The cinema of my dreams – I never wanted to go to Africa – Episode 16

Our hero knows he’s in serious trouble.

The problem is, there are familiar faces and the question of who is a friend and who is a foe is made all the more difficult because of the enemy if it was the enemy, simply because it didn’t look or sound or act like the enemy.

Now he faces questions, not only his own but that of his commanding officer.

And the answers might not be what he wants to hear.

Breeman returned later that day, an agitated look on her face, the sort that reminded me she was having a bad day, and more often than not after a secure video conference with the powers that be at the Pentagon.

At least this time I was about to speak but had still not made the decision on whether I should tell her anything.  It depended on if she had any questions for me, and how specific they were.  I would tell her the truth.

She sat and head hunched forward in her hands, she rubbed her eyes and looked at the floor for a minute before looking back up at me.

“Your disappearance has set off a shit storm.”

“Because we were in the no-fly zone?”

“You knew where you were?”

“No.  One part of the sky over the desert is the same as any other.  I had no idea where we were when we were shot down, but I figured there are not many civilians armed with rocket launchers, particularly wandering around in the middle of the normal desert just waiting for a US military helicopter.”

“I would tend to agree with you.  Did Jerry tell you why he was there?”

“Jerry doesn’t talk to us enlisted me, nor deems it any of our business where he goes.  He did say, however, he was on a training run to supplement his flying hours.  But, whatever he was doing or where he was going, he needed your signoff.”

Did I just say that in an angry manner?  Not the way to speak to your commanding officer, friend or not.  I should apologize quickly, and did.  It didn’t change her expression, in fact, to me, it now looked more severe.

“There’s a flight plan with my signature on it, but it’s not my signature, but a very good counterfeit.”

“Any idea who the forger is?”

“No.  But they are on the base, here, what could possibly be a traitor.”

“Does it show whether the pilot intended to cross into the no-fly some?”

“No.  It was a usual path on our side, following the boundary.  It doesn’t explain the wreckage 60 miles inside the border.  Did you see anyone?”

Now it gets tricky.

“Just a rocket launcher out the side of a Toyota aimed at us followed quickly by a rocket coming straight at us.  There wasn’t much time to think.”

“You jumped.  It’s the sort of thing I’d expect from you.”

“Aside from hitting the sand, that’s about all I remember.”  It was a direct lie, but it could be modified or rescinded later.  This room was not secure.

“Did you see anything else?”

“Other than desert and sky?  No.”

She gave me a very long and considered look, and yes, I blinked first.  I had the awful feeling she knew I was lying to her.

“There’s a camp out there, somewhere, and what happened to you proves it.”

It was as far as she got with that statement, whether of fact or supposition, she didn’t tell me.

Colonel Bamfield just walked into my hospital room.

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Writing a book in 365 days – 280

Day 280

Writing exercise

Was this how it was going to end?

How did we get here?

That was easy.  I got out of bed this morning, even when I didn’t want to, because that work ethic my father had instilled in me from a very early age kicked in at 6:05 that morning, the same as it did every morning.

Without fail.

And i hated it.

I had said once in a conversation fuelled by too many bottles of beer that it would kill me in the end, and it was like a self-fulfilling prophesy.

A gun pointing at me by a person who self-confessed they had an itchy trigger finger.

I believed them.

Earlier that morning on the way to the office, the boss’s wife had called me and said her husband had forgotten an important file and since i was passing his house would I call in and collect it?

It was no problem; it was on the way and would not cause me to be late.

Not a problem.

Except… the boss’s wife was a problem and in calling it sometimes meant if was difficult to get away.

I drew the line in the sand before i stepped across the threshold, and that meant bring decent.

Stories abounded of her opening the door in her birthday suit.

She had done it to me before and I had asked her not to do it again.

Water off a duck’s back.

She had a weird idea about out of work fun.

This morning it was not a problem because something else was in play.  She had opened the door and stood to one side, allowing me to pass

I hadn’t taken 10 steps when two men appeared with guns and had me tied up in a matter of seconds.

It was not her idea.  She was too scared to have been the one to initiate it.  Not even when they roughly tied her up too.

They, whoever they were knew all of this before they got her to call me.  Yes, they knew we had been exploring the possibilities but not yet gone down that path.

Now it would be quite unlikely, depending on what happened over the next hour.

I was sat down after they tied me up.  Tightly.  Perhaps they thought i was the reincarnation of Harry Houdini.

I probably was.  Once.

Genevieve sat in another chair and made no bones about showing her legs under the short skirt.  Men being men they could be distracted.

Was that her plan?

If it was it was different from the one i expected.

She was a spy novel aficionado and was often rambling in about spy novel plotlines and conspiracies, and what she would have done differently.

