophiles, and when you can’t even believe in or trust your president, well, what hope is there for all those victims?

Oh, hang on, we seem to have forgotten about the victims. I was a victim. I know what it’s like to be abused. I know what it’s like not to get justice. I know what it’s like to listen to the lies of the perpetrator and watch him get away with it.

I cannot be shocked, surprised or astonished anymore.

What would shock me?

Just one of those turds being hung at noon in a public square as a reminder that it will not be tolerated.

Rant over!

Another excerpt from ‘Betrayal’; a work in progress

My next destination in the quest was the hotel we believed Anne Merriweather had stayed at.

I was, in a sense, flying blind because we had no concrete evidence she had been there, and the message she had left behind didn’t quite name the hotel or where Vladimir was going to take her.

Mindful of the fact that someone might have been following me, I checked to see if the person I’d assumed had followed me to Elizabeth’s apartment was still in place, but I couldn’t see him. Next, I made a mental note of seven different candidates and committed them to memory.

Then I set off to the hotel, hailing a taxi. There was the possibility the cab driver was one of them, but perhaps I was slightly more paranoid than I should be. I’d been watching the queue, and there were two others before me.

The journey took about an hour, during which time I kept an eye out the back to see if anyone had been following us. If anyone was, I couldn’t see them.

I had the cab drop me off a block from the hotel and then spent the next hour doing a complete circuit of the block the hotel was on, checking the front and rear entrances, the cameras in place, and the siting of the driveway into the underground carpark. There was a camera over the entrance, and one we hadn’t checked for footage. I sent a text message to Fritz to look into it.

The hotel lobby was large and busy, which was exactly what you’d want if you wanted to come and go without standing out. It would be different later at night, but I could see her arriving about mid-afternoon, and anonymous among the type of clientele the hotel attracted.

I spent an hour sitting in various positions in the lobby simply observing. I had already ascertained where the elevator lobby for the rooms was, and the elevator down to the car park. Fortunately, it was not ‘guarded’ but there was a steady stream of concierge staff coming and going to the lower levels, and, just from time to time, guests.

Then, when there was a commotion at the front door, what seemed to be a collision of guests and free-wheeling bags, I saw one of the seven potential taggers sitting by the front door. Waiting for me to leave? Or were they wondering why I was spending so much time there?

Taking advantage of that confusion, I picked my moment to head for the elevators that went down to the car park, pressed the down button, and waited.

The was no car on the ground level, so I had to wait, watching, like several others, the guests untangling themselves at the entrance, and an eye on my potential surveillance, still absorbed in the confusion.

The doors to the left car opened, and a concierge stepped out, gave me a quick look, then headed back to his desk. I stepped into the car, pressed the first level down, the level I expected cars to arrive on, and waited what seemed like a long time for the doors to close.

As they did, I was expecting to see a hand poke through the gap, a latecomer. Nothing happened, and I put it down to a television moment.

There were three basement levels, and for a moment, I let my imagination run wild and considered the possibility that there were more levels. Of course, there was no indication on the control panel that there were any other floors, and I’d yet to see anything like it in reality.

With a shake of my head to return to reality, the car arrived, the doors opened, and I stepped out.

A car pulled up, and the driver stepped out, went around to the rear of his car, and pulled out a case. I half expected him to throw me the keys, but the instant glance he gave me told him was not the concierge, and instead brushed past me like I wasn’t there.

He bashed the up button several times impatiently and cursed when the doors didn’t open immediately. Not a happy man.

Another car drove past on its way down to a lower level.

I looked up and saw the CCTV camera, pointing towards the entrance, visible in the distance. A gate that lifted up was just about back in position and then made a clunk when it finally closed. The footage from the camera would not prove much, even if it had been working, because it didn’t cover the life lobby, only in the direction of the car entrance.

The doors to the other elevator car opened, and a man in a suit stepped out.

“Can I help you, sir? You seem lost.”

Security, or something else. “It seems that way. I went to the elevator lobby, got in, and it went down rather than up. I must have been in the wrong place.”

“Lost it is, then, sir.” I could hear the contempt for Americans in his tone. “If you will accompany me, please.”

