Category: NaNoWriMo

The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 14

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Michelle meets Henry on the dock in the pouring rain.

It only takes one look between them, for both of them to know this is not going to end.

But…

She is going to tell him the truth.

They go to her place, and selfishly she decides to consummate the relationship.  He is surprised but does not refuse.

…

It wasn’t my first idea to do this, I was going to have her deliver the truth and have him leave in disgust.  But, after giving them a lead in at the wharf, it could not just simmer and die. 

I decided then that she has to make a decision on whether or not she wanted to find a way for them to be together.  Angie makes the suggestion, earlier when she finally had to give in, that the only way they would get free of the Turk was to kill him.  And Felix.

It’s why I’ve kept the truth, and she relates it even when he doesn’t want to hear it, and refuses his help when he offers it, because he would not survive in her world. 

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She succeeds in getting him to leave, and it almost breaks her heart to do so in such a fashion.  Little does he know he left with something else.

He doesn’t go home, he finds another hideaway hotel and retreats back into himself.  Back on the ship a month or so later, the pain is no less than before, and it changes him to the extent the shipboard crew are dismayed, and the captain seriously considers making him ‘walk the plank’.

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Mistaken Identity – The Third Editor’s Draft – Day 11

I have been working on the story, the editor is asking for a second draft after making suggested changes – and I’m now working on it

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So now the truth, or a version of it, is out there, Jack now needs to find out who this Jacob is.

Well, he thinks he knows who it is, but he needs some confirmation from his mother about what she apparently has been hiding from him all his life.

Of course, as expected, his mother is being elusive.

In the meantime, I’ve been playing around with the backstory, which, sometimes never finds its way into the book. It serves me to get a better understanding of a character, of several, in what some might call a background paper.

I also wonder if this type of scenario plays out in other families, and if they were, or are, referred to as the skeletons in the closet.

We didn’t have any in our family, well, none that I knew about, anyway. I’m sure there were, we just never got to hear about them.

I guess that’s why often members of a family will go searching the genealogical records, and find out if they are related to someone famous. My wife reckons that she is somehow related to Harriet Beecher Stowe, the writer of Uncle Tom’s Cabin. On our side, we had a Luddite (who wasn’t really a Luddite – long story) transported to Van Diemen’s Land from England.

I know who won that forebear contest!

Today’s effort amounts to 2,438 words, for a total, so far, of 27,923.

More tomorrow.

The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 15

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Time, it seems, does not heal all wounds.

It’s time for Michelle to return to the snake pit, her nickname for the Parlour she had been sent to work, and the only good thing about it, she is reunited with her two friends, Angie and Millie.

She’s also back to dulling the senses with the drugs left at the house, and when Felix comes to make sure she is ready to return, he realises she has gone back to her old ways.  He is not pleased.

Henry is getting to the end of another tour, with a few weeks to go, and is admiring the sunset from the bridge.  The captain, hoping he does not have to put him off the ship, finds that a  talk to the Chief Officer has put him back on track.

At least one of them is happy.

Henry is still trying to reconcile the girl he met in Morganville with the girl he met last break and finds no suitable answers, just a whole host more questions.

Perhaps he should accept that he doesn’t understand women and one in particular.

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The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 15

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Time, it seems, does not heal all wounds.

It’s time for Michelle to return to the snake pit, her nickname for the Parlour she had been sent to work, and the only good thing about it, she is reunited with her two friends, Angie and Millie.

She’s also back to dulling the senses with the drugs left at the house, and when Felix comes to make sure she is ready to return, he realises she has gone back to her old ways.  He is not pleased.

Henry is getting to the end of another tour, with a few weeks to go, and is admiring the sunset from the bridge.  The captain, hoping he does not have to put him off the ship, finds that a  talk to the Chief Officer has put him back on track.

At least one of them is happy.

Henry is still trying to reconcile the girl he met in Morganville with the girl he met last break and finds no suitable answers, just a whole host more questions.

Perhaps he should accept that he doesn’t understand women and one in particular.

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Mistaken Identity – The Third Editor’s Draft – Day 10

I have been working on the story, the editor is asking for a second draft after making suggested changes – and I’m now working on it

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One third of the month is gone and this writing job is not getting any easier.

The notion that we can sit down and over 30 days, we can write a 50,000-word novel would be, to some, a preposterous notion.

For me, it is not. I have done it for three years in a row, and even without having a plan.

This one has a plan, but that plan only sometimes stretches to a day or two ahead, depending on how I’m going.

Today, it had been hard going because I set time aside to just sit down and write it, but you all know how fickle that can be. Devote time, and the words don’t come, have no time and try scratching in between a lot of other jobs, and the words are flowing.

It is annoying to say the least.

Bit, for today, Jack has discovered he does, indeed, have a doppelganger, and that he is related, which explains the uncanny likeness. Of course, he has been followed to the island, and run to ground in a park where the two meet face to face. Oh, and the doppelganger has a name, Jacob.

It could have got ugly, but Maryanne is there, though Jack is still not sure why, and her presence averts what could have been an ugly showdown,

Instead, some words of advice. Jack must ask his mother for the answers.

A fine time for Jack to discover that his mother has been lying to him for his whole life.

But, of course, any attempt to get her on the phone is proving difficult.

And it might mean the end of his holiday.

Our Jack is not a happy man.

Yes, word-wise we have reached the halfway mark, but story-wise, it appears it will take a little longer.

More tomorrow.

The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 14

…

Michelle meets Henry on the dock in the pouring rain.

It only takes one look between them, for both of them to know this is not going to end.