I was one of those aficionados and had seem from the outset that combination of beauty and brains her husband failed.  She was to him a trophy wife.

He just saw a pretty girl he could exploit.

She was hoping to run distraction, and I was going to get us out of this mess.

Before her husband came home and made a mess of everything.

He was adept at stuffing the simplest of problems up.  Just look at his marriage.

I wondered if the two thugs had run surveillance on the location and knew what her true potential was.

I’d seen it, and a lot more at the last Christmas party.  Some gate crashers had taken her for an easy mark.

He ended up with fractured eye sockets a broken left arm broken right arm and a stiletto that just missed an eyeball.

He still held all the cards but was not quite so cocky, until she hit him with the baseball bat.

The 3vil underlying smile on her face told me that she was perhaps reliving that same moment in her mind.

An hour passed, several phone calls back and forth between one of the thugs and someone else, and judging by the thugs attitude, not happy with delays.

Who was he waiting for?

It was obvious whoever it was, was coming here otherwise we would have left by now.

Her husband?

Why?

I heard the front door open and close then hushed voices.  I’d also noticed that one of the thugs had gone missing, not that without his presences it would be any easier to escape.

What was also interesting was that she had not tried to speak to me since we were tied up.  Id asked a question or two but had been met with stony silence

Perhaps that was to establish there was no rapport between us.

Did she suspect it was her husband going off the deep end.

Then I heard the boss’s voice.

He had gone off the deep end.

She had too, and yelled out, “What the hell is this about?”

He came to the doorway and stopped.

I glared at him.  No point yelling.

“I would never have suspected you two.  The guy next door, maybe.”  He glared at me. “It just goes to show you can’t trust anyone.”

Was I supposed to answer that?  No.  Proably not.  He would have an answer for everything I said nothing.

He came over and stood in front of her.  “What do you have to say for yourself?”

“You’re an idiot, and you’ve lost the plot.  Whatever you think I’m doing, I’m not.”

“I have graphic images of you.”

That look of fury melted into a smile, a complete change.  If i was to guess, she was about to explode and all that would remain of the immediate 100-meter perimeter: shrapnel.

“Of my sister, perhaps, but not me.  You know about Angelique.  She was the stripper you screwed at the bucks party you said you never had.”

A momentary flicker, just enough to turn the self-righteous man into a doubting Thomas.

She had me investigate the nonattendance, where I discovered the missing tapes that were not as missing as they were supposed to be.

Everything had a price.

She nodded towards the TV.  “Play the tape.”

He had a death wish; he played the tape.  I’d seen it several times.  Her sister was much bigger in various places but to a drunk that would be the last of his concerns.  That and removing the mask she wore.

Yep.  Death wish.

“So, whatever this is Dave, you made a mistake.  Your third strike.  Call this off.”

He watched, ignoring her.  Perhaps he was reliving the moment.  I shook my head.

I was going to add my advice but didn’t.  He stopped the tape and the screen displayed static.

The thug waiting on the other side of the room.  “Take her to the shed.”

He looked like he was going to disobey then shrugged.  He came over dragged her to her feet by the hair and shoved his gun in her face.  ‘Any trouble I shoot you.  Dead.  Got it?”

The gun was enough.  The snarl was icing on the cake.

She left obediently.

He came over to me.  “I should shoot you but that would cause a mountain of problems I don’t need.”

“What are you going to do to her?”

“Teach her a lesson.”

“Not to use her sister to set you up?”

He pulled a gun out of his pocket and hit me with it.

It hurt.

I looked up at him.  “Now you’re going to have to kill me.”

Guns with suppressors made a particular type of sound.  People who didn’t understand the dynamics would call them silenced.  The thing is they are not silent, and if you listen hard enough, they can be heard over distance.  In the room, the silenced sound is quite loud.

He never heard anything.

Which was not surprising.  When I turned, returning from the outside was Genevieve, gun in hand and very distracting.  The second thug didn’t have time to put his eyes back in their sockets

Leo managed to turn his head just as she came in the door.  Two shots, two knees.

Accuracy of a woman who spent a lot of time at the gun range

This was now officially a crime scene.

She cut the bindings.  “Leave by the back, though the rear gate.  Like you’re not running from a crime scene.  Ill fix this.”

Spoken like lines out of a script.

A line ran though my head, was this how it was going to end?

I didn’t run, just looked like I was heading towards the back shed.  A short distance away was the gate.  Before I went through it i looked back.

A mess.

I shrugged and closed the gate behind me.

“Cut.”

The group outside the gate up until that moment highly focussed on getting the scene.  It was the fourth take.  The husband kept making mistakes.

And Genevieve kept improvising.

“This time,” I asked the assistant director.