He put out a hand ready to guide me back into the elevator. I was only too happy to oblige him. There had been a sign near the button panel that said the basement levels were only to be accessed by the guests.

Once inside, he turned a key and pressed the lobby button. The doors closed, and we went up. He stood, facing the door, not speaking. A few seconds later, he was ushering me out to the lobby.

“Now, sir, if you are a guest…”

“Actually, I’m looking for one. She called me and said she would be staying in this hotel and to come down and visit her. I was trying to get to the sixth floor.”

“Good. Let’s go over the the desk and see what we can do for you.”

I followed him over to the reception desk, where he signalled one of the clerks, a young woman who looked and acted very efficiently, and told her of my request, but then remained to oversee the proceeding.

“Name of guest, sir?”

“Merriweather, Anne. I’m her brother, Alexander.” I reached into my coat pocket and pulled out my passport to prove that I was who I said I was. She glanced cursorily at it.

She typed the name into the computer, and then we waited a few seconds while it considered what to output. Then, she said, “That lady is not in the hotel, sir.”

Time to put on my best-confused look. “But she said she would be staying here for the week. I made a special trip to come here to see her.”

Another puzzled look from the clerk, then, “When did she call you?”

An interesting question to ask, and it set off a warning bell in my head. I couldn’t say today, it would have to be the day she was supposedly taken.

“Last Saturday, about four in the afternoon.”

Another look at the screen, then, “It appears she checked out Sunday morning. I’m afraid you have made a trip in vain.”

Indeed, I had. “Was she staying with anyone?”

I just managed to see the warning pass from the suited man to the clerk. I thought he had shown an interest when I mentioned the name, and now I had confirmation. He knew something about her disappearance. The trouble was, he wasn’t going to volunteer any information because he was more than just hotel security.

“No.”

“Odd,” I muttered. “I thought she told me she was staying with a man named Vladimir something or other. I’m not too good at pronouncing those Russian names. Are you sure?”

She didn’t look back at the screen. “Yes.”

“OK, now one thing I do know about staying in hotels is that you are required to ask guests with foreign passports their next destination, just in case they need to be found. Did she say where she was going next?” It was a long shot, but I thought I’d ask.

“Moscow. As I understand it, she lives in Moscow. That was the only address she gave us.”

I smiled. “Thank you. I know where that is. I probably should have gone there first.”

She didn’t answer; she didn’t have to, her expression did that perfectly.

The suited man spoke again, looking at the clerk. “Thank you.” He swivelled back to me. “I’m sorry we can’t help you.”

“No. You have more than you can know.”

“What was your name again, sir, just in case you still cannot find her?”

“Alexander Merriweather. Her brother. And if she is still missing, I will be posting a very large reward. At the moment, you can best contact me via the American Embassy.”

Money is always a great motivator, and that thoughtful expression on his face suggested he gave a moment’s thought to it.

I left him with that offer and left. If anything, the people who were holding her would know she had a brother, that her brother was looking for her, and equally that brother had money.

© Charles Heath – 2018-2025

Writing a book in 365 days – 198

Day 198

Writing a story to astonish the reader

I was sitting down and wondering just what I could write that would create a sense of astonishment, or even shock the reader.

Then my news feed arced up and – well, I have to say I’m astonished.

At the state of American politics, and the lengths political parties will go to avoid getting caught, especially when they’ve been caught.

I utterly refuse to believe that the Democratic Party is to blame for absolutely everything in America. It takes a long time to completely stuff everything up, and both parties have a hand in all the problems.

It’s the same in Australia. We’ve got a lot of problems, but no one party has caused them; they are caused by both, and a lot to do with election cycles. No one wants to set in place the 10-year cycle it would take to fix things.

Then, I have to say it is the same everywhere.

The next thing that flashes up in the news cycle, pedophiles. OK, not the domain of one party, but everyone has a hand in this. And it is abhorrent, and we say we don’t tolerate it, but the fact is, politicians, judges, policemen, lawyers, doctors, priests and even presidents are complicit. The thing is, we all know they’re complicit, we want answers and arrests, and somehow it all gets buried.

Shock!

Or not.