But…

She is going to tell him the truth.

They go to her place, and selfishly she decides to consummate the relationship.  He is surprised but does not refuse.

…

It wasn’t my first idea to do this, I was going to have her deliver the truth and have him leave in disgust.  But, after giving them a lead in at the wharf, it could not just simmer and die. 

I decided then that she has to make a decision on whether or not she wanted to find a way for them to be together.  Angie makes the suggestion, earlier when she finally had to give in, that the only way they would get free of the Turk was to kill him.  And Felix.

It’s why I’ve kept the truth, and she relates it even when he doesn’t want to hear it, and refuses his help when he offers it, because he would not survive in her world. 

…

She succeeds in getting him to leave, and it almost breaks her heart to do so in such a fashion.  Little does he know he left with something else.

He doesn’t go home, he finds another hideaway hotel and retreats back into himself.  Back on the ship a month or so later, the pain is no less than before, and it changes him to the extent the shipboard crew are dismayed, and the captain seriously considers making him ‘walk the plank’.

…

The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 13

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We are at the end of Henry’s sojourn and nearly four months have passed, what seems like a lifetime for both.

Michelle is back at work and using drugs to deaden the experience.

Henry is dreading going back home, because he has nowhere else to go, and he will not be seeing Michelle.  That ship, pardon the pun, has sailed.

Felix, The Turk’s enforcer (The Turk is the man who owns the parlours that Michelle and her friends work in, and the man to whom Michelle has an obligation when he forgave her drug debt) goes to see him and tells him Michelle is off to see Henry.

She had found out where and when he was returning and planned to meet him and tell him the truth, and maybe why they could not be together.  The Turk is sure she’ll return.  Now she’s back on drugs, he says Henry will be disgusted and that’ll be the end of it.

In her current state, far from how she looked back in Morganville, he might be right.

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Mistaken Identity – The Third Editor’s Draft – Day 10

I have been working on the story, the editor is asking for a second draft after making suggested changes – and I’m now working on it

…

One third of the month is gone and this writing job is not getting any easier.

The notion that we can sit down and over 30 days, we can write a 50,000-word novel would be, to some, a preposterous notion.

For me, it is not. I have done it for three years in a row, and even without having a plan.

This one has a plan, but that plan only sometimes stretches to a day or two ahead, depending on how I’m going.

Today, it had been hard going because I set time aside to just sit down and write it, but you all know how fickle that can be. Devote time, and the words don’t come, have no time and try scratching in between a lot of other jobs, and the words are flowing.

It is annoying to say the least.

Bit, for today, Jack has discovered he does, indeed, have a doppelganger, and that he is related, which explains the uncanny likeness. Of course, he has been followed to the island, and run to ground in a park where the two meet face to face. Oh, and the doppelganger has a name, Jacob.

It could have got ugly, but Maryanne is there, though Jack is still not sure why, and her presence averts what could have been an ugly showdown,

Instead, some words of advice. Jack must ask his mother for the answers.

A fine time for Jack to discover that his mother has been lying to him for his whole life.

But, of course, any attempt to get her on the phone is proving difficult.

And it might mean the end of his holiday.

Our Jack is not a happy man.

Yes, word-wise we have reached the halfway mark, but story-wise, it appears it will take a little longer.

More tomorrow.

The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 14

…

Michelle meets Henry on the dock in the pouring rain.

It only takes one look between them, for both of them to know this is not going to end.

But…

She is going to tell him the truth.

They go to her place, and selfishly she decides to consummate the relationship.  He is surprised but does not refuse.

…

It wasn’t my first idea to do this, I was going to have her deliver the truth and have him leave in disgust.  But, after giving them a lead in at the wharf, it could not just simmer and die. 

I decided then that she has to make a decision on whether or not she wanted to find a way for them to be together.  Angie makes the suggestion, earlier when she finally had to give in, that the only way they would get free of the Turk was to kill him.  And Felix.

It’s why I’ve kept the truth, and she relates it even when he doesn’t want to hear it, and refuses his help when he offers it, because he would not survive in her world. 

…

She succeeds in getting him to leave, and it almost breaks her heart to do so in such a fashion.  Little does he know he left with something else.

He doesn’t go home, he finds another hideaway hotel and retreats back into himself.  Back on the ship a month or so later, the pain is no less than before, and it changes him to the extent the shipboard crew are dismayed, and the captain seriously considers making him ‘walk the plank’.

…

The Things We Do For Love – The final editor’s draft – Day 14

…

Michelle meets Henry on the dock in the pouring rain.

It only takes one look between them, for both of them to know this is not going to end.

But…

She is going to tell him the truth.

They go to her place, and selfishly she decides to consummate the relationship.  He is surprised but does not refuse.

…

It wasn’t my first idea to do this, I was going to have her deliver the truth and have him leave in disgust.  But, after giving them a lead in at the wharf, it could not just simmer and die. 

I decided then that she has to make a decision on whether or not she wanted to find a way for them to be together.  Angie makes the suggestion, earlier when she finally had to give in, that the only way they would get free of the Turk was to kill him.  And Felix.

It’s why I’ve kept the truth, and she relates it even when he doesn’t want to hear it, and refuses his help when he offers it, because he would not survive in her world. 

…

She succeeds in getting him to leave, and it almost breaks her heart to do so in such a fashion.  Little does he know he left with something else.

He doesn’t go home, he finds another hideaway hotel and retreats back into himself.  Back on the ship a month or so later, the pain is no less than before, and it changes him to the extent the shipboard crew are dismayed, and the captain seriously considers making him ‘walk the plank’.

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