“Finally.  Take a break.  Oh, and well done.”

One small step for mankind…and all that.

An assistant handed me a cold bottle of water.

“Just got the word.  It’s a wrap.”

She smiled.

And, at last I let out a sigh of relief.

Until I heard the blood curdling scream.

“What the hell…?”

The assistant put her hand to her ear, listening.  Then she looked at me.  “They were real bullets.  Two dead, one critical.  Oh my God.”

“Genevieve?”

“Gone.”

©  Charles Heath  2025

What I learned about writing – Even vacations can provide inspiration

It has any number of names, from Leave of Absence to Vacation, but it is meant to be a time where you can rest and relax.

And by the time you finally get to go away, preferably somewhere as far from home as possible, you are sure ready for it.

Those long days at the office, the decisions, the deadlines, the endless pressure of having to achieve the impossible all melt away when you walk out the door, and what a feeling it is when you tell everyone, ‘I’m off on holidays, see you when I get back.’

As anyone will tell  you, it’s not wise to travel the next day if at all possible, because you need some time to decompress before tackling what sometimes can be an arduous getting to the final destination, especially if it is at a peak holiday period, or on planes where anything and everything can go wrong very quickly.

Been there done that.

We traveled the next day, nothing went wrong, and all is fine.

Except …

As a writer and having spent the last few months finishing off my last novel, I was looking forward to some down time.  The editor has the final draft, and I’m happy.

Then, as it always does, the best laid plans of mice and men …

It all comes unstuck.

Inspiration often comes out of left field; something happens, a piece in a newspaper, an item on TV, or just lying down staring at the ceiling, when ‘bang’  it hits you.

The start of a story, a theme that you can run with.

Damn.

I’ve been away for four days now and written seven chapters and the words will not stop.

If only …

Hey, what a great title for the story.

Sorry, got to get back to work!

 

 

“Sunday in New York”, a romantic adventure that’s not a walk in the park!

“Sunday in New York” is ultimately a story about trust, and what happens when a marriage is stretched to its limits.

When Harry Steele attends a lunch with his manager, Barclay, to discuss a promotion that any junior executive would accept in a heartbeat, it is the fact his wife, Alison, who previously professed her reservations about Barclay, also agreed to attend, that casts a small element of doubt in his mind.

From that moment, his life, in the company, in deciding what to do, his marriage, his very life, spirals out of control.

There is no one big factor that can prove Harry’s worst fears, that his marriage is over, just a number of small, interconnecting events, when piled on top of each other, points to a cataclysmic end to everything he had believed in.

Trust is lost firstly in his best friend and mentor, Andy, who only hints of impending disaster, Sasha, a woman whom he saved, and who appears to have motives of her own, and then in his wife, Alison, as he discovered piece by piece damning evidence she is about to leave him for another man.

Can we trust what we see with our eyes or trust what we hear?

Haven’t we all jumped to conclusions at least once in our lives?

Can Alison, a woman whose self-belief and confidence is about to be put to the ultimate test, find a way of proving their relationship is as strong as it has ever been?

As they say in the classics, read on!

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“Echoes From The Past”, the past doesn’t necessarily stay there


What happens when your past finally catches up with you?

Christmas is just around the corner, a time to be with family. For Will Mason, an orphan since he was fourteen, it is a time for reflection on what his life could have been, and what it could be.

Until a chance encounter brings back to life the reasons for his twenty years of self-imposed exile from a life only normal people could have. From that moment Will’s life slowly starts to unravel and it’s obvious to him it’s time to move on.

This time, however, there is more at stake.

Will has broken his number one rule, don’t get involved.

With his nemesis, Eddie Jamieson, suddenly within reach, and a blossoming relationship with an office colleague, Maria, about to change everything, Will has to make a choice. Quietly leave, or finally, make a stand.

But as Will soon discovers, when other people are involved there is going to be terrible consequences no matter what choice he makes.

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Writing a book in 365 days – 280

Day 280

Writing exercise

Was this how it was going to end?

How did we get here?

That was easy.  I got out of bed this morning, even when I didn’t want to, because that work ethic my father had instilled in me from a very early age kicked in at 6:05 that morning, the same as it did every morning.

Without fail.

And i hated it.

I had said once in a conversation fuelled by too many bottles of beer that it would kill me in the end, and it was like a self-fulfilling prophesy.

A gun pointing at me by a person who self-confessed they had an itchy trigger finger.

I believed them.

Earlier that morning on the way to the office, the boss’s wife had called me and said her husband had forgotten an important file and since i was passing his house would I call in and collect it?

It was no problem; it was on the way and would not cause me to be late.

Not a problem.

Except… the boss’s wife was a problem and in calling it sometimes meant if was difficult to get away.

I drew the line in the sand before i stepped across the threshold, and that meant bring decent.

Stories abounded of her opening the door in her birthday suit.

She had done it to me before and I had asked her not to do it again.

Water off a duck’s back.

She had a weird idea about out of work fun.

This morning it was not a problem because something else was in play.  She had opened the door and stood to one side, allowing me to pass

I hadn’t taken 10 steps when two men appeared with guns and had me tied up in a matter of seconds.

It was not her idea.  She was too scared to have been the one to initiate it.  Not even when they roughly tied her up too.

They, whoever they were knew all of this before they got her to call me.  Yes, they knew we had been exploring the possibilities but not yet gone down that path.

Now it would be quite unlikely, depending on what happened over the next hour.

I was sat down after they tied me up.  Tightly.  Perhaps they thought i was the reincarnation of Harry Houdini.

I probably was.  Once.

Genevieve sat in another chair and made no bones about showing her legs under the short skirt.  Men being men they could be distracted.

Was that her plan?

If it was it was different from the one i expected.

She was a spy novel aficionado and was often rambling in about spy novel plotlines and conspiracies, and what she would have done differently.

I was one of those aficionados and had seem from the outset that combination of beauty and brains her husband failed.  She was to him a trophy wife.

He just saw a pretty girl he could exploit.

She was hoping to run distraction, and I was going to get us out of this mess.

Before her husband came home and made a mess of everything.

He was adept at stuffing the simplest of problems up.  Just look at his marriage.

I wondered if the two thugs had run surveillance on the location and knew what her true potential was.

I’d seen it, and a lot more at the last Christmas party.  Some gate crashers had taken her for an easy mark.

He ended up with fractured eye sockets a broken left arm broken right arm and a stiletto that just missed an eyeball.

He still held all the cards but was not quite so cocky, until she hit him with the baseball bat.

The 3vil underlying smile on her face told me that she was perhaps reliving that same moment in her mind.

An hour passed, several phone calls back and forth between one of the thugs and someone else, and judging by the thugs attitude, not happy with delays.

Who was he waiting for?

It was obvious whoever it was, was coming here otherwise we would have left by now.

Her husband?

Why?

I heard the front door open and close then hushed voices.  I’d also noticed that one of the thugs had gone missing, not that without his presences it would be any easier to escape.

What was also interesting was that she had not tried to speak to me since we were tied up.  Id asked a question or two but had been met with stony silence

Perhaps that was to establish there was no rapport between us.

Did she suspect it was her husband going off the deep end.

Then I heard the boss’s voice.

He had gone off the deep end.

She had too, and yelled out, “What the hell is this about?”

He came to the doorway and stopped.

I glared at him.  No point yelling.

“I would never have suspected you two.  The guy next door, maybe.”  He glared at me. “It just goes to show you can’t trust anyone.”

Was I supposed to answer that?  No.  Proably not.  He would have an answer for everything I said nothing.

He came over and stood in front of her.  “What do you have to say for yourself?”

“You’re an idiot, and you’ve lost the plot.  Whatever you think I’m doing, I’m not.”

“I have graphic images of you.”

That look of fury melted into a smile, a complete change.  If i was to guess, she was about to explode and all that would remain of the immediate 100-meter perimeter: shrapnel.

“Of my sister, perhaps, but not me.  You know about Angelique.  She was the stripper you screwed at the bucks party you said you never had.”

A momentary flicker, just enough to turn the self-righteous man into a doubting Thomas.

She had me investigate the nonattendance, where I discovered the missing tapes that were not as missing as they were supposed to be.

Everything had a price.

She nodded towards the TV.  “Play the tape.”

He had a death wish; he played the tape.  I’d seen it several times.  Her sister was much bigger in various places but to a drunk that would be the last of his concerns.  That and removing the mask she wore.

Yep.  Death wish.

“So, whatever this is Dave, you made a mistake.  Your third strike.  Call this off.”

He watched, ignoring her.  Perhaps he was reliving the moment.  I shook my head.

I was going to add my advice but didn’t.  He stopped the tape and the screen displayed static.

The thug waiting on the other side of the room.  “Take her to the shed.”

He looked like he was going to disobey then shrugged.  He came over dragged her to her feet by the hair and shoved his gun in her face.  ‘Any trouble I shoot you.  Dead.  Got it?”

The gun was enough.  The snarl was icing on the cake.

She left obediently.

He came over to me.  “I should shoot you but that would cause a mountain of problems I don’t need.”

“What are you going to do to her?”

“Teach her a lesson.”

“Not to use her sister to set you up?”

He pulled a gun out of his pocket and hit me with it.

It hurt.

I looked up at him.  “Now you’re going to have to kill me.”

Guns with suppressors made a particular type of sound.  People who didn’t understand the dynamics would call them silenced.  The thing is they are not silent, and if you listen hard enough, they can be heard over distance.  In the room, the silenced sound is quite loud.

He never heard anything.

Which was not surprising.  When I turned, returning from the outside was Genevieve, gun in hand and very distracting.  The second thug didn’t have time to put his eyes back in their sockets

Leo managed to turn his head just as she came in the door.  Two shots, two knees.

Accuracy of a woman who spent a lot of time at the gun range

This was now officially a crime scene.

She cut the bindings.  “Leave by the back, though the rear gate.  Like you’re not running from a crime scene.  Ill fix this.”

Spoken like lines out of a script.

A line ran though my head, was this how it was going to end?

I didn’t run, just looked like I was heading towards the back shed.  A short distance away was the gate.  Before I went through it i looked back.

A mess.

I shrugged and closed the gate behind me.

“Cut.”

The group outside the gate up until that moment highly focussed on getting the scene.  It was the fourth take.  The husband kept making mistakes.

And Genevieve kept improvising.

“This time,” I asked the assistant director.

“Finally.  Take a break.  Oh, and well done.”

One small step for mankind…and all that.

An assistant handed me a cold bottle of water.

“Just got the word.  It’s a wrap.”

She smiled.

And, at last I let out a sigh of relief.

Until I heard the blood curdling scream.

“What the hell…?”

The assistant put her hand to her ear, listening.  Then she looked at me.  “They were real bullets.  Two dead, one critical.  Oh my God.”

“Genevieve?”

“Gone.”

©  Charles Heath  2025

An excerpt from “What Sets Us Apart”, a mystery with a twist

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McCallister was old school, a man who would most likely fit in perfectly campaigning on the battlefields of Europe during the Second World War. He’d been like a fish out of water in the army, post-Falklands, and while he retired a hero, he still felt he’d more to give.

He’d applied and was accepted as head of a SWAT team, and, watching him now as he and his men disembarked from the truck in almost military precision, a look passed between Annette, the police liaison officer, and I that said she’d seen it all before. I know I had.

There was a one in four chance his team would be selected for this operation, and she had been hoping it would be one of the other three. While waiting for them to arrive she filled me in on the various teams. His was the least co-operative, and the more likely to make ad-hoc decisions rather than adhere to the plan, or any orders that may come from the officer in charge.

This, she said quite bluntly, was going to end badly.

I still had no idea why Prendergast instructed me to attend the scene of what looked to be a normal domestic operation, but as the nominated expert in the field in these types of situations, it was fairly clear he wasn’t taking any chances. It was always a matter of opinion between us, and generally I lost.

In this case, it was an anonymous report identifying what the authorities believed were explosives in one of the dockside sheds where explosives were not supposed to be.

The only reason why the report was given any credence was the man, while not identifying himself by name, said he’d been an explosive expert once and recognized the boxes. That could mean anything, but the Chief Constable was a cautious man.

With his men settled and preparing their weapons, McCallister came over to the command post, not much more than the SUV my liaison and I arrived in, with weapons, bulletproof vests, and rolls of tape to cordon off the area afterward. We both had coffee, steaming in the cold early morning air. Dawn was slowly approaching and although rain had been forecast it had yet to arrive.

A man by the name of Benson was in charge. He too had groaned when he saw McCallister.

“A fine morning for it.” McCallister was the only enthusiastic one here.

He didn’t say what ‘it’ was, but I thought it might eventually be mayhem.

“Let’s hope the rain stays away. It’s going to be difficult enough without it,” Benson said, rubbing his hands together. We had been waiting for the SWAT team to arrive, and another team to take up their position under the wharf, and who was in the final stages of securing their position.

While we were waiting we drew up the plan. I’d go in first to check on what we were dealing with, and what type of explosives. The SWAT team, in the meantime, were to ensure all the exits to the shed were covered. When I gave the signal, they were to enter and secure the building. We were not expecting anyone inside or out, and no movement had been detected in the last hour since our arrival and deployment.

“What’s the current situation?”

“I’ve got eyes on the building, and a team coming in from the waterside, underneath. Its slow progress, but they’re nearly there. Once they’re in place, we’re sending McKenzie in.”

He looked in my direction.

“With due respect sir, shouldn’t it be one of us?” McCallister glared at me with the contempt that only a decorated military officer could.

“No. I have orders from above, much higher than I care to argue with, so, McCallister, no gung-ho heroics for the moment. Just be ready to move on my command, and make sure you have three teams at the exit points, ready to secure the building.”

McCallister opened his mouth, no doubt to question those orders, but instead closed it again. “Yes sir,” he muttered and turned away heading back to his men.