It’s no surprise, no shock, and we are not even astonished when the politicians from the top down, and then the law enforcement officers, all lie, lie, lie, and then lie again.

And we let them.

There’s the shock, right there.

And the next shock? Nothing is going to happen. We’ll be talking about this in four years, and no one will be arrested. Someone might commit suicide (ha bloody ha), absolving the guilty.

If the Republicans are in power, it’s all the Democrats who are pedophiles, and if the Democrats are in power then it’s all the Republicans who are pedophiles, and when you can’t even believe in or trust your president, well, what hope is there for all those victims?

Oh, hang on, we seem to have forgotten about the victims. I was a victim. I know what it’s like to be abused. I know what it’s like not to get justice. I know what it’s like to listen to the lies of the perpetrator and watch him get away with it.

I cannot be shocked, surprised or astonished anymore.

What would shock me?

Just one of those turds being hung at noon in a public square as a reminder that it will not be tolerated.

Rant over!

Writing a book in 365 days – 197

Day 197

Could you write a fantasy story to avoid getting too serious

For years, people used to tell me I was living in my own fantasy land.

What amazed me was that they could see into my mind that I wanted to be a knight in shining armour, a superhero, a billionaire who wanted for nothing, and a spy who beat the bad guys and won over the girl.

Of course, none of this could ever happen in reality, only in my imagination.

With the arrival of three grandchildren and being asked to take up child-minding, came the time to read them stories before they went to bed.

I used to think that the violence that was within those stories would keep any sane person up all night, but I was quick to realise that any sort of cartoon or fantasy story always carried an indecent level of violence.

Perhaps from a young age, we are supposed to be taught that good triumphs over evil and the bad guys always come off second best.

However….

After reading a lot of fairy tales to the girls, I thought to myself I could do better and decided to write my own.

A snotty, egotistical princess is about to be married off to the prince in the kingdom next door, and he isn’t very nice.  The thing is, no one likes her, and everyone is glad she’s going away to be with her prince.

She’s been betrothed since they were children, and that notion she could marry for love was dashed many years before.

But…

There’s a legend that comes once in a millennium called ‘the conflagration’, where the firstborn eldest daughter from one of the kingdoms in the realm is selected to become ‘the saviour’, who has to go on a quest to find the twelve pieces of the tablet needed to restore peace and order.

It just happens that after the invasion of her kingdom by another, that of her prince, soon to be husband, the conflagration begins. Her ‘knight in shining armour’ comes to collect her, only it is not marriage he has in mind.

Her father’s trusted Master-at-Arms is sent to save her from the prince and take her on the quest, sent to him in his dreams. The problem is, the king believes the Gods have made a mistake, but trusts his personal knight to guide her in her role.

Of course, the knight doesn’t believe she will get past the first task. For that reason, he doesn’t tell her the real reason why they are heading into the Kingdom of Magic. Not until it’s time to find the first artefact.

There are twelve to find, and by the time she locates the last piece of the puzzle, she transforms from the whiny, self-indulgent brat into a fearless leader.

Everything a saviour needed to be.

By the time the first draft was finished, it was 1,100 pages of the story called The Enchanted Horse.

Well, Mr Disney, I’ve just created your next Disney Princess, The Princess Marigold!

Harry Walthenson, Private Detective – the second case – A case of finding the “Flying Dutchman”

What starts as a search for a missing husband soon develops into an unbelievable story of treachery, lies, and incredible riches.

It was meant to remain buried long enough for the dust to settle on what was once an unpalatable truth, when enough time had passed, and those who had been willing to wait could reap the rewards.

The problem was, no one knew where that treasure was hidden or the location of the logbook that held the secret.

At stake, billions of dollars’ worth of stolen Nazi loot brought to the United States in an anonymous tramp steamer and hidden in a specially constructed vault under a specifically owned plot of land on the once docklands of New York.

It may have remained hidden and unknown to only a few, if it had not been for a mere obscure detail being overheard …

… by our intrepid, newly minted private detective, Harry Walthenson …

… and it would have remained buried.

Now, through a series of unrelated events, or are they, that well-kept secret is out there, and Harry will not stop until the whole truth is uncovered.

Even if it almost costs him his life.  Again.