Category: NaNoWriMo

The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 21

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The search goes on.  The names are more exotic, the décor sometimes outrageous, and the girls from interesting to not so interesting.

It certainly isn’t cheap, but Radly said it wouldn’t be.

All of the women in charge either knew Radly, or the Turk, some with displeasure, others, well maybe it was all displeasure.  They were forcibly taken over, and it would make a good subplot to have them all simmering over the take-back plan.

Perhaps that could be part of the end.  It just means that Michelle has to take care of him, and by now I’ve decided that she will be if she can get the help and the means.

Originally, I considered a simple solution, Henry comes along, finds her, and they escape after rescuing two of her friends, and helping bring about the Turk’s downfall.

It just occurred to me that there should be a subplot involving police detectives, coming at the problem from a different aspect, and the two should meet.

Oops, that means a bit of backtracking and a small rewrite.

Now, she’s going to take the Turk and Felix down. 

It might also mean I have to go back to the start, and flesh out a little more of Micelle’s background, leading up to, and why she ended up in Morganville.

Ugh!

Oh, and handing out a photo of her might just raise a little unwanted attention.  We shall see…

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Mistaken Identity – The Editor’s Third Draft – Day 16

I have been working on the story, the editor is asking for a third draft after making suggested changes – and I’m now working on it

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Today’s writing is about the results of the police calling on Jack after he reported his house being broken into.

They arrive.

They make the same mistake the Italian police did, mistaking him for Jacob, who since he murdered a woman in the hotel back where the conference was being held, and is still at large.

What would any reasonable person expect?

And along with this revelation is another, that his suspicions about Maryanne were right because the Detective has to let her go on orders from ‘someone connected’.

From this, we can infer that she is either a Homeland Security person whose been looking for, or had Jacob under surveillance before he was killed, or a private detective, though Jack has bigger problems to worry about.

He is being arrested and hauled off to the station for questioning.

And he’s not holding his breath that Maryanne will be doing anything to sort the problem out. She probably has her own problems now that Jack knows who she is, and the fact her mission has been entirely unsuccessful,

And, no, Jack didn’t tell her about the diary, but you can just bet that’s what she’s after.

More tomorrow.

The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 20

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For Henry, it’s going to be like walking into the twilight zone.

The odyssey begins at a place called Gringoes, a place both think is the last place a potential customer would want to be seen, but that is judging a book by its cover.

Both are going to soon discover there’s a lot more going on than what the eye can see.

This search starts out without a clear plan, and it seems that going in and directly asking for Michelle, which may or may not be her work name or any name for that matter, is going to raise a flag, and may have consequences.

And, Henry, having never been to such places, and despite everything he had read about them, and in that initial foray earlier, is no wiser on how to behave or how to approach the problem.

How much would the girls want just to talk?

It soon becomes a case of hot outside, the night is still simmering from the heat of the day, to hot under the collar inside.

Fortunately, Radly is known.

There are bouncers to appease, madams to charm, and girls to ask innocuous questions.

At least the Turk is not there.

Henry encounters a girl named Suzie, and it’s time for the first dance…

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The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 19

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It’s time to get some experienced help.

Often Radly his friend from the ship had regaled him with stories of his exploits in the red-light district.  Henry never quite believes most of it, but he was prepared to accept that he might know enough to be of some help.

Henry didn’t want to be visiting the parlours on his own.

But it does mean he has to tell him the true nature of the girl he met and wanted to go after.

Radly is honest, knowing a lot of the girls in the area, most either were not worth the effort, or more likely content with their lot and didn’t want to be rescued.  Poor souls who tried often ended up on the wrong end of a bouncer’s fist.

Exactly what Henry wants to avoid.

So, is Radly up for the challenge.

To find her, yes, but if she is trouble, or in trouble, or likely to cause trouble, then no.

Henry has to be prepared to walk away.

He accepts the conditions, and the quest begins after dark.

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Mistaken Identity – The Editor’s Third Draft – Day 16

I have been working on the story, the editor is asking for a third draft after making suggested changes – and I’m now working on it

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Today’s writing is about the results of the police calling on Jack after he reported his house being broken into.

They arrive.

They make the same mistake the Italian police did, mistaking him for Jacob, who since he murdered a woman in the hotel back where the conference was being held, and is still at large.

What would any reasonable person expect?

And along with this revelation is another, that his suspicions about Maryanne were right because the Detective has to let her go on orders from ‘someone connected’.

From this, we can infer that she is either a Homeland Security person whose been looking for, or had Jacob under surveillance before he was killed, or a private detective, though Jack has bigger problems to worry about.

He is being arrested and hauled off to the station for questioning.

And he’s not holding his breath that Maryanne will be doing anything to sort the problem out. She probably has her own problems now that Jack knows who she is, and the fact her mission has been entirely unsuccessful,

And, no, Jack didn’t tell her about the diary, but you can just bet that’s what she’s after.