“You’re not going to have much time before he storms the battlements,” Benson quietly said to me, a hint of exasperation in his tone. “I’m dreading the paperwork.”

It was exactly what my liaison officer said when she saw McCallister arriving.

The water team sent their ‘in position’ signal, and we were ready to go.

In the hour or so we’d been on site nothing had stirred, no arrivals, no departures, and no sign anyone was inside, but that didn’t mean we were alone. Nor did it mean I was going to walk in and see immediately what was going on. If it was a cache of explosives then it was possible the building was booby-trapped in any number of ways, there could be sentries or guards, and they had eyes on us, or it might be a false alarm.

I was hoping for the latter.

I put on the bulletproof vest, thinking it was a poor substitute for full battle armor against an exploding bomb, but we were still treating this as a ‘suspected’ case. I noticed my liaison officer was pulling on her bulletproof vest too.

“You don’t have to go. This is my party, not yours,” I said.

“The Chief Constable told me to stick to you like glue, sir.”

I looked at Benson. “Talk some sense into her please, this is not a kindergarten outing.”

He shrugged. Seeing McCallister had taken all the fight out of him. “Orders are orders. If that’s what the Chief Constable requested …”

Madness. I glared at her, and she gave me a wan smile. “Stay behind me then, and don’t do anything stupid.”

“Believe me, I won’t be.” She pulled out and checked her weapon, chambering the first round. It made a reassuring sound.

Suited up, weapons readied, a last sip of the coffee in a stomach that was already churning from nerves and tension, I looked at the target, one hundred yards distant and thought it was going to be the longest hundred yards I’d ever traversed. At least for this week.

A swirling mist rolled in and caused a slight change in plans.

Because the front of the buildings was constantly illuminated by large overhead arc lamps, my intention had been to approach the building from the rear where there was less light and more cover. Despite the lack of movement, if there were explosives in that building, there’d be ‘enemy’ surveillance somewhere, and, after making that assumption, I believed it was going to be easier and less noticeable to use the darkness as a cover.

It was a result of the consultation, and studying the plans of the warehouse, plans that showed three entrances, the main front hangar type doors, a side entrance for truck entry and exit and a small door in the rear, at the end of an internal passage leading to several offices. I also assumed it was the exit used when smokers needed a break. Our entry would be by the rear door or failing that, the side entrance where a door was built into the larger sliding doors. In both cases, the locks would not present a problem.

The change in the weather made the approach shorter, and given the density of the mist now turning into a fog, we were able to approach by the front, hugging the walls, and moving quickly while there was cover. I could feel the dampness of the mist and shivered more than once.

It was nerves more than the cold.

I could also feel rather than see the presence of Annette behind me, and once felt her breath on my neck when we stopped for a quick reconnaissance.

It was the same for McCallister’s men. I could feel them following us, quickly and quietly, and expected, if I turned around, to see him breathing down my neck too.

It added to the tension.

My plan was still to enter by the back door.

We slipped up the alley between the two sheds to the rear corner and stopped. I heard a noise coming from the rear of the building, and the light tap on the shoulder told me Annette had heard it too. I put my hand up to signal her to wait, and as a swirl of mist rolled in, I slipped around the corner heading towards where I’d last seen the glow of a cigarette.

The mist cleared, and we saw each other at the same time. He was a bearded man in battle fatigues, not the average dockside security guard.

He was quick, but my slight element of surprise was his undoing, and he was down and unconscious in less than a few seconds with barely a sound beyond the body hitting the ground. Zip ties secured his hands and legs, and tape his mouth. Annette joined me a minute after securing him.

A glance at the body then me, “I can see why they, whoever they are, sent you.”

She’d asked who I worked for, and I didn’t answer. It was best she didn’t know.

“Stay behind me,” I said, more urgency in my tone. If there was one, there’d be another.

Luck was with us so far. A man outside smoking meant no booby traps on the back door, and quite possibly there’d be none inside. But it indicated there were more men inside, and if so, it appeared they were very well trained. If that were the case, they would be formidable opponents.

The fear factor increased exponentially.

I slowly opened the door and looked in. A pale light shone from within the warehouse itself, one that was not bright enough to be detected from outside. None of the offices had lights on, so it was possible they were vacant. I realized then they had blacked out the windows. Why hadn’t someone checked this?

Once inside, the door closed behind us, progress was slow and careful. She remained directly behind me, gun ready to shoot anything that moved. I had a momentary thought for McCallister and his men, securing the perimeter.

At the end of the corridor, the extent of the warehouse stretched before us. The pale lighting made it seem like a vast empty cavern, except for a long trestle table along one side, and, behind it, stacks of wooden crates, some opened. It looked like a production line.