More tomorrow.

The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 20

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For Henry, it’s going to be like walking into the twilight zone.

The odyssey begins at a place called Gringoes, a place both think is the last place a potential customer would want to be seen, but that is judging a book by its cover.

Both are going to soon discover there’s a lot more going on than what the eye can see.

This search starts out without a clear plan, and it seems that going in and directly asking for Michelle, which may or may not be her work name or any name for that matter, is going to raise a flag, and may have consequences.

And, Henry, having never been to such places, and despite everything he had read about them, and in that initial foray earlier, is no wiser on how to behave or how to approach the problem.

How much would the girls want just to talk?

It soon becomes a case of hot outside, the night is still simmering from the heat of the day, to hot under the collar inside.

Fortunately, Radly is known.

There are bouncers to appease, madams to charm, and girls to ask innocuous questions.

At least the Turk is not there.

Henry encounters a girl named Suzie, and it’s time for the first dance…

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The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 20

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For Henry, it’s going to be like walking into the twilight zone.

The odyssey beings at a place called Gringoes. , a place both think is the last place a potential customer would want to be seen, but, that is judging a book by its cover.

Both are going to soon discover there’s a lot more going on than what the eye can see.

This search starts out without a clear plan, and it seems that going in and directly asking for Michelle, which may or may not be her work name or any name for that matter, is going to raise a flag, and may have consequences.

And, Henry, having never been to such places, and despite everything he had read about them, and in that initial foray earlier, is no wiser on how to behave or how to approach the problem.

How much would the girls want just to talk?

It soon becomes a case of hot outside, the night is still simmering from the heat of the day, to hot under the collar inside.

Fortunately, Radly is known.

There are bouncers to appease, madams to charm, and girls to ask innocuous questions.

At least the Turk is not there.

Henry encounters a girl named Suzie, and it’s time for the first dance…

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Mistaken Identity – The Editor’s Third Draft – Day 15

I have been working on the story, the editor is asking for a third draft after making suggested changes – and I’m now working on it

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Well, we knew something was going to happen when Jack walked in the front door of his modest residence.

It’s been trashed.

We have the clues, we know what they are looking for – that item his mother fortuitously dropped off at the travel agency.

No one knows what it is yet, but it is going to be an important part of the puzzle moving forward.

And now Rosalie has it, it means that she is in danger.

Of course, this is the time to contrast his relationship with Maryanne, and that with Rosalie. Back, before he left, he realised he had a thing for her (though is ‘thing’ the right word to use?) and had said he would meet with her when he got back.

So, a meeting is set. Without Maryanne tagging along.

In the meantime, there is that disaster called his residence to deal with, and, of course, he calls the police to report the break-in.

We know where that’s going, don’t we?

More tomorrow.

The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 19

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It’s time to get some experienced help.

Often Radly his friend from the ship had regaled him with stories of his exploits in the red-light district.  Henry never quite believes most of it, but he was prepared to accept that he might know enough to be of some help.

Henry didn’t want to be visiting the parlours on his own.

But it does mean he has to tell him the true nature of the girl he met and wanted to go after.

Radly is honest, knowing a lot of the girls in the area, most either were not worth the effort, or more likely content with their lot and didn’t want to be rescued.  Poor souls who tried often ended up on the wrong end of a bouncer’s fist.

Exactly what Henry wants to avoid.

So, is Radly up for the challenge.

To find her, yes, but if she is trouble, or in trouble, or likely to cause trouble, then no.

Henry has to be prepared to walk away.

He accepts the conditions, and the quest begins after dark.

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The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 18

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The old sparring partners keep their distance.

Henry because he doesn’t believe Harry has changed, Harry because he knows if the old rivalry restarts, Henry will leave, and he doesn’t want to be the one to cause it.

It takes a week to break the ice, and, finally, the two can talk.  Harry knows Henry is pining over a girl, so he asks the question.

For Henry, as far as he’s concerned, that ship has sailed. 

But Harry has a piece of advice for his brother, don’t let Michelle be the one that got away.

So begins the Odyssey.

It starts with reading up on the circumstances and reasons for the existence of such places where Michelle works, and why women finish up there.  It branches into drug addiction, of course from a medical view, with his father having an excellent library of books on the subject.

He then does a tour of what is broadly called the red light district, during the day, where it seems hidden away.  Then he branches into the newspaper archives and gets a different perspective.  Research can only do so much.

After getting a call from Villiers, a relative of Michelle’s she had once mentioned to him, he goes to see him, and they talk.  Villiers says she has contacted him and asked him to pass on a message that she will contact him when she needs his help, and it is the first indication she had not given up on them.  Villiers gives him another perspective on her.

It also means that the notion he goes looking for her, to see her, or rescue her, he wasn’t quite sure, was the right one.  Villiers wants him to go and rescue her.  The question is, is she worth rescuing?

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