To get to the table from where we were was a ten-yard walk in the open. There was no cover. If we stuck to the walls, there was equally no cover and a longer walk.

We needed a distraction.

As if on cue, the two main entrances disintegrated into flying shrapnel accompanied by a deafening explosion that momentarily disoriented both Annette and I. Through the smoke and dust kicked up I saw three men appear from behind the wooden crates, each with what looked like machine guns, spraying bullets in the direction of the incoming SWAT members.

They never had a chance, cut down before they made ten steps into the building.

By the time I’d recovered, my head heavy, eyes watering and ears still ringing, I took several steps towards them, managing to take down two of the gunmen but not the third.

I heard a voice, Annette’s I think, yell out, “Oh, God, he’s got a trigger,” just before another explosion, though all I remember in that split second was a bright flash, the intense heat, something very heavy smashing into my chest knocking the wind out of me, and then the sensation of flying, just before I hit the wall.

I spent four weeks in an induced coma, three months being stitched back together and another six learning to do all those basic actions everyone took for granted. It was twelve months almost to the day when I was released from the hospital, physically, except for a few alterations required after being hit by shrapnel, looking the same as I always had.

But mentally? The document I’d signed on release said it all, ‘not fit for active duty; discharged’.

It was in the name of David Cheney. For all intents and purposes, Alistair McKenzie was killed in that warehouse, and for the first time ever, an agent left the Department, the first to retire alive.

I was not sure I liked the idea of making history.

© Charles Heath 2016-2020

Writing about writing a book – Day 11

Once again, instead of writing, I have been obsessing over the planning and creation of a website for the book.

And, that being the case, now I have to give the book a name so I can name the site/blog after it.

The word Starburst has featured in the story so tentatively I’m going to name it “The Starburst Conspiracy”

The site will be on WordPress.  There will be progress blog posts, there will draft writing and possible chapters for beta reading and comment.  There will be separate pages for each of the characters.

I’m not sure how I’m going to build an email list so perhaps I’ll build a following first.

So, having mapped out a plan for the site, I’ve made the first post and written the ‘About’ page which basically gives a bit of history about the book.

Bear in mind the original book of about 400 pages scribbled over a long period of time, and not really a book in the sense of the word (more a collection of ideas set in some form of chronology) and set in the early eighties and will probably stay there but will be the basis for the new novel.

Another interesting aspect of this exercise is to see how far I have come writing-wise in the last 30 years and how easy it is to spot the issues with the original manuscript.

I’ve also created a master page for the cast of characters and only a page for the main character so far.  Others will follow.

There will be another page with an ongoing, updated synopsis.

Shortcuts to these pages, as the information flows will be in subsequent posts.

 

For now, it’s back to writing, after a long gap, and the ideas have been churning in my head.

 

© Charles Heath 2016-2020

The cinema of my dreams – I never wanted to go to Africa – Episode 15

Our hero knows he’s in serious trouble.

The problem is, there are familiar faces and a question of who is a friend and who is foe made all the more difficult because of the enemy, if it was the enemy, simply because it didn’t look or sound or act like the enemy.

But, it seems our hero has ‘escaped’ and had found his way back home.

Except not quite how he expected it would be.

Rest was impossible while so many thoughts about my recent experiences were swirling around in the back of my head.  Now, when thinking it through, it made sense that they make sure I was found alive, but in very bad shape.

Two reasons, one, to remind me that they could do whatever they liked to me, and the second, to appease Breeman, who, no doubt realizing a helicopter was missing, would send out search teams, a no-fly zone or not.

But it was a calculated risk assuming I would not tell Breeman, or someone else, about what had happened to me, whether they believed it or not.

That led to the next thought, why was I still alive.  It would be just as easy to kill me and be discovered after dying from injuries received in the crash.  Supposition, they still needed me, or, and this was a hail Mary at best, they needed access to the base, and Breeman.

Did that mean either of the two men I’d seen at the other camp would suddenly turn up?  My money was on Colonel Bamfield.  He was my first Commanding Officer, he had a keen interest in me from the get-go, and he was the one who facilitated my transfer to my current base before I knew he was working for ‘other interests’. 

I still didn’t want to think it was the enemy.

Another question popped into my head, what was his, or their, interest in Breeman because the line of questioning centered on her.

My best guess was that it was no accident I was on that helicopter, that she had directed the pilot to make a flyover, and wasn’t expected that we would be shot down and that she had assumed there would be no repercussions on either myself or the pilot.

It was also clear that if she had to explain how I came to be where they found me, and the fact no one had launched a similar attack of the rescue team, that what happened was simply a breach of orders, and a court-martial offense.

It would solve Bamfield and his new friend’s problem.  Whatever the outcome of the court-martial she would be sent home, relieved of her command.

It seemed the military, as always, had a mind of its own, and not always have the best interests of its personnel at heart.

I’d soon find out.

© Charles Heath 2019

Writing a book in 365 days – 279

Day 279

Riveting prose for the dull banality of life

The Unsung Epic: How Everyday Life Becomes Riveting Prose

“Drama is life with the dull bits cut out.”

It’s a line that resonates deeply with anyone who loves a good story. We crave the heightened stakes, the emotional rollercoasters, the twists and turns that define our favorite books, films, and series. But what if I told you that the “dull bits” aren’t always so dull? What if the real magic lies not in eliminating them, but in learning to see the drama hidden beneath their unassuming surface?

The challenge is enticing: Can we take everyday events and turn them into riveting prose? My answer, unequivocally, is yes. And in doing so, we don’t just write better stories; we learn to live a richer, more observant life.

Beyond Explosions: What Is Drama, Really?

First, let’s redefine “drama.” It’s not always grand gestures or world-ending stakes. At its core, drama is about conflict, tension, and emotion. It’s about a character wanting something and facing obstacles in getting it. It’s about choices, consequences, and the raw vulnerability of being human.

Consider that infamous “dull bits” pile: commuting, waiting in line, doing laundry, making coffee. On the surface, these are the unglamorous necessities of existence. But with a writer’s eye, they become potential stages for micro-dramas.

The Writer’s Superpower: Perspective and Pressure

The secret weapon for transforming the mundane is perspective. It’s about zooming in, acknowledging the internal monologue, and applying pressure.

  1. Zoom In: A spilled coffee isn’t just a stain; it’s the sudden, hot shock, the ruined shirt on the morning of a crucial presentation, the ripple effect of lateness. The drama isn’t the coffee itself, but what it means to the person experiencing it.
  2. Internal Monologue: We rarely share the full, rich narrative of our minds. What anxieties bubble up while waiting for a delayed train? What silent arguments play out as we fold a partner’s forgotten items? The internal world is a universe of untold stories, rife with hope, fear, regret, and determination.
  3. Apply Pressure: Take any everyday event and ask: What if something goes wrong? What if the stakes are slightly higher for this particular character?
    • The Commute: It’s not just a drive; it’s a desperate race against the clock to pick up a child from daycare before late fees kick in. The brake lights ahead aren’t just an inconvenience; they’re a physical manifestation of rising panic.
    • The Grocery Store: It’s not just a shopping trip; it’s the careful balancing act of an elderly person on a fixed income, trying to make healthy food last an entire week from a dwindling budget. Every price tag is a small, quiet battle.
    • The Awkward Conversation: It’s not just polite small talk; it’s a son trying to delicately broach a sensitive subject with his aging father, hoping to connect before it’s too late, fearing misinterpretation or dismissal.

Unearthing the Micro-Conflicts

Everyday life is brimming with small conflicts:

  • Person vs. Self: The internal debate over whether to speak up, to forgive, to take a risk, or to stick to the comfort of routine.
  • Person vs. Nature/Environment: The unexpected downpour when you forgot your umbrella, the power outage during a critical deadline, the unreliable public transport.
  • Person vs. Person (Subtle): The passive-aggressive note from a roommate, the slight that goes unaddressed, the unspoken tension across a dinner table, the small power plays in a queue.

These mini-struggles, when given the prose treatment, become relatable and powerful. They remind readers of their own quiet battles and hidden heroics.

The Art of Observation and Sensory Detail

To write riveting prose from the ordinary, you must become an exceptional observer.

  • What do you see? Not just objects, but the way light falls, the subtle expressions on faces, the wear and tear of time.
  • What do you hear? The hum of the refrigerator, the distant rumble of traffic, the specific cadence of a voice.
  • What do you feel? The cold ceramic of a mug, the ache in tired muscles, the prickle of irritation.
  • What do you smell and taste? The comforting aroma of baking bread, the metallic tang of fear, the bitterness of burnt toast.

These details ground your reader in the moment, making even the most mundane scene vivid and immersive.

So, Can We Do It?

Absolutely. By acknowledging the inherent drama in our struggles, choices, and interactions – no matter how small – we unlock a boundless reservoir of material. We aren’t cutting out the dull bits; we’re illuminating the hidden drama within them.

Next time you’re waiting in line, stuck in traffic, or simply watching the world go by, challenge yourself. What’s the story here? What’s at stake for the person beside you? What internal monologue is playing out in your own mind?

The world isn’t just a stage for grand narratives; it’s a collection of countless, intricate, and often riveting personal epics, waiting for us to notice, understand, and perhaps, to write them down.


What “dull bit” of your day do you think holds a hidden story? Share in the comments